• Member Since 30th Apr, 2013
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RoyalUnicornJohn1994


Common guy who likes to play games and write art. Born and bred in Mexico. Viva mexico!

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Meeester
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Coverart removed. You'll need something sfw instead.

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Done, the image was removed by my own subnormaliness, and I just received a message from the ups giving me a tip. Hope this is enough.

When can we expect an update?

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The next chapter is halfway done, and still working on it. Expect it either around the weekend, or early next week, depending on how much free time i manage.

Once more, he whispered in her ear, causing a shiver of both, pleasure and fear to run down her body. "... dragons can control when and how much they cum."

(facepalms hard) Sigh...of course he can...of course they fucking can...

Also really? She didn't, like, go to the police about this shit or anything? I know you're trying to be erotic but is that worth the expense of making your main character so fucking stupid? And I don't care that she works in a computer store - I've met computer store clerks who couldn't tell the difference between a kid's educational game and virus software protection. Not a joke by the by.

Anyway...meh. The story does what it'd supposed to, I guess. Another mare turning into a slut. Nothing original but...it's what it is. I give this story a 'meh'. Average at best, really.

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At least you took time to read it before leaving a dislike or a critic. Most readers don't do that, and it seriously makes me mad, because critics are always a good way to improve, and the morons who merely go and put their dislike, even when they have every right in the world to do so, just DON'T contribute in any way.
You on the other hand, told why you didn't like it, and it's certainly appreciated.
Thanks for the comment and critic, by the way.

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Wow. That was a compliment I honestly never expected to hear. Especially from a clopfic writer on this site. You know what? I think I just gained a little more respect for you after reading that reply. Now YOU are a man who knows how to take a hint of criticism. If I could I'd pat you on the back for being a good sport, mate.

Now if everyone else took an honest opinion like you did, perhaps stories on this site could see a little bit more improvement. Seriously, good on you, mate. You're a decent example of how writers on this site ought to respond to other people's opinions.

In fact, I'll do you a solid, and I'll wait for the next chapter before leaving a more complete critique on this story. It only seems fair after how well you took the previous comment. So I'll put this story to my Watch list so I'll know when the next chapter comes out and I'll give a renewed opinion then, if that seems fairer to you.

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And it's certainly appreciated. Glad you took it well, and even agree. This is the type of conversation i Like the most. Thanks for the support, the critics abd the comments, pal.

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(double thumbs up to you)

Please give us new chapter)

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On the process, i swear! It's been already 3 rewrites because i didn't like how it developed, i felt it too rushed. While i'm not giving spoilers let's just say a mother has to stand up for their daughters every now and then.

you did an amazing and incredible job on this story. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: Are you going to make a sequel?

I don't know... maybe? I don't see much potencial on it to have a sequel.

Hmm... either it's just me or the plot in the second chapter seems shallow and not as well composed (as of this post) compared to the first chapter, which I enjoyed. Still, keep up the good work, R.U.J. I hope chapter 3 turns out better.

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That's because there wasn't much to do with Hellen. Go to Stunner's blog, or search her name or derpibooru and you'll realiza why she didn't need a... "special" treatment.

Is it just me or does anyone else, like hate this dragon? Being so controlling and manipulative, eeeeesh. (Gonna keep reading just to see if he gets whats comin >:D)

If not for her reaction at the PC unbalancing, it might have gone down.

Edit 8/27/2019:

Georgia suddenly noticed a specific video,

Just the thought of it made Georgia to speed up her movements

Georgia stopped putting her panties on when she found herself reminiscing about the dragon.

Edit 9/18/2019:

some of her black bra started to show from the sides of it, along with a lot more of fur.

Without her top on, more breast was allowed to be seen,

Georgia said, almost throwing away the controller as she ran back to her bedroom,

Her heart started to beat faster merely at the sight of him.

"Here you go... master." The dragon didn't say a thing until he was in front of her.

After a few moments, the door opened, and Georgia finally saw the dragon's apartment.

"Hmm... then, I won't have to worry too much."

All in all, it was a scene he had seen plenty of times before,

she could only see that cold piercing gaze he had been maintaining for the last few minutes.

"Of course it was!

she then noticed the feelings in her had diminished slightly. What had happened?

and you'll see what I'm talking about."

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