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I was referring to the reviewer in your introductory blog but figured since I'm not the reviewer I'll won't speak for him/her.
Okay. I have a solution to this. Have Big Mac take a lie detector test in court. He'll have to admit to raping Dash
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I see. I took that review very seriously because it was absolutely accurate. I hope that effort shows as the story progresses.
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Hmmm... perhaps. This assumes of course that Equestrian lie detectors are better than human ones and cannot be tricked.
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Add in truth spells with it
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I've been thinking how to respond to your comment for days because it really meant a lot to me. All I can really think to say is thank you. Thank you for being willing to give the story a second look and keep an open mind. That's absolutely the best response I could hope for, so thank you.
I don't usually comment but I just wanted to say thanks for the care you've taken so far in writing about this topic; it's a hard one to think or discuss about but important all the same.
Tracked and looking forward to reading more from you.
Hooray for an update! Can't wait to see how this all plays out! Good job so far, keep it up!!
...flutters said that....? W..well then..
I’m actually a bit disappointed we didn’t get to see what happened at Sweet Apple Acres, I was really looking forward to Applejack’s reaction as well as what Big Mac would do once the truth came out. I get that this story is supposed to be from Dash’s point of view, but it still seems like a missed opportunity to me.
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Thank you very much.
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I totally understand and agree with what you're saying. Being a fly on the wall for that moment definitley could have added to the story.
At one point in time, I considered shifting the perspectives around, so we'd see different aspects of the story that I just couldn't tell from RD's perspective. There were a couple of problems with doing that. 1) I really wanted to focus on Rainbow's experience and shifting POV to another character would really take away from that. 2) When I tried to write the other characters' perspectives, I just didn't have them. I could write a little scene, but I couldn't get a full chapter. So, rather than adding to the flow of the story the scenes were just distracting, and I scrapped the idea.
Haven't commented until now, but....
I do think this story is very earnest, and that both show and goes well with the obvious care you're taking in writing it. I can understand *why* you picked Mac, but I'll admit that it also seemed very off for Mac. Not just that he was the villain, but the *type* of rapist he was....
He seemed too talky, for one thing, and for another, the raw and seemingly calculated brutality does *not* seem like a first (or even second) time offender, but more like one who *was* already a serial rapist, and on his way to adding murder to it. That's probably the hardest part of the scene to swallow, particularly since he seems to be a monster ("corrective" rapist), but not a sadistic one. It's a big step from "I'm gonna show this #$%@ what she's missing" to "and now I'm going to hold her down and watch her kill herself trying to get away."
I do wonder how AJ is going to take this. Each option I come up with is darker than the last, and when "I don't believe you, it's not possible, I hate you" is second on that list, it obviously gets really ugly by option 5.
But what sticks in my head the most?
This is going to freaking *kill* the CMCs, however it plays out.
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Thank you for the insightful comment. Your notes about the type of rapist make a lot of sense and are incredibly helpful. I'm not going to go back and rewrite what I have, but I'm definitely going to take those thoughts into account as I continue to work on future chapters. So, thank you very much!
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You're welcome!
Of course, it's entirely possible that this wasn't Mac's first rodeo, as they say... Which is where some of those uglier, darker options come in. O_o
This is an amazing line, you are really capturing me with this story. Is it wrong I want to murder Big Mac right now?
I deny that.