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Synesisbassist


A washed up old writer who still tries to live in a heyday that has long since passed...

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Great read! 👍

Nice work, hot and sexy...

Well written, doesn't try to be something it isn't, all around enjoyable....if you catch my drift :rainbowwild:


few grammatical errors but nothing that ruins it

The clock strikes midnight as you start to fall asleep, the warm mare in your arms snuggles into you as the fire burns to coal and ash.

And then they both get a carbon monoxide poisoning and suffocate to death. Happy Hearth's Warming!

I really liked this fic! A follow-up would be fantastic!!! ;)

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In a magical world of ponies, I don't think this'd happen. Anything's possible though!

Great and hot read.

Short, sweet, very enjoyable!

That was amazing. The world needs more Human x Fizzlepop.

The sexy parts where good but the lead up kinda took me out. The part where she tells the reader her real name just before getting the D made me laugh and I’m not sure if that was the intent. I guess what I’m trying is it all seemed a bit rushed, and I know because I’ve had to scrap a few writing projects because the I’ve gotten the same criticism. Don’t be afraid let it simmer a bit more, often times the meat of the story is how you can tie in interesting details for the plot. I feel like the reveal that Tempest had been low key stalking the reader should have been more towards the end of the bar scene. I hope you don’t take this as me bashing your work, it’s a good story. These are just my nit picks, keep writing and I’ll keep reading

This was a very nice read.

Lewd Fizzlepop.

I like it. :rainbowwild:

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... As someone who grew up using the fireplace to stay warm during the winter, I can assure you that the chances of that happening are awful small, slim.

I don't know why, but I feel like this story should've been filled with a more regretful-over-her-past Tempest Shadow. Otherwise, it was pretty good.

Good clop story as advertised. I would love to read more about these two though. Thanks Syn!

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Thanks for the comment! There will be a follow up coming this year as well! I'll be doing a full reveal in a few days.:twilightsmile:

Awesome! This was really fucking hot!

Your first night closing up, you forgot to lock the darn door. Now while most ponies are honest and law abiding citizens; a squad of drunk bat ponies found their way inside and drank till they all passed out.

Oi, we paid the tab and apologized. Not my fault the boys tend to get a little too excited after a long mission.

“I need you... Please for the love of Faust take me. I haven’t had the touch of a stallion in years.” Tempest nips your neck softly, her lips caress your skin making you shiver. Your body screams at you to do this, you need it just as much as she does. Life hasn’t been easy on either of you. But first... Looking down at the bottle, you quickly put it to your lips and take a few mouthfuls.

Couple gulps of liquid courage never hurt anyone.

I read this again every year when its christmas, its always lovely, cheers and merry christmas

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