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Shadowflameking


What fun is there in making sense? -Discord, Lord Of Chaos. I have a Ko-fi Now, if ya want, buy me a coffee! https://ko-fi.com/shadowflameking

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Going to con can be fun, even more so when your dressed as your favorite character from a TV show that you loved to watch, But it can turn around and become quite confusing when you end up BECOMING the big triangle himself, careful who you talk to at con ,you never know what could happen.

Disclaimer I DO NOT own Gravity falls or any of its characters nor my little pony fim

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 94 )

Well at least this Bill doesn't act like how the one from the Show did, hope he doesn't try to take over Equestria, but then again this IS a former human turned into Bill so maybe he won't try what Bill from Gravity Falls did, wonder if he can take on a Pony like form, if so what would his cutie mark look like?

You need a proofreader. If you let me edit your story, I can do edits well! I do have school but we have a break, so I could help a bit. If you want, check out my stories. I proofread them myself, and I very seldom have mistakes! Buy Gold, Bye!

Names Bill. But you can call me your new lord and master for all of eternity!

I'll keep reading if only because I like Bill.

wowie zowie! this got popular quick!

Bill is literally discord if he was a 2D pyramid with a top hat.

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And if he had anger issues

Comment posted by INFUSCATE deleted Dec 30th, 2017

I would, but I cant find anyone to do it ,and I have been asking a lot of my friends on discord to see if one of them could help, none of them can
also much to my surprise this story has gotten quite popularand I wrote this at 1 am in the morning half asleep so I don't even remember writing half this stuff XD

its nice to know that there is another story that has Bill Cipher

“The demon who can turn your reality upside down and tear it apart like wet paper!”
My voice sounding deep and demonic.

My version (more or less the same thing...)

“The demon who can turn your reality inside out and rip it apart like wet paper!”
My voice sounding deep and demonic.

Great first chapter, hope to read more soon 😁

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Although isn't Bill capable of killing?

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Wouldn't discord be as well? It's obviously never been shown, but I'd think he could if he wanted.

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I don't think he does, except in Death Battle/fanfics, but that's about it. His form of chaos is about humor, pranks, being goofy, childish, etc.

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He has the power to manipulate anything from physics to reality, I'm not saying he would, but he could kill someone. All I'm saying

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Like I said, he would only kill in a fanfic or if he was going to be in the next Death Battle.

Meanwhile, back at Sugarcube Corner.

This seems unnecessary because we're already at Sugarcube Corner. Other than that good chapter.

Story interessing. I like this.

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Its done because "Bill" just left

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I get that but the reader has yet to move to a new location so having that pop up is just confusing.

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I said with a laugh as I teleported away with a flash of yellow.

This says he just left and the story is mainly told from his perspective.

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No I understand but we are missing a scene where he arrives at a new location. You can't have the pov character leave a location and then cut back to that same location it's confusing to read. When the pov character leaves you need to then either establish him moving to a new location or make it clear the pov changed.

... *smiles an insanely wide smile* Please continue sir.

Oh YES!! Go Bill!

Okay, HUGE complaint from me and writing 101. Use POV switches SPARINGLY. They should be used to to signify a change in scene, not a change in who is speaking. If you have to label something in a story because you do it so much, that's a red flag to stop doing it. My advice for POV switches is that you either, like i said, do it for a change in scene, or have it separated by chapter. With a POV clue in the chapter title. What I would've done in this chapter is had the fight be in Cipher's POV then have the introduction in Celestia's, showing off how he can read minds, and giving a better sense for the awe of Cipher's power Celestia was in. The story seems interesting, but it's really hard to get a proper story going when we don't know who we're supposed to be rooting for. Don't get me wrong, POV switches are a great story element, but they need to be done right or not at all.

I feel this going into "Golden Freddy" territory...

Oh look, a Displaced fic... with Bill Cipher... *eyetwitch* One of the greatest villains in animation history reduced to a loser from a convention randomly thrown into Equestria because TV Tropes... *the walls around Alondro begin to bleed and melt* Yes, oh my goodness, yes... I'm going to take my time with this one... make sure the pain never ends... :pinkiecrazy:

*and then everything goes back to normal* Eh, why bother. It'll probably die after a few weeks like most of the rest of these cookie-cutter self-inserts.

:trollestia:

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i resent that. ive been working on mine for months

I know the feeling of slow progress.

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Ssshhh.. You're making Hamster Master jealous for attention.

Was watching Evil Eye when this popped up.
Oddly fitting...

Hee, I know this is immature of me... ah f@*% it. I'm the 69th person to like the story! XD Any way this story is really good And you have Bills personality down perfect. I can't wait for more

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Thanls! while it may have been a few months since i last wrote something for this story i will be making a new chapter soon,and deleting that really short one and replace it with a better version

Definateley when she is alicorn but before tirek

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i just imagen tirek getting bitchslaped by bill XD

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That is why I want it to be before Tirek

twilicorn before tirek

Well... This one of the shortest and yet most amusing Chapters I have ever read. Good Job

all the yes

Wow almost 100 likes! if we can hit 100 likes i will make the next chapter an all out party in ponyville!

Decent story. Like it.

Good job, and good luck!!

What was the song, couldn’t find it on Genius

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