This story is a sequel to Danger on the Tracks
Last but not least, it's Twilight Sparkle's turn. Twilight Sparkle is a girl of logic, and when someone close to her begins acting oddly, she firmly believes logic and reason can solve the case. But strange things are happening to Twilight, things that neither science or magic can properly explain. Will Twilight be able to figure out how to use her power before it's too late?
Inspired by the works of Lois Duncan.
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Hey there. Thanks very much for getting this next story started. I really appreciate you going to the effort. The exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-ups are all well done. I particularly liked Twi's (initial) reluctance to join in on the "fortune teller" idea, Rainbow's reason for wanting to do the fortune teller booth bit (indeed, the idea of cleaning toilets gives me A LOT more respect for professional maids and janitors), Rarity's reaction to meeting Twi's mother, the added details concerning Twi's family background in this universe AND the added bit with Luna's particular interest in the occult.
And, yeah, Twi, I don't blame you for getting a bad feeling. Something ALWAYS ends up going wrong in these kinds of stories (albeit "going wrong" in the way that makes for good story telling). So the bad feeling is, at least, you being at least partially Genre Savvy.
And, yeah, I will DEFINITELY be looking forward to more of this.
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Thanks!
....And I really appreciate YOU for taking the time to comment on my stories!
Again, an excellent job on this chapter. The exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. I particularly liked Rarity's meeting with Twi's brother and sister-in-law as well as what I'm guessing to be the big lead-off to the story's main mystery. Right now, my hunch is fifty-fifty on whatever Cadance got kidnapped and replaced by a shape-shifter (like in canon) or if Cadance got attacked by either a vampire or a werewolf during the camping trip (in keeping with the Romanian-inspired stuff in this story), but I will freely admit either one of those guesses could be completely wrong .
And, yeah, I will very definitely be looking forward to more of this, but will also understand if real life gets in the way.
Again, superb work on this latest chapter. The exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up are all wonderfully done. I particularly liked all the "fortune teller" scenes, especially with Flash.
I'm going to hazard a guess and say Twilight's new power is some sort of limited precognitive ability (kind of a cross between Pinkie's "Pinkie Sense" and the touch telepathy Sunset develops in canon), but I will admit that I COULD be wrong.
And, yeah, I'll very certainly be looking forward to more of this.
Again, great job on this latest chapter. The characterizations, exchanges and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. I particularly liked Twi's attempts to explain away her increasing concerns.
And yeah, I have a feeling that I already know how this is going to end up going down, but all I can say is one of my spoiler-covered guesses in an earlier review seems to be correct.
Once again, I'll VERY certainly be looking forward to more of this.
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Expect plenty of updates between now and New Years Eve. I'm trying to rap this arc up before the year ends.
(Except for tomorrow. I've got some Christmas Eve stuff going on then.)
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Completely understandable. :-D I'm wishing you the best on your holiday celebrations.
Hello again. Thanks very much for getting yet another chapter up before you have to deal with your family stuff. I really appreciate you going to the effort. Once again, splendid job on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-ups in all the right places. I particularly liked the reactions to MOST of Twi's predictions coming true. (probably ALL of them, eventually, but the "flat tire" thing just hasn't happened YET); especially from Twi herself .
And, yes, I will naturally be eagerly awaiting more of this, but I respect that family time has to come first; ESPECIALLY on the holidays.
Hello there. Thanks immensely for getting the next chapter up. I really appreciate you going to the effort. Once again, great work on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up. I particularly liked Flash helping Twi with her investigation. And, yeah that was probably a good call on Flash's part keeping Twi from speaking to Shiny . And, also that was a great cliffhanger. I mean, I know Twi and Flash will escape somehow with the real Cadance, but we don't yet know HOW.
At any rate, I will definitely be looking forward to more of this and I hope you and your family and friends have had/are having some Happy Holidays.
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And the same to you!
And, once again, very good job on the latest chapter. The exchanges, characterizations, action and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. I particularly liked how Twi caught a glimpse of Cadance's impostor alone with Shining AND guided herself, Flash and the real Cadance through the mines .
Pinkie: Yeah, but Twilight is stealing my bit!
Twilight: Look, I'm sorry about the fact that my power is so similar to your Pinkie Sense. I have no control over that.
Pinkie: Oh, that's okay. I was just trying to do a humorous exchange.
Okay. Sorry about that. Just couldn't resist.
Anyway, I will very certainly be looking forward to more of this.
Holy mackerel. This IS an intriguing chapter. Again, the exchanges, characterizations, action and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. I particularly liked how the others stuck up for Twilight and Flash when the fake Cadance pretended to make those accusations and how Chrysalis, after revealing herself, mentioned Twilight's resemblance to an old enemy (that is some good background info) . And, indeed, the cliffhanger is quite good. I mean, I know the heroes will find SOME WAY to fix the mess, but I don't know HOW.
Twilight: If you harm even one tenth of one hair on my brother -
Chrysalis: Tut, tut. Making threats you don't have the power to back up? Seriously? Besides, I'm royalty.
Twilight: Yes, a royal pain.
Chrysalis: I would think your mother would have taught you better than to bad-mouth royalty, but I suppose your mother was too busy writing bad attempts to copy Doctor Seuss to teach you those kinds of manners.
Twilight: Insulting somebody else's mother for cruel laughs - or yo mama jokes as Rainbow likes to refer to them - is one of the lowest forms of comedy and that was terrible EVEN by THOSE low standards.
Sorry about that. Got a little carried away again.
Anyway, I'll certainly be looking forward to more of this.
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Love it!
Again, superb work on the second-to-last chapter. :-D The exchanges, characterizations, action and epilogue set-up are all quite well done in all the right places. I particularly like how they helped Shining overcome Chrysalis's brainwashing AND how Twilight distracted Chrysalis long enough to give Flash and Luna clear shots at Chrysalis . That was some truly beautiful stuff.
I'll very certainly be looking forward to the final chapter. :-D
Hey there. Excellent job on this epilogue. Once again, VERY good job on the exchanges, characterizations and future story set-up in all the right places. I particularly liked the reactions to the reveal of Twilight's power(s).
As for Aurella's basis, the best I can think of is a female cross between Sherlock Holmes and Van Helsing, but I KNOW that is probably wrong .
At any rate, I will certainly be looking forward to seeing what you come up with for the next arc, but I am also perfectly willing to be patient because I know real world concerns need to come first.
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Thanks!
I actually based her looks on G1 Twilight and Faust's concept art.
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You're welcome.
And thanks very much for the correction. I figured I was wrong anyway.
This day is going to be perfect...
So, I predict that things happen at a place during a time with stuff definitely being involved.
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Of course, it's weirder when actually exchanging humerus...
Hello changeling or should I say changeling queen