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Will the introductory blog for this story also tell us why Big Mac is acting so horrendously out of character?
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No. The introductory blog doesn't delve into my reasoning for casting Mac in the role. It talks just a little bit about the research I did about rapists and the mindset behind rape, but that's pretty much the extent to which the introductory blog talks about Mac.
I've addressed that character choice in several other comments though. At this point, it's probably a good idea to combine those comments into a blog for those that are interested.
So, one thing has nagged me about this story above all else.
Rarity. Maybe it's because of Rainbow's PoV, but every action after Rarity's defense of Rainbow has been too pitch perfect. It's been giving me the nagging feeling that Rarity was raped before, or knew someone else who was.
So I started this last week and stopped because I just wasn't feeling it.
I came back to it today and read seven chapters. I'm feeling it.
The characters are surprisingly in character, the emotions are accurate for what they should be, and the court seems to be going about right so far.
My only question is was Rarity violated as well?
My only gripes are grammar, even if it is first person "her looked at me" isn't cool.
Second, the Equestrian legal system seems almost too human with its excessively aggressive attack at the victim to help "prove" her innocence.
But, your world, I'm just reading it.
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Thanks for giving it another chance! I'm glad things seem to be on track.
Yikes, you're right "her looked at me" is not ok. Can you tell me where you saw that so I can fix it? I don't think writing in the first person gives me an excuse for blatant disregard for grammar. Both my editor and I have tried to catch that kind of stuff, but we aren't perfect... obviously.
Victim shaming and blaming are a big part of the real-world conversation to be had about this topic, and I wanted to draw attention to that aspect of the experience for Dash. It's particularly relevant in this story, where the assailant has such a strong reputation for being the nice guy. I tried to not be too heavy-handed about it, but you have a good point. That thread is likely more prevalent here than it actually would be in Equestria.
You and 8836303 have both brought up this question, and it's a good one, that I'm not going to answer directly at this point. Instead, I'm only going to acknowledge that Rarity has not had the exact same experience as Rainbow Dash, but Rarity's history is a relevant factor in explaining her behavior thus far. That history will be explained more as the story progresses.
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“Where’s AJ?” I ask.
“Still in interrogation,” Twilight says quickly. Her only looks at me for a second and then glances away. Any hope I’d had that we’d wake up and stuff would just magically be better today dies.
You’re welcome xD
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Thanks! Fixed it.
...Ouch....