I can’t help but think after all this time… Magical Mystery Cure. I have always loved how it was all put together. That was years ago. I am now a mature teenage girl, one who still adores MLP, and I think about things. I can’t help but feel that the episode was rushed. How Twilight easily accepted that Rarity had Rainbow’s cutie mark, how after everything, she went into giving up and pitying her friends after what she had done. And then after a few minutes, everything was back to normal and then shortly she became an alicorn and then the coronation. The episode could have had so many things to make it such a special episode! Especially at the coronation! Have some bonding like in the Canterlot Wedding! This is how I think it should have gone.
I have gotten help in creating this from my little brother, who in fact, is also a MLP FAN!!!
This was pretty good! I feel like the other chapters could have been left out, though, and you could have made this a oneshot; the early chapters are more or less just transcripts of the episodes. I really liked the last chapter, though! I look forward to seeing more from you.
Wait a second. I know you from MLP Forums! It's cool seeing you here!
Despite the few additions on your part, i still feel like this was rushed; making what was a 22 min episode into possibly a 32 min episode. And if not for the few additions, there was the botched spelling errors on this that gave it a rushed feelinging as well.
Ive felt that magical mystery cure was kinda forced into being over quickly, but this revision of yours didnt do much to make it a whole lot better either. Really, it kinda felt like behind the scenes bonus footage that everyone could have guess how it went, but you actually took the time to put it in text. Dialogue is nice, but you didnt really do much with rewriting the entire episode and im dissapointed by lack of anything extraordinary.
I could only hope your future attempts are amazing, but i suppose you have to crawl before you walk.
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Thank you for the feedback. Yes, I am aware of the spelling errors. I type on my computer and when I type, I sort of type to fast that I go over my mistakes without even realizing that they are there. The story line, I appreciate your honesty. I will try harder. This was just simply how I believe it should have went. I appreciate the feedback and I will use that to improve on my next stories. Thank you ^^
Is nobody ever going to scold celestial for giving that book to twilight without a warning considering frostbite and sunburns aren't something to be taken lightly. Not to mention the damage pinkie did to applejack farm. Twilight can be excused because she can't imagine anything bad about the princess. But the princess hurt a lot of innocent ponies to turn her student into an alicorn.