Writing, parkour, and music... this is Wafflegodman!
Dash goes fast, to fast thanks to a new invention of Twilight's, and finds her self in a new world filled with interesting creatures. She then finds one of these creatures offering assistance, but what she doesn't know is that this creature has a set of talents that makes him very valuable, and a prime target for the less pleasant beings on this new world.
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some spelling and grammar issues i noticed
might be enough to bug some people into disliking
i would also prefer if you got an editor
943328 I'll check over it again, as for the editor, a friend of mine offered to become one but I am out of town and will be for some time, thank you, this kinda stuff always helps.
Also I might add that I used to live with my dad, who came from east Germany. I adopted a sort of accent from him, and I like to speak while I type, so some of the grammar issues are most likely caused by my inability to form understandable sentences during conversation.
943354
Ah k
I would volunteer myself with what limited grammar and spelling i have...
but i got summer school to attend
my god this will be the longest month of summer
This is a great story and everything but theres just one thing. Rainbow dash isnt rainbow dash anymore. The real dash would give up everything to keep her wings, and is NOT a bookworm. I admit she would know some things about physics but she would never touch a book that wasn't Of her daring action books. And its getting kind of depressing basically knowing she wont even want to try to get back to equestria, even though she has no special abilities in the human world.
945485 I've got a huge plot twist planned in the near future which might bring old feelings back, and about Rainbow Dash not being Rainbow Dash, I actually feel the same way you do and I'll try to bring her old self back. Also about the book thing, I was kinda saluting her secret love for adventure books, but I should have elaborated more with that shouldn't I have?
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946184 Im glad i kept reading, This is an excellent plot twist!
well the introductions went by really smoothe
947737 That's not even the half of it, you'll see. Hopefully tomorrow
AND THEN SUDDENLY BOLDFIC!
949023 I am sorry, but I can't seem to find where the bold marker is and can't change it. Don't worry though, I'm pretty sure that I'm able to be less of a derp in the future, no offense to Derpy of course.
This is a great story and I love where its going, but I just randomly noticed two spelling mistakes.
1. (Character development is difficult to wright about, good thing I have a scene change) should be
(Character development is difficult to write about, good thing I have a scene change)
2.giant teddy bare. should be
giant teddy bear.
If you need help with editing I would be glad too.
Nice work! But just one question, if rainbow goes back to equestria, will the artificial wings still be there or with it be her normal wings?
971931 How bout both, like awesome digi-armor stuff or whatever. What do you think about that Idea?
This story is all over the place! But I actually do like it. Kinda want to see what happens now!
Sorry, its just a bit... off, for I cannot find the correct word presently. I don't know, maybe it is rushed? But anyways, good luck.
972114 Perhaps you are looking for sporadic, Unrealistic, detailed yet broad in spectrum, plot twist city, if you really dislike it you could call it a piece of shit, or perhaps you think it's a tease, I admit, it can get a little suggestive at times, though I assure you it will not become a clop-fic. Anyway if you don't like it I can't blame you, and I feel I should thank you for at least giving the fic a shot, so thank you.
Her artificial wings sound cool and you did put the music somewhere in the chapter. It's in the authors notes.
Oh and can't wait to see whats next
to be honest u got off to a little of a rough start, dash was thrust into the human world a little fast in the last chapter and personally (this is just my preference) she handled it a little too well. sure she was a little startled when she discovered she was human and was in America. but this chapter is a lot better and liked the part where dash is teasing the professor. if u continue to keep up the good work then this will be a great story
like how dash is growing to the professor, i know u are on chapter six right now but im just going to say this anyway. slow down their relationship, its one thing to write a quick romance story and another to write a good romance story. but over all a good turn of events
sad to see not many people are commenting it can really let the writer get in touch with his audience.
975397 Thank's for the support
The romance in this story isn't the main selling point though, their is a lot more that is going to happen before it get's to serious, and of course I want to thank you for giving your input. Chapter seven is planned to go up sometime after Saturday because I'm in the process of filming a 'Meet The Author' type video so I hope you don't mind waiting a bit.
This is relevant to my interest's.
Have a 'stache
Also I hope you get better soon!
Get better soon! Not being able to type well would be a nightmare for me!
I started typing again. I take forever but I will get you a chapter.
I guess that the rest of the mane six have been found.
It will be interesting when they find out about RD being Leon's girlfriend
Good chapter!
And nice face.
1062592 Thanks you should see me when I'm awake, and using my real video camera
. I was rushed to make the video cause of my birthday party type deal.
Yay an update!
And not bad if I do say so myself.
in relation to the A/N I'm fine with them, I don't see the point in not having them. They don't harm the story, and they let you have a bit of input at the end.
Also,
is knew supposed to be capitalized there?
1328232 Dramatic effect, in hind sight I should have just capitalized every letter in the word. Thanks for the input
Glad to see an update. Not bad can't wait for the next one!
whoo hoo and update good story please continue
The author's notes can continue, though i highly suggest getting a proofreader.
1401441 I just got the rest of the staff at Wafflegodman to help back me on this project, that means quality should skyrocket.