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MaggiesHeartLove


Best known for My Little Pony Legend crossover series. I am a Christian, graphic designer and aspiring story writer.

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Avatar Korra and Twilight Sparkle's daughters, Princess Iris and Princess Akari have their hands and hooves full with preparing their very first Friendship Festival in Canterlot! Now young adults, the girls and their fellow Guardians of Harmony have alot cut out for them, but they are determined to honor their family.

The festivities are cut short when a mysterious pony from their parents's past named Tempest Shadow arrives with an army of the evil Storm King and invade their beloved homeland! The Avatar and the Mane Six have been turned to stone, and the children have been separated from their loved ones. Now, in order to save their families and their homeland, The Guardians of Harmony will do what no one has ever done before: Venture beyond the borders of Equestria into parts unknown!

Their skills and friendship will be put to the test as they face off against con artists, sky pirates and the villainous Tempest Shadow, who is determined to capture the princesses in order to regain her broken unicorn horn.

Witness all the magic, fun and action in this epic conclusion to the five year long crossover saga!

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You know. Maggie, this ride has been fun. I'm glad that I first stumbled on this story and joined in on this fun trip, if not for that I'd probably would've have been as deep into crossovers as I am now, and wouldn't have been able to meet such a good friend like you (and probably won't be able to put songs into stories as easily since I didn't know how to until I read this :rainbowlaugh:). But yeah, it can be a bit of a hard time to find a ending point for some big projects you're having fun with, and once you do end up finding that point it can feel a bit jerking on some emotions, knowing that you reached your point where the series is finally done, one way or another. But you know what? Memories of something like this are hard to get rid of, and I'm sure the Little Pony Legend series will live on, surely. And as for these original projects, well, I can say this: with your inspiration and creativity on the stories so far, from what I see, you got a bright future ahead. :scootangel:

God bless

Thanks, Hermano! I'm so glad I got to meet you through this series. It truly will forever hold an important place in my heart, as will your friendship. I'm sorry we never got to do that collaboration, but if so, trust me when I say that you have a whole bucket of creative and downright AWESOME ideas!! Don't ever doubt that. I've definitely learned something from this series, and it's that a story really can come from anything, even from fanfics. After all, it was this fanfic that pushed me to travel into new territory and explore my original works, so don't ever stop writing or creating. What you make for a fanfic today, might become an original epic adventure tomorrow! The borders beyond Equestria may look scary, but if you keep your chin up, much like the Mane Six, not only will you make new friends along the way, but even learn something new about yourself.

Never stop creating my friend, and thanks again for everything. God Bless! :scootangel:

Welp. Here we are. The final adventure. You know I still can’t believe that its been almost THREE years since stumbling across this series. This has truly changed my life. I made new friends, got back into fanfic writing, Even created my very first OC’s. Two of which I never regretted making. This has been one heck of a ride and I cannot wait to see what the future holds for your next adventure. (jeez im tearing up already heh XD) It will be hard to let this go always remember the good and the bad. mostly the good that this came out of. Thank you for making this saga my favorite fanfictions of all time (no exaggerating here) and here’s to hoping hearing from you soon.

God Bless and Always Write On!

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AWWWW! Back at ya, Hermano! As I told Ginga, never stop creating and take risks to see where the future takes you. Now, if you'll excuse me, I need to but ten boxes of tissues just to clean my tears! Take care, buddy!

wow. all in one go on this story huh MHL. ........ nice. :ajsmug:

All that is needed is a cover, and I can't wait to start reading it.

Cookie Cram Pie, you're in trouble. Well at least for a minute or two, anyways love the chapter!

I can definitely see Hozu as a Nick Wilde type of character, as well as Keith given his attitude.

I can almost see where this is going, but I'm not gonna spoil either.

Yep, there is definitely something going on between them. 😏

I like it! I'm sensing a strong connection with Capper and Chrysalis, well maybe.

Heya. So, I'm definitely going to TRY...key word being try....to give some of the other stuff reviews/comments later on, but it's late, we're out of time, and I guess I have a few start up thoughts I want to get down before I get lazy.

First off, there is definitely some good stuff in this story. Trying to balance out your own notes and style with the source. Particularly in trying to give Tempest...sorry, Fizzlepop Berrytwist, er, I mean, Rosalyn, something of a deeper stake in what's the end of your story. Actually though, this does also give me some...interesting ideas for my work. Particularly on some of the side conversations I'm planning to work in. And it seems that Iris is alike her mom in one way. Somehow, the family has a bad habit of falling for strays. Although, I do wonder what their children will turn out like. A mixture of spirit, alicorn and human? How would the kids even land on the power scale?

I also enjoyed that you took Akari in a different...yet still understandable direction for the story. As well as that whole thing where in each spot, one member got to element it up. At least a little.

And it was good how you tried to keep incorporating the whole family in for the final battle, even if just in hand to hand. Really a fine attempt to make this your conclusion to what's going on.

Now, as the creator on the fim legend story page, I'm not going to be done trying to get a few non-canon stuff in now that the legend is over. I won't let anyone add anything new to the core page, but if you're walking away, I can still say that I want to see what other creative things others might be able to do with the setting, ideas, and magical crossover stuff with what you created. Cause let's face it. Nobody's done with something until it's forgotten. And I'm going to do my best to ensure this saga is never forgotten. Because no writer on fimfiction has quite managed to have a commitment to this setting the way you've done for linking 2 stories. (now original work is another story, but I digress) And that deserves at least a little recognition.

I'm sorry that I was only truly be passionate in feeding back for Balance of the Heart, but don't doubt that I do see something unique in this series. Not just the Christian perspective, though one brother to his sister that was still rather enjoyable. But the hunting for some sort of creative uniqueness that goes beyond putting new characters into old settings. Digging for new ways to see things unfold.

Thanks for all this, and thank you for finally getting me to commit to finishing a story I started. Cause I don't want to let you down by leaving my part of the legend hanging.

Thank you, and God bless. :pinkiesmile:

wait....... you're not going to keep the story up any more?!? :pinkiegasp:

wow. now lets see if old friend will pop up from the 'murky' past.

Boy, Hozu must have had a rough life.

Ouch, talk about rough past.

And so the story, and the series as a whole, have come to a close.... But the memories they have left will always be remembered, for legends never die....

It's funny... The first LPL story was what brought me into this series, and now... It's finally finished. I mean, yes, there will be stories that will be inspired by it and even based in it, but even then, they won't stand up to the original.

Maggie, you have done an amazing job, and I have enjoyed this series immensely. I'm sad to see it end, but even I know that every story has an end, no matter how long it is.

And as a Christian, I liked how you incorporated verses from the epistle readings throughout the series, showing that there's a deeper meaning behind the scenes.

So may you keep doing an amazing job, and may God be with you always...

(reads the river part again) ........... it seems like you watched dr wolf's channel on youtube MHL. nice.

(reads the new storm king & punishment) :rainbowlaugh: oh MHL. you have such a wicked side to yourself.

:pinkiesad2: man. talk about a way to end the saga. but the hart is still in it MHL. jest know that well one door closes another one opens up for new possibility's. jest remember that ok.

I like as usual but why change tempests' real name in the movie it was fizzle pop berry twist

Hay maybe this doesn't have to end now that you've finished here with writing it you can do an audio version on YouTube that way we here and others can enjoy it more.


What do you think

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Not that I hate the name or anything, but I just felt it was more for comedic effect and kind of took away a bit of the angst I was trying to go for. Plus, Rosalyn sounded far so elegant and symbolic for Tempest. She's as lovely as a rose, but you know what they say... they have thorns.

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Oh ok and what about my YouTube idea

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It sounds like a good one, and one I have considered in the past. I will take it under consideration, but seeing as I'm trying to focus more of my creative energy into my original projects, and I do plan on editing older chapters it may take a while. However, I do plan on posting more artworks of the series when I open up my Patreon.

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Good for you and thank you

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I actually prefer that name over her canon name. It actually fits her character a lot more.

So it's MLP movie but with Avatar.

Unlike Iris and the rest of her friends… Hozu didn't have anyone. She had suspected it, but she didn't want to make too much of an assumption, and she didn't want to bring it up because she knew how personal that kind of topic was. Her father dealt with troublesome orphans all the time, so she understood that much.

Iris wouldn't go so far as to call her upbringing "squeaky clean", after all she did spent a big part of her early teen years wanting to follow in her mother's footsteps and being unsure of herself. That wasn't a pleasant feeling. Not to mention she allowed her desire to be a hero cloud her judgment and she placed her friends in danger back at the Dark Spirit Realm. But, she was in no place to say she had it worse than Hozu did. She had friends, she had a family, she had more freedom to go out and discover herself outside of the Avatar name. But Hozu… who knows how long he had been on his own.

Kage (My OC): You think a lot of things are simple, don’t you Iris? What reason do you have to think otherwise?

I’m sure you have a high position in power, considering you have a good relationship with your family and friends. You all probably had a nice upbringing.

Not all of us are lucky enough to get that you know.. Your family and friends are all royalty, so you have no right to complain.

"Maybe we should have!"

Mai, that was uncalled for!

"I'm sorry I said you had a 'squeaky clean' childhood." Hozu said between sobs. He sucked in his lips, tasting the saltiness of his tears merges with the rain waters. "I was just jealous. Jealous of all of you. You all have incredible powers, and everybody loves you for them. Everybody hatted me because of mine."

Kage (My OC): I feel your pain man.. *Pats his back*

Iris had been completely wrong about Hozu . He wasn't a selfish, lazy troublemaker at all, he was just a scared and grieving boy who wanted to have people to care for, but caring for them was what made him believe he was dangerous. He really did have a compassionate heart underneath that faux suave exterior. She realized how foolish she was to think otherwise.

Kage (My OC): Yep, he’s definitely like me..

Mai knew Hozu 's intentions were genuine, she didn't doubt that. But, his powers were still a mystery to them, so she was going to, at the very least, keep a close eye on them. Hopefully, Iris and Akari's magic would be enough to help out with that.

Still stubborn as usual..

And you wonder why you are my least favorite..

I wonder if she inherited that from her mother...

"Well, yeah, but if you do that then you'll just be stuck in the same place for the rest of your life. So… which is worse?"

I would rather keep myself from getting hurt and stay in solitude. I came to conclusion that I don’t need any of that, because the world doesn’t want me. Therefore, I embrace the isolation.

To quote a fictional character: “If the world continues to reject me, then I shall reject the world.”

Okay..

So..

*Takes a deep breath*

Okay, Maggie, I really do like your stories.. but I feel like some chapters should be addressed.

Now this rant was BEFORE we talked. Like about a few years ago, before we met, so I don’t want you to get the wrong idea. I just need to get this out because it’s been festering inside of me for about 2-3 years..

Okay.. ready..?

Alright, here I go...

First off, the story is really great, as usual. The characters are fleshed our and I like Hozu’s character.

Now onto the cons and oh boy.. I have a lot of problems for some of the chapters.. in my opinion that is.

Also I might add my OC there because he is based off of my negative emotions..

Okay.. Here I go, because this is going to be long..

First off, let’s start with these quotes from the chapter, Space Between:

"Explain what? You saw what happened, we all did!" Mai marched towards Hozu, who had now stood up, yet stared at the young woman in terror. She was a couple heads shorter than him, and yet she carried a truly intimidating presence that rivaled Queen Novo herself. "That was our last chance. Our last chance and you messed it up, just like everything else!"

Kage (My OC): Mai.. let’s not do anything rash.. *Slowly grows frustrated.*

"He's unstable, and dangerous. For all we know, he was going to use the pearl to turn himself human!"

Kage (My OC): That’s it!! *Kage punches her hard* If he wanted to do that, he would’ve done it by now! Has it ever occurred to you that some people are trying to redeem themselves, or are you so stubborn to understand that?!”

Then this quote below:

Mai felt like the biggest idiot. This whole time, she had blamed Hozu for what happened, but he was innocent the whole time. She accused him of being the source of all their misfortunes only to realize he was trying to save Akari from getting caught…. and that's why he left now. He didn't want Akari to take the blame for something he didn't do. He didn't want them to be angry with her, so he sacrificed his friendship with them for her.

This is why Mai is my least favorite character! I at least like to listen first and not jump to conclusions, because it happened to me many times. She CHOSE to let her emotions get the best of her!!

If my OC (Kage) was there, he would’ve told her this:

“Mai, let me give you some advice. There’s nothing wrong with showing concern for someone, but that does not give you the excuse of being ignorant of what’s going on around you.. especially to those that are important to you.

Forgetting what is really important, blinds you and makes you easily prone to anger and frustration. I think you will find that the things we say that we end up regretting the most, are the things that we say in our anger and frustration..

..because they’re often the last things we ever say to someone..”

Akari couldn't stay any longer. She spread out her wings and flew off to the high peek of one of the rocks, ignoring Gallant Steed calling out her name. The other Guardians knew that what Akari did was wrong. Attempting to steal the seaponies' pearl, and letting Hozu take the blame like that was uncalled for. It wasn't like Akari to do something like this, but at the same time they should have realized she was going through so much pressure.

Now this.. here’s something interesting I found out about this paragraph:

When Akari tried to steal the Pearl, I think she offended just about every single one of the Elements of Harmony.

Examples:

  • Pinkie: Laughter means bringing smiles to everyone. Those smiles all disappeared when they found out that did this.
  • Applejack: lied to her friends and used them as a distraction. As a result, Hozu had to take the blame to save her ***.
  • Fluttershy: indirectly spat in the face of the merponies/hippogriffs’ hospitality with her attempted theft.
  • Rarity: The very act of stealing is the opposite of generosity.
  • Rainbow Dash: betrayed her friends' and the hippogriff's trust when she attempted to steal the Pearl.
  • Twilight Sparkle: Ironically, ’s act even betrayed her own mother’s element: she chose the magic of the pearl, instead of friendship to convince the hippogriffs to help.

As a result, Hozu was blamed for something he didn’t do! “Why Akari?” indeed.

That goes for everyone else. Including Mai. I don’t mean to be negative, but like I said she’s one of my least favorite characters of this story series.

The fact that she just jump to conclusions and antagonize Hozu, all because of a mistake that he didn’t cause, when all he was doing was trying to keep from getting in trouble.

Jeez, this is like Shadow of Ronin all over again..

And if anyone else tells me to be quiet and just get over it, well I got news for them (not you because you are understanding):

I don’t care. I did get over it. But every time, this keeps coming back like the plague.

And another thing: I tried to get over it when I read “Amending Fences: Part 2,” but the fact that Korra used some sort of ankle bracelet or whatever it is on her old friend, it really rubbed me the wrong way. But I eventually got over it, but still has bitterness deep down.

Then when “Shadow of Ronin” came out and they treated Nova like he’s beneath them, that was strike two for me. Now that made by someone else, so it’s different.

Now when this story came out, and Iris did the same thing that Korra did—which was performing that spell to keep Hozu in line and treat him like a dog—I grew even more bitterness, and was on the verge of exploding in rage.

Then when the chapter of trying to steal the petal and Hozu had to take the blame for it, I finally snapped and wanted to strangle/beat up the entire team (sans Hozu) for their own recklessness, ignorance, and stupidity.

Who the **** do they think they are?! Just because they are the children of the Team Avatar doesn’t mean they can do whatever the **** they want!!

I don’t ****ing care if Iris is the new princess or new Avatar!! I know this is fiction and it’s not supposed to be real, but still, in my opinion, she’s being a Mary Sue. A story about her wielding a sword of ancient power, realizing she’s the new Avatar, AND finally getting her cutie mark at the same time?!

Yeah, I’m sorry but.. I don’t buy that...

Now onto a quote from the chapter, Open your eyes:

If Twilight Sparkle was with child and only found out today, then that could only mean that that magical blast was not only infused with her own magic, but the magic of her the already growing child within. Nothing was more dangerous than unkept alicorn magic, and an infant alicorn's magic was known for being both the most powerful and most dangerous of all.

Now, this part with Tempest Shadow getting her horn broken because of Twilight’s pregnancy?

*Takes a deep breath*

Maggie.. I’m going to tell you this very personally. That part was the main reason why I hate pregnancy. The part where she got her horn broke off because of a magical pregnancy or some s***. Yes, you writing that was the reason why I despise pregnancy.

You’re not at fault.. this is just how I perceived it.. I find that to be unfair for Tempest, so it’s my fault for perceiving that, because I always sympathize with tragic villains.

But I’m not done yet, back to Hozu’s “betrayal,” what gives them the right to treat him like this?! Just because these children are related to the Princesses doesn’t make them special! I’ve heard little about their children.

To quote someone: “Titles create expectations. They do not bestow qualities.”

I was honestly hoping that they might have learned something from experience or from their parents, if everything I’d heard about was true, but their display of actions just now tells me they haven’t. Their nothing but a bunch of reckless kids!! They remind me of myself when I was like that, which I don’t like.

And another thing: just because they are like their parents, they’re no different than them. These children are no better than their parents when they encountered Nova for the first time!!

*Breathes heavily*

So yeah, that’s my rant... I needed to get it out because I’ve been holding it in for so long that I drove me to bitterness..

I’m so sorry.. I just needed to get this out because it’s been festering inside of me for a few years..

This is the true reason why I wanted to make stories that connect to every one else’s story worlds.. To teach them a lesson.. to bring them the harsh truth...

I just wanted to tell you this because.. this is why I’m always frustrated, cynical and full of doubts... Because whenever I voice my opinions on how I perceive things, some writers are too full of themselves and act like they are above everyone else.

But you.. you’re different than everyone else.. and I respect that...

So again, I’m sorry if I hurt you with my rant... *Looks down*

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Well, that’s unhealthy. Sounds like going away is the easy route, and easy doesn’t always mean wise or smart choice. To quote another fictional character: Yes, the past can hurt, but the way I see it you can either run from it, or learn from it.

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Honey, I’ve been beaten down by harsher critics than you and those words left me in tears and even beating myself up over it. I’ve grown past it since.

Though, I don't understand how a fictional pregnancy involving a magical cartoon horse can make you hate pregnancy in general. What does that have to do with real life pregnancies? I just did not understand that part, if I am being honest.

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I don’t know Maggie...

Maybe I just have an inferiority complex.. the fact that I can’t get over that people are better than me no matter how hard I try to be good..

The pregnancy part is like this: Imagine that you are alone and have no friends because you are different.. then you have a friend that actually understands and respects you.. and you started hanging out and have some memories to make...

Then one day you have to depart...

Then a few years later, your friend has a happy family.. and you are just a broken, depressed, person who is full of regrets..

Regret for not starting a family
Regret for being consumed by work and loss..
Regret for just.. not moving on..

That’s how I see myself.. I’m a person who is bitter and cynical, but deep down.. I’m just a person trapped in a cycle of depression and regret..

That’s the thing about regret: It doesn’t go away.. it exists in a constant loops of “what if’s,” and alternate choices...

So that’s why I despise pregnancy.. I don’t hate it.. I’m just envious that they get to be happy..

I’m sorry if I sound selfish...

Hi, Maggie.

I came back to say.. thank you.

Rereading this story again, I started to see it in a more positive light.

And I.. um.. (clears throat)

Listen, I misjudged you, and looking back, I was a jerk for bashing your stories like that, and I’m really sorry. I just didn’t want to admit that you write really good. Probably better than me.

A few years ago, I read your stories and I just really felt so envious that you along with everyone else can write this good. I didn’t think that I could do that too if I wanted to.

So if you’re reading this, I just want to say thanks for letting everyone read your wonderful stories, I hope you enjoy your life outside of this Internet. I feel grateful that I get to read your stories.

You’re a wonderful person! 👍🏾

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Awww, it’s okay, hon. No hard feelings. I’m happy to hear you’re doing bette and thank you for being honest. All is forgiven, so no need to worry. I’m just sorry it took me a while to respond back. The day I saw your message I was out spending the day with some friends and when I got home I was too tired to type.

I admit I’m actually pretty surprised you think so highly of my works. Looking back I have noticed a lot of the very early mistakes of my younger days, but at the same time I’m grateful for those mistakes because they made me a better writer, and in a way, a better person.

Which is what I hope you can take away from this: There is no such thing as the perfect story. No matter how much passion and love you put into something there will always be those who will not see it, or choose not to, or simply don’t understand. I know that doesn’t sound comforting but hear me out. What I’m really trying to say is that it doesn’t matter what strangers think. You know the hard work you put into your work and those closest to you know was well. Those are the people who’s opinions truly matter. Always find the difference between hecklers and constructive advice. Make mistakes, learn from them, and move forward. Writing takes practice but the ride is always worth it.

I know you have it in you to write fantastic stories from your heart. You just have to be patient, learn to switch off the outside voices and just write. Ask yourself who are you writing this for. My answer is that I write for God and myself. Once you find your reason for writing, trust me, the work will speak for itself.

You don’t need the entire world to like what you do, only a few good, honest people. Because they will now the real you, and thus, know your story.

Good luck my friend, and God bless you.:heart::twilightsmile:

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