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Erzengel


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Not sure what this story tale but it's decent alright i guess. I have to wait for the next chapter though to find out

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Framed!!! I was framed!!!

if anyone is willing or knows an editor that is willing to edit this story please let me know. I have chapters 5,6 and 7 ready to go but I would very much like an editor to go over them before publishing.

I never understood FoE

Comment posted by Erzengel deleted Jul 1st, 2019

I'm a good bounty hunter. (i'm the owner of Gunrunner i'm also ERROR 1024 ERROR is gunrunners brother but you will never know if he will be in the story at this point)

I hope to see some updates on this, great rea so far, I want to know where the story goes!

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It's still going, we're aiming for about the same length as the original book

Well, this story feels like a mess sometime. But I like it. Keep writing.:twilightsmile:

9981233
Thank you, it gets messy because I frequently forget certain parts of the story

I hope this fic will be updated soon, I am totally hooked and can't wait for more.

10146858
Thank you, Also, you have great timing

Interesting. I like it. But you really need to work on the story's description. It's a mess.

Storm is too forgiving.

10148429
Heh, so I do, so I do.

Great chapter, can't wait for more! :pinkiehappy:

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Thank you.

Is the description giving too much information? I'm not quite sure what's wrong with it.

“Siren, what is your cutie mark?”

“I don’t actually know, it was just...there, one day,” she sighed heavily. “My best guess is when I started blackmailing, bribing making other ponies disappear…” She bit her lip and looked at me, a sad smile on her face. “Guess every rose has thorns?”

You know, this reminds me of an old folktale.

One lazy afternoon day a turtle was swimming happily along a lake. As the turtle was nearing land he heard a scorpion hail it from the muddy shore. The scorpion, being a very poor swimmer, asked the turtle if he would carry him on his back across the lake. The turtle thought it was the craziest thing he ever heard. “Why would I carry you on my back?” he boomed, ”You’ll sting me while I’m swimming and I’ll drown.”
“My dear turtle friend,” laughed the scorpion, “if I were to sting you, you would drown and I would go down with you and drown as well. Now where is the logic in that?”
The turtle pondered this for a moment, and eventually saw the logic in the scorpion’s statement. “You’re right!” said the turtle with a smile. “Hop on!” So the scorpion climbed aboard and the turtle paddled his big fins in the water. Halfway across the lake the scorpion gave the turtle a big sting, and he started to drown. As they both sank into the water the turtle turned to the scorpion with a tear in his eye. “My dear scorpion friend, why did you sting me? Now we are both going to drown…” the turtle was gasping for air. “Where is the… logic in that?”
“It has nothing to do with logic,” the scorpion sadly replied, “it’s just my nature.”

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A good description (as far as I know, at least) is supposed to let people know roughly what to expect, but at the same time be vague enough to not spoil any plot points. This description spoils quite a lot of plot points.

I'm probably not the one you should seek help from, though. Even writing this comment is mentally tiring for me. Instead, I think you should try to contact someone on this site that is more qualified, like Spacecowboy. He might be of more help.

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Oh, and please don't abandon this story like so many others have theirs. This story must be too great to not go unfinished.

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Don't worry it won't be abandoned.

The art is bloody awesome!

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working on it, don't know how long it will be though

Awesome story. Definitely adding to my read list. Looking forward to the next update.

The sex tag, is that by chance for future gay sex?

dang, i read through this way to dang fast due to me wanting more! great story so far it has me on my toes wandering what will come next! looking forward to more!

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