The system let him down. School's "Zero Tolerance" policy and lackluster enforcement had forced him into a constant state of pain. The legal system abused him when he finally stood up for himself. He's been branded as a violent criminal. Well, he's getting the hell outta-dodge, but not exactly to the place he had in mind. Celestia wants to test her subjects, and he's her "perfect" person for the job.
Gore is for the hunting descriptions. So far.
Inspired by Human Nature by Blank Page. Good read, I highly recommend it if you haven't read it yet.
Chapters (12)
Awesome chapters, you are doing an amazing job, I can't wait to read the next chapter.
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Not the wisest decision, but I made it and hopefully it won't come to bite me.
I'll do my best to meet your expections!
However, they might not come out as often because I'm working on another story at the same time.
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It's cool. I can wait and the 2 others stories you made are incredible too.
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Yeah, I still feel like I could've done better with pt.1, but I'm glad you're enjoying them! You know the saying, "If you can connect with one person, the effort is worth it."
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your welcome and honestly you did a great job on all of 3 them, you are an extraordinary writer.
Great chapter
, I can't help but feel bad brian he didn't deserve to be attacked like that and I wouldn't be surprised if he didn't forgive mane six for what they did to him and wouldn't blame him either.
You'll just have to wait and see :)
Please continue
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I am, I am. Just trying to think everything through and make it interesting to read. I'm doing one chapter for another of my books, then switching to this one, and back again.
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Working on it. Should be a new one out tonight or tomorrow
Really great chapter, loved your story ever since I found it. Keep up the awesome work.
A another incredible chapter,
I can't wait to read the next one.
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Friendly word of advice, link to Human Nature.
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Still new at this, but I'll work on it.
You know what they say. Alcohol is the cause of, and solution to, all of life's problems.
Here's hoping he's not too forgiving
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Don't I know it! Fun as hell too
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Please have him punch Rainbow Dash in the face. If only for the comedy.
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You'll just have to see 😁
Said it before and I'll say it again:
To alcohol, the cause of, and solution to, all of life's problems.
Please continue
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Was that the Simpson's. I have a hat with homer saying that with a mug of beer.
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Not that I know of, don't watch that much of the Simpsons. But you know, the simpsons have done everything.
I'd ship it!
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Do the thing!! With Midnight and Brian!! Do it!!
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Townsponies are the worst.
Where is the 'slap the dumbass' button when you need it?
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Eeyup.
I like how you've done this. Most stories that start with a similar premise are kind of ... forced or unnatural felling this while it doesn't feel perfectly natural feels far better than most of not all I have read.
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Can't say I blame you.
Hey at least you didn't leave us hanging.
Sequel?
it said all this was a test in the description, but i don't remember Brian meeting the princesses in the previous chapters much less what the test was specifically (how would everyone react to a new creature of unknown origin and intent). could you make a chapter telling everyone how the princesses dealt with their subjects?
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Chapter 1, the princesses meet in his dream
Good story, the ending was like a pillow to the face while walking on a bus. It wasn't much, but it wasn't expected and over suddenly before anyone know what was happening.
You hada lot you could have done, but crammed chapters into two paragraphs.
Like and love it!
Next time don't send the guard to fluttershy job. By simply being herself and kind in his environment she could have gotten to know him without possible violence.
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What i can't understand is their reasoning for trying him up and taking him to twilight house. He didn't do anything to them so why tie him up.
I don't get why she is annoyed by the fact he knows that something works one way and doesn't care why as long as it works.
Be careful about working your self into OBLIVION with no R&R.Good story👍
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More like them trying to get the facts and not handling the problem with violence and rumors. They were supposed to be better than with zecora and instead they were worse. Twilight should have told people to stop with the rumors and as soon as she he'd facts about the stranger she would report them. Only those who actually know anything about the person should speak. In the meantime just leave him alone.