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BlazingShadowBrony


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Cortex has done it this time! In a mad quest to use the power crystals and the colored gems, he opened a portal to another earth. One he hoped to conquer without that bandicoot to stop him. But it was a save in the nick of time, as said bandicoot and his younger sister took all the clear gems and followed Cortex.

Nopony would have ever guessed that these three could cause so much trouble.


(I would like to give credit to Koromoshi from DeviantArt for the wonderful image! Also, this crossover is completely my idea, if it has been done before, I haven't seen it.)

Chapters (4)
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Comments ( 45 )

Interesting idea for the story. I cannot wait to read more of it. Please do keep up the good work. :twilightsmile:

Now thats what i call "A Hair Razing" Adventure... Good job on Crash Bandicoot if i do say so my self! :pinkiehappy:

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Lots of time in my youth wasted in that game. :rainbowlaugh:

Good start! You should probably make the next chapter longer though, still I liked reading this can't wait for more!

oh by the moon, crash bandicoot, now THAT brings back memories.

Excellent idea! You may want to draw it out a little more, spend time building character and atmosphere and describing emotion. For a prologue it's not bad though.

Want to read...
Too tired...
Will track so I can read in the... Oh crap, its 2:00 in the morning...

(My first ever comment round-up! Whoo!)
54657 54899 Thanks guys. You are the best.

54931 I know! I would always get stuck on a quick jumping puzzle. Although it was funny when he died. WOAH! :pinkiecrazy:

54979 55106 The chapter was made short on purpose. Why? Because I'm evil! Nah! Just wanted to see if the story would stick to the back of your minds, which it did, my inspiration drives me to write!

55013 Well THAT figures...GODDAMMIT! SONNOFAnaggingbit...*indistinct mumbleing*.........alright, I'm good. Funny comic, but this happens every god damn time! How? HOW!? :twilightangry2: Thanks for pointing that out though. :pinkiesmile:

55057 Nothin' like a bit of nostalgia to go with your ponies. Still tryin' to get the races done with at least a silver. Warped was hard enough without the races. Poor Tiny...okay I'm over it! :pinkiehappy:

55120 So...tired...must write...must...zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz! :ajsleepy: :ajsleepy: AH! Wha!? :derpyderp1: I'm awake, I'm awake! :derpytongue2:

*yawn* good mornin'
I shall be waiting for the next chapter, im going to go be bored in school now...

55180

take a break for ze sleepytimez, trust me, writing while sleepy usually ends up with some weird writing styles happening :derpytongue2:

55463 Oh the irony! I was getting the next chapter started on my iPod, and I fell asleep with it in edit mode. And then I turned into Sweetie Derelle, aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa. :unsuresweetie: I looked over the chapter though and it's unharmed. Next time I feel like a chapter can't wait, I'll have Crunch force me into bed or something.

55531 To clarify, I woke up with a long string of a's at the end, the rest of the chapter was unharmed. I'm so stupid for trying to do the next chapter at 2:00 in the morning anyways. :facehoof:
Now back to the chapter! :ajbemused:

wow, i've never had so many childhood memories flash before my eyes!
BEST CROSSOVER EVR!

interesting, veeeery interesting. I like it :pinkiehappy:

speak of the devil, i bet crash and pinkie are gonna get along real well.

Because Of you I'm going to replay all the ps1.( crash games because after that they sucked ) I can't wait for the next chapter!:yay:

60766 Heheheh! I know right! Ooh! My favorite memory is when I encountered Papu-Papu for the first time, and his butt crack was hangin' out! Hahahahahahaha! :rainbowlaugh:
I didn't stop laughing until the game over screen appeared, I was so busy laughing he kept killin' me. Hah, goodtimes, goodtimes.

60849 *Gasp* Ideeeeaaaaa! :raritystarry:

60852 Glad to hear it! Hey! If you get past the second foggy bridge levle on the first game lemme know! :pinkiehappy: Then I'll have someone to envy! :pinkiecrazy:
Nah! Just kiddin' mate! Though I personally think Twinsanity was the only good one after the PS1 series of games. Mind Over Mutant just made me :facehoof:

60967

why does that worry me? :applejackunsure:

oh well, if the plane's crashin may as well enjoy the ride :pinkiehappy:

60972 Nonono! Don't be worried! I originally planned for Crash to meet Pinkie first, but then the plan changed, and now I am going to make Crash's encounter with Pinkie 20% more random with double the Wumpa Fruits!
It's gonna be soo awesome! :rainbowdetermined2:

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What I can tell you:

Well ah could go see what the hay that was. But if it's magic, ah'd better get Twilight is a bit OOC. Also, try to express thoughts in other ways if appropriate. Don't abuse.

Constantly changing places and times makes the story hard to read
Title is too verbose for me, but you can leave it as is.

Remove some redundancy and unnecesary information like ,as usual,

Try to build up more personality for the characters, but avoid making pure archetypes and Sues.

I feel a misuse of commas. Perhaps not a misuse, but some sentences could be reworked to sound better.

You should get help to verify grammar, I can't help much here.

Use the necessary amount of adjetives.

Some paragraphs feel akward and superficial, I dunno how to deal with this. It happens to me. It is a combination of several things.

Thanks for writing this fic BlazingShadow

61038 Ach! I guess I deserve all of this, course then again, a friend of mine promised to help me with my fics...and he still hasn't done it. Oh well, thank you sooooooo much for your input. I will say this, I use italics to show it's a thought cause I've seen some fics where it's hard to tell if they're saying it or thinking it, I find it easier to distinguish between the two if I do that. The rest, I'll find the mistakes I'll touch the paragraphs up, and I'll reword the repeats. :twilightsmile: :yay:
And now, a random something to cheer you up.
:unsuresweetie:aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
*cough*aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa

61064 Ah! Buck it! We'll use both! With the Wumpa Bazooka, they'll be unstoppable! Mwahahahahaha! :trollestia:

61131

my comments are not doing the sanity of this story any good :derpytongue2:

I'll stop before we hit the point where the 4th wall is endangered :scootangel:

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61126
What I was trying to say is to replace things ( I repeat: if appropriate ):

But if it's magic, ah'd better get Twilight

She thought that she might need help from her friends.
Or
She pondered the oprtion to tell the others, but she decided to tell them only if it was a big trouble.

You know, non directly saying the thought. Sometimes, even, you can only imply it.

I said WTF more than once XD
Waiting for the next chapter :3

65742 Hee! I know right? I tried to think of the most random things to ever cross my mind, and put them into a distraction chapter, I mean...uh...Laughter-making chapter. :unsuresweetie:
I deserve a facehoof for that. :facehoof:

D'oh!
i picturd the wrong Evil Crash.
but that's beside the point:
:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

D'oh!
i picturd the wrong Evil Crash.
but that's beside the point:
:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

and here i am sitting with no socks, an empty box of crackers, and reading this just after i was sure that there should have been crackers in there...

freakin bandicoot ninjas...

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i saw you in tf2. 1 / 5 more ice.

lol intermission:rainbowhuh:

66344 Nah, he was just hungry, and he wanted to bury your socks to keep them safe. :twilightsmile:
I think. :applejackunsure:

66368 Oh, so that's who you are. Yes, I am BlazingShadowSword, you are an EPIC tf2 player by the way. The intermission is a distrac...I mean, it's a good author to reader chapter. :trixieshiftleft: :trixieshiftright:
Heheh.

FIRST, BIOTCHES!!!:flutterrage: I love zis story:rainbowkiss:, ju must continue it, my good sir, you simply must. :moustache:

When will this story continue ?

1538447 It continues as soon as I get out this writer's block...on that note, HELP! I'm running out of Cheetos!

1572093 Curse this infernal cube of thought dampening! It stole the Cheetos and my good ideas.
:twilightangry2: RRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!! :twilightangry2:

crash isn't really an idiot as it is explained by his impulsive nature and how he has no reason to speak english

Finish this story! I'm so addicted with it!:ajsleepy:

Yes! A story featuring me as a main character!

Please continue the story please, it's awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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