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Hawkysu


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The tricky thing about love is that it strikes without warning and often makes you fall for someone you can't have. For some, this means someone way out of their league. For others, this means falling for someone who is secretly a pony from another world. Good thing people always act rationally and openly express their feelings, right?

Special Thanks to Pascoite

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you turned me off with the first few lines

1. thats not how people talk

2. SUNSET HAS SHOWN NO SIGNS OF LIKING HORSES

Yeah. I'm with someone else here on the first few lines KILLING any chance of me likeing the story. Not going to downvote it. But good lord.

Either Sunset took a whole bottle of stupid pills this morning. Or the author said "Fuck it. Sunset talks stupid for no reason."

But I read it anyway. More for completion's sake than anything else. No better.

I don't understand what the deal with "the first few lines" was. It's immediately explained (and later elaborated) that it's Starlight and Sunset seeing each other through "cool"-colored glasses so they're using inherently awful dudebro speak to seem "cooler."

Anyway, onto my actual thoughts on the actual story: I liked it a whole lot, actually! The humorous elements were right up my alley, had me cracking up out loud on more than one occasion -- stuff like Fluttershy's demure, very "Fluttershy" text, and Rarity's whole... whatever that was with the pants and her vehement denial regarding the sensibility of their existence? Got me every time, can't lie.

The more romantic elements were cute, too though I'm gonna go ahead and throw out a #RIP for Sci-Twi and her distinct lack of being a Small Horse and the overall plot with the two doppelgängers showing up to cause havoc was interesting both in concept and execution, so hat's off to you for that, Hawk.

tl;dr: had a good time, got more than a few solid reactions out of me. Had to giving it a rating? Let's go with a flat Nice/10 and leave it on that note.

I find it funny people are butthurt with the way dialogue was handled in a fic that has a COMEDY tag... I mean, the opening line from Sunset had me laughing my ass off, and then the comment after that about her liking horses being the more pressing issue had me doubling down on that laughter. The plot was alright, though I'm not looking for deep storytelling in a comedy fic, so kudos, since I laughed a lot more during this than I usually do.

This was a really fun read! It was like a nice PG13 adventure and I think you nailed all the characters' mannerisms and everyone played off each other's personalities really well. AJ and RD had a really fun dynamic, they're super cute together!

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