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UnweptSchlipps


“This wine is too good for toast-drinking, my dear. You don't want to mix emotions up with a wine like that. You lose the taste.”

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The world is a big place with big problems, and frankly, the Elements of Harmony can't always be there to fix it. When a dark magic threatens the Crystal Kingdom, Princess Cadance is forced to bring together six complete strangers into a group called the Elements of Love. Unfortunately, battling an unknown entity together may not be the easiest thing for a couple of strangers to handle...

Pic from Akili-Amethyst on DeviantArt.

Gave this an AU tag, since this story was written before the Crystal Empire backstory was established. Assumes that the Crystal Empire has always been there, and Cadance ruled for quite some time.

Chapters (21)
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Comments ( 70 )

That's an intriguing start; it will be interesting to see how all those personalities come together.

I got my eye on you don't get mah hopes up mate

This has potential.
You have my blessings of success.

Interesting approach. I'm not quite sure how I feel about Cadance basically dropping the Elements on them and then telling them to get to work. :unsuresweetie: But I am curious about how this dynamic affects the ponies involved. :trixieshiftright:

1160113 I've pre-read up to Interlude 1 (directly after Chapter 9) and I have to say, it is interesting. Curiosity well spent.

Dropping characters in a situation often doesn't work out well, but I can see this working. Continuing to follow.

And of course, this is the part where the action picks up.

Expect more action (and bagels!) in the future!

Why didn't they just go for muffins? Everypony likes muffins. :derpytongue2:

Now the action is starting!!:rainbowdetermined2: I honestly don't know why this story doesn't have more views. It's amazing!!:heart::twilightsmile::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::yay::twistnerd::scootangel:

I was a little skittish when it was Lucky's turn. I'm glad you've found a way to keep him in.

You gotta love Celestia's comments.

1237753 Hmmm, I think I may know of a way to promote this story. But only if the author is okay with it.

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I'm so glad you're enjoying reading it! After all, I'm certainly enjoying writing it!
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What's that? Shameless promotion you say? Heck, I'm game. :derpytongue2:
But how 'bout you tell me what you have in mind first? I'll be interested to see what you have in mind.

1238786>>1239282 Ooh! Ooh! Can I help? Please?

... No?

Why?

NOT ENOUGH BUDGET?!

But I was gonna promote this to an author with over 400 followers and maybe get him to help advertise this...

(He's recommended me all these stories, why shouldn't I do the same?)

And we are finally arriving at the action. Now we've got around seven more chapters until your stockpile runs out.

1239282 Oh I was just thinking of the simple standard blogging that's all. Can't guarantee how many people will go for the story, but I do have 100 followers + 500 people reading my fan fiction. It's worth a try. All I need is your permission.

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God I love you guys so much. Seriously. No homo. :pinkiehappy:
Seeing awesome people such as yourselves want to help me, a humble writer with a mere 13 followers under my belt, it really does make my day. Of course you have my permission! I dunno if it'll work or not, but whatever happens, I'll still be extremely thankful for all the support. Let's get the ball rolling, y'all! :ajsmug:

1244780 Might get an author with 400+ to advertise. Doubt it though.

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I say we should start small I suppose.

Well I'm officially hooked.:pinkiehappy:

In other news, you have the 'comedy' and 'adventure' tags, and you have a filly killed by what seems to be slender-cloud in the first chapter.:trollestia: I love a nice dark story.:trollestia:

Soarin glanced around the room; however there wasn’t much to see. A small camera was attached to the corner positioned directly at the table, and two metal chairs were stacked at the side. At first glance, nothing seemed too interesting. But upon closer inspection, Soarin noticed something staining the metal table’s surface. Some kind of substance had spilled…or spattered across the table. The Wonderbolt found the very same substance coating the legs of the metal chairs, as well as dotting the floor. It was crimson red, unmistakable for the athlete, who had seen many gruesome injuries in his time.
This was blood. Dried blood.
What have these mages been doing? Soarin thought grimly. Reaching for the exit, he said out loud, “Come on Scoots. We need to get out of here.”
That was when a metal covering slid shut, almost amputating Soarin’s hoof.
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Oh snap,

Back at the Frost Star Sanctuary, and old mage sat in his room atop the tower, sifting through his trashed belongings. A robed pegasus accompanied the Arch-Mage, helping to clean up the mess.
The pegasus said brashly, “Surely you’re not going to let those intruders escape are you? After what they did to this sanctuary?”
But the elder mage’s voice was not panicked, nor angry. It was deep, quiet, and above all, calming. He told the stallion, “On the contrary, young one. That is exactly what we are going to do. Well almost…”
Staring out the balcony window, the Arch-Mage’s dark hood concealed the wicked smile on his face. He uttered, “Hear me, my loyal servant, and follow my orders. For they will all be of use to us…whether they know it or not.”

Oooh thickening the plot now are we?

Braeburn!? Soarin'!?

FUCK WHY ISN'T THIS FEATURED
THIS IS A RECIPE FOR WIN

Great chapter.:twilightsmile: Especially the Cadance and Cheerilee part.:raritywink: Oh and have you tried submitting this story to Equestria Daily?:applejackunsure:

Edit: Why are the words bold?:rainbowhuh:

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Equestria Daily, huh? I haven't given it much thought. You think this is really that good?

Bold? You mean, like, the little A/N at the end of the chapter?

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Huh. When I first posted the comment, the words were bold. And now they're not. :rainbowderp: I guess it's nothing. Anyway, Equestria Daily would really get more people to read your story.:pinkiesmile: It's really good.:twilightsmile:

This story is so amazing!!!!:pinkiehappy: How could more people not read this???!!!!:raritydespair:

1398464 Why don't you try advertising it to more people?

1345355 Wait 'till ya read a couple of chapters ahead. I'm the pre-reader, and the latest chapter I read? It deserves a 'holy shit' compared to that.

1364244 ED can't ignore this. Go for it!

Comment posted by UnweptSchlipps deleted Dec 29th, 2012

Poor Cadance... love the chapter, though.:pinkiesmile:

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That last line. It's really a precious saying that never gets old.

Edit: I'm kinda tearing up here.

whelp, guess i got nothing better to do.

TO DAH BLOGS!

Shtuff just got real. :pinkiegasp:
I found a place where there seemed to be a word missing.
But despite her blushing cheeks, the teacher said logically, “I mean…he’s saved my life at least now, and I know he wouldn’t have done that if he didn’t trust us. Besides, he did tell us this was his hometown. Perhaps he just feels…nostalgic."
At least how many times?
Loving the story, mate. Not gonna lie, the way that they were thrown together at the beginning had me worried, but you totally pulled it off. :eeyup:

Have you seen the new promo for season 3? Shadows in your story seems canon now.

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Duuuuuude. I'm, like, a psychic or something. Let it be known that shadows in the Crystal Kingdom was my idea first!

And the pony with the lightning bolt tail? Totally thought of that too. Except it was a stallion. But still...

“CUTIE MARK CRUSADER HEART SURGEONS YAY!”

After I read on Nurse Redhearts bit I nearly had Mg own heart attack

I like Soarin and scoots at this point in time... and curious how a filly is a bearer :scootangel:

Hooray! I'm already anticipating the fight with a heartbreaker! cdn.broni.es/images/emotes/mlp-pjoy.png

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Has absolutely nothing to do with this story.

Sounds good to me, I'm intressted

:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp: NNNNOOOO!!!! Both Soarin AND Rainbow Dash (I assume) are both dead???!!!:raritycry::raritycry::raritydespair::raritydespair:

1201869 If you ask Soarin' (or Spongebob), everyone loves pie. Ask an Apple family member, and apples are the best thing ever. Few people will support cupcakes, though.
The solution is to have an apple-pie-flavoured muffin with negative cupcake.:rainbowwild:

In the last scene, you referred to the group as the Elements of Harmony, rather than Love.

The Elements of Harmony sat in the Corner Club

Comment posted by UnweptSchlipps deleted Dec 29th, 2012

:yay: and apparently, Redheart is able to revive the dead... Without magic or necromancy... :rainbowhuh: Still, great story! You have earned a moustache and a half :moustache::moust

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