This story is a sequel to Oncoming Storm: Family Matters
Cloud Kicker's slowly been figuring out how to use the new magical powers she acquired from her girlfriend Rainbow Dash. Even if it was a bit of a shock at first, it's magic! Who wouldn't be excited to have it? It certainly makes life at CHS more interesting.
However, just because she has magic powers doesn't mean she can control them, and when Cloud's magic goes haywire it quickly becomes apparent that she needs more help than what Sunset can offer on her own. Finding a solution means taking a trip to the magical land of Equestria, but Cloud might not like what she finds when she goes through the looking glass.
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The unspoken reason Mrs. Kicker can't go is that her unit doesn't have a briefing book for out of dimension travel. Not to mention the hell it would pull notating it on her SF86 during her security clearance reinvestigation.
Something that has always bothered be about Equestria Girls is that it was so shallow. All the people (local to the portal at least) had pony counterparts which raises merry hell when you try to answer why. And the Human 6 of course grows wings and other features to mirror the Mane 6. To me, this always seemed a cop out, they were copying the "real" pony versions rather than having there own identities. I would have applauded if they mixed the tribes up and Sci Twi wasn't an alicorn but all those seemed to just support that Canterlot High was just official Hasbro fanfiction. Same character with some slight changes to the setting.
It looms like the differences between the pony and human version of Cloud will come up so big thumbs up for that. Looking forward to where this is going.
Nice to see this up. Granted, I like everything I've read from you, but I really like this series. Added to tracking, and looking forward to the next chapter.
Very interesting start. This worlds version of Star was hilarious! I’m rather curious to see how this Cloud reacts to what the other Cloud is like, though I am worried about how she’s gonna take pony Sparkler and Star dating! XD Overall, looking forward to the next chapter!
Well it will be interesting to see how Dash and Cloud react when they are with their pony counterparts as for instance Pinkie and Dash are together on the pony side but the EG one certainly does not have those feelings for her Pinkie Pie. Cloud will be seeing herself with Blossom and Fluttershy and potentially pregnant. I am also hoping to get more clues for some other characters since I like them a lot such as hoping for something random like Sunset Shimmer is secretly dating EG Pinkie Pie (because those blooper reels really seem to push that and it seems to work for me).
Oddly I am less invested in the actual story part of this and how it afects the actual main characters and I am not really sure why. For some reason I am just not finding EG Dash and Kicker to be as likeable as some other characters but I am not really sure why that is. Hopefully that will be a feeling that will pass.
I am looking forward to seeing Cloud stumble on four legs. I wonder how freaked out she would be by the tail.
"I will gladly rend existence limb from limb if it means getting you to use proper grammar."
"What was that?"
"Nothing."
Well, ever since that internship at that game company...
In any case, this promises to be very fascinating indeed. I love seeing humans go through the mirror, and this scenario should be especially fun. Also, excellent work in mapping Star Kicker to a modern teen. Looking forward to more.
it is weird i really want a pov story of this worlds star kicker im not kidding either i want that fic
Ok, I'm a bit confused here. I just read through what's posted of this story (after having read its prequels, of course) and I saw in the comments of this story there are people talking like there's a non-canon setting already established on the other side of the mirror. Is this story related to any of the author's other works or is it its own, totally separate universe and everything? I already looked through all the comments on the other two stories in this series and double-checked the story descriptions for anything I might have missed, since oftentimes there's a "This story is a part of the [Insert name here]-verse/timeline/series/continuity" line in the description for the story.
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Technically yes. The universe on the other side of the mirror is very heavily based on the universe established in Chengars and Ponibius’s other works, commonly referred to as the “Winningverse”. The only really difference is Sunset went to this version of the EG universe instead of fleeing to Freeport like in the main series. So people are discussing a more or less non-canon setting for the events to take place later in this story.
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Darn, I was kind of hoping that wasn't the case. Oh well, I'll still give it a chance. Thanks for clarifying that.
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No problem
Keep up the great work! <3
Seriously, I am really digging this whole expansion of "Human Cloud Kicker" <3
Oh my god, that's awful!
Oh my god, it's me.
Shots fired!
You'd be surprised. Church from RvB would know. His aim is AWFUL.
Her magic.
Fuck...
She has a point.
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This brings me immense amusement.
True. And while he's young, he can breathe fire enough to melt a huge ice cloud, has near impenetrable scales, and ones belly flopped into lava and then spat some out with no ill effects.
Gonna regret that.
Both Twilight and Sunset really screwed up there. Keeping two teenagers cooped up in a new world is a certain recipe for disaster.
Oh, human Cloud and Rainbow are going to be so disappointed. Actually, more Cloud than RD. One is indeed a national hero and Star flying athlete. The other...
Mighty Orphan Power Rangers...that's just gold right there!
Ohhh the upcoming is gonna be gooooood! A perfect set up here.
Sounds like they’re at the point where Cloud would have had her foal already.
Hehehe, this is gonna be good. The Rainbows have been doubled!
Heh.
In any case, results are inconclusive this far, and Twilight's really going to have to work on her hosting skills when it comes to human teenagers. If she thought foreign dignitaries were bad...
Plus, now there's dramatic irony thick enough to armor a tank. If pony Cloud does find these two, pony Dash may never, ever live it down... though there's also the matter of human Cloud's plans for the future. She may not react well herself if she learns what her equine counterpart did with her life.
Further proof that the correlation across the mirror is nit 1-to-1, not even for ponies.
Human teenager Rainbow is so annoying x)
Ohhhhh. This is getting GOOD! <3
I cannot WAIT until the whole "Human Cloud is not dating RD" thing comes out >=)
OO so close to having them meet Pinkie Pie at the bakery! I still believe that would be hilarious because I think human Dash would be even more surprised by pony Dash dating Pinkie than human Dash dating kicker.
Oooh... Yeah, about that, Cloud...
Prepare for ALL the awkward!
And two Rainbow Dashes. Twooooooo!
Can never have enough Rainbow.
I salute Rainbow Dash for a not-unreasonable and proportional response to seeing a younger version of herself and Kicker in the street. Seriously, RD, you did not massively over-react and do crazy things. Well done. Clearly you are the more mature of the two of yourself and that is a sentence I wasn't expecting to say this morning...
So you didn't bother letting anyone know you were bringing other dimensional counterparts of people over? Not even the native versions just to specifically avoid them getting attacked for being 'changelings?' AND ESPECIALLY GIVEN YOUR CLOUD'S HISTORY WITH CHANGELINGS!?
Geez Twilight, you're officially the world's dumbest smart pony.
Winning Kicker can help you out with that...
Assuming Star Kicker is still her personal guard in this story, shouldn't she have a little something in her freezer?
Man, Dash treats her friend Princess Twilight, who she likely hasn’t seen in a good while, like garbage here. I don’t think that she says a single positive thing to her in this... no greeting, nothing. She does however make sure that she knows that her scrolls are lame, her lecture is lame, her puns are lame, her ponifying words is lame, her magic is lame, her dimension is lame, her tests and lack of progress are lame, her food is *really* lame, her books are lame, and (since the problem with the Daring Do books on this side of the mirror is that they have ponies in them) that ponies in general are lame. Then she busts one of Twilight’s windows and brazenly does the one thing that Twilight feared would cause trouble in her town.
I get that she’s Dash, a teenager, worried about her girlfriend and chaffing at not being able to do anything (both to help and in general), but damn is she taking someone who was a dear friend who has gone through great efforts for her, her girlfriend, and her whole dimension in the past for granted while being sure to register contempt for every aspect of this Twilight’s life.
I hope that she wakes up and has reason to feel guilty about this at some point in the story. I’m eager for the main hijinks of the story to start with the revelations for our couple about their counterparts, but a bit on the side dealing with this would be welcome too.
I felt an insurmountable amount of dread as Human!Rainbow decided to break out of the castle. That dread was quickly dispelled when Pony!Rainbow discovered that Cloud and Human!Rainbow were in a relationship
Please, oh please, let Cloud Kicker find out about this so she can tease Rainbow until the end of their days.
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Well... She does have an "Army" of previous sexual partners :P
Well.
That got heavy....
...Hooooooooooooooboy.
Such a good set up to have a joke with "Pinkie is your girlfriend!" and go from there. Oh well.
I do not know this story seems so much as padding. I feel like the overall length is fine but this story does not accomplish much or do much. I do not know I was hoping for more in the story. Crossing over these characters has such good potential for fun but we do not get to really get much from it. Just a small argument and a couple really small jokes. If just feels like a lot of potential unrealized.
Wait, so Twilight and Sunset were able to make Cloud her own magic pendant? Aren't the pendants that world's version of the Elements? Or are you going with a more mundane explanation of "magical power-controlling crystals" or something like that?
Also, Pony Cloud's mom is dead, presumably KIA. Human Cloud's mom is deploying on a mission. If this doesn't involve Cloud using her new gun magic to save her mom's life, I will be sorely disappointed.
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Oh, damn, this could be foreshadowing some really bad stuff ...
Isn't Pony Mrs Kicker dead at this point of the timeline? Cloud didn't react when she saw her mom's human version.
Here's hoping this series continues!
This is what I listened to while I read this last chapter!
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What the hell did I just watch? Oh god my sides.
There we go.
Our voices always sound a bit weird when they're not coming out of our own voices. Our voices sound different to us when we speak because it's coming directly out of us and the vibrations create a bit of audio illusions that make our voices sound different to us than to others. Or something to that effect.
You're oddly chill.
Ah, that'd do it.
HAHAHAHAHAAA!
Turnabout's fair play, Dashie.
Oh yes!
I love Twilight Snarkle.
I love this stuff, it's amazing.
She's going to ANYWAY.
See?
Oh this is going to end poorly.
Thank you, Twilight.
She has a point, you're similar, but not the same. Look at the Twilights, one's a Princess, the other's, not, there's probably an age gap there.
I don't doubt that she does.
Now I want to see Cloud Kicker with a goatee.
She has a point.
They're there. Just, lower.
I don't doubt that.
Oh Christ, my life in a nutshell.
Yep.
And that's a Nat 1 on Diplomacy.
Fair enough.
Basically. They range from dangerous, to 'holy fucking shit why would you even make such a thing'.
So you're Saitama? That's, awesome.
Noted.
And all of them unpleasant.
I love these two.
Probably.
Ah, a catalyst.
Probably for the best.
Oh dear.
OH.
I like this. She may be younger, but she isn't stupid, she's read books, seen shows and movies and can connect the dots. She can figure out why she's being like this.
When that ending came I was hoping for pony cloud to hug her and never let go. Well, let's hope there's more chance for those two to connect.
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Hence my wishing for a happy ending where Cloud uses her badass gun magic to save her badass mom.
I do love how even Cloud Kicker finds Cloud Kicker's antics outrageous. (I'm with H-Dash on the pronoun front. It's part of the fun of parallel universes!)
And Sunset's background identity crisis rages on. Methinks she'll have quite a bit to think about...
Hmm. This raises the question of human Sparkler's origins, now that I actually know about those of her equine counterpart. If she has the same biological parents, then it seems highly likely that there's another reason for their putting her up for adoption, and that raises the question of what.
Yeah, basically. And vice versa, from the opposite perspective.
And the solution does make a lot of sense. Put in a control circuit, as with the other systems on display.
In all, some fantastic externalized girl vs. self conflicts with just the right amount of Raincloud fluff. Thank you for it. I just hope human Nimbus will be careful around bug monsters in the future...
It was really nice to see the Human Cloud and Pony Cloud talk and learn from each other. It was especially sweet to see Pony Cloud tell Human Cloud to appreciate her mom, despite her faults. Overall a really funny and sweet story. Very excited for whatever comes next.
This was a surprisingly emotional chapter. Not what I was expecting, but I am rather pleased with how this turned out.
You are one of my favorite authors on here. I hope that you continue to write more excellent stories and chapters <3
Yep. That's Rainbow Dash, all right.
Got some feels from the Pony Cloud / Human Nimbus meeting part...
Gotta be a flurry of mixed emotions there, knowing that an AU version of your dead mom is still alive and then suddenly seeing her.