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Ponies living around the Everfree forest have started to claim that they've been seeing something out in the Everfree forest, something more terryfying than usual. One day, Electro Trance, who lives in Ponyville, finds a beat up looking camera laying on the ground outside the forest. Taking it home, he watches it...and discovers something terrible

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Slenderpony, woohoo. Sadly, anyone who doesn't know the game won't get this and give it a dislike. Add a Crossover tag, so it's better visible. Also, you have yome minor vocab and grammar errors. Maybe give it a second look.:twilightsmile:

oooooo I got chills, nice.

947827 I will, and thanks for the feed back :twilightsmile:

947837 Thank you :twilight smile: this is my first real Horror fix ever, so it's great that people like it

That was pretty good. Shorts seem to be your thing :pinkiesmile:
When I saw the cover I instantly thought of marble hornets and the game slender. This fic needs the crossover tag, but other than that, this was a short and entertaining read. :rainbowkiss:

947854the crossover tag should be there. And thank you :twilightsmile:

947854 To be honest, I want to do a long MLP story, but i have no idea what it's gonna be about, and how to make it go as long as it has to go...:ajsleepy:

Fairly well written, with a pretty good feel of the mythos. More could have been done, but good for a first horror story.

947882
Spin a wheel, I started writing one on an idea that's been simmering in my head for ages. It will come to you eventually :twilightsmile:

947896 thanks for the tip

947895 this is my first fix, and to be honest, it's all i had in my head, and i'm pretty good with short stories...though I am thinking of maybe a few follow up storie(s) to it

947911
Shorts are good, stick to what you're comfortable writing and everyone should enjoy your material to some degree. Just, make sure to not make follow ups that will crash and burn and make people hate you (Take Spider-man 2 & 3 for example) :twilightsheepish:

947916 To be honest, I might end up making a few sequels to this, Following Electric Trance afterwards. This was originally a short story. All it was was gonna be a short, sweet, and creepy ass fic.

So, i appreciate your feed back, (but I might be a bit sensitive, so sue me) but please be considerate of how the author might take a comment like that

947923 I agree with you on that :rainbow laugh: I'm thinking of (possibly) a few follow up pieces that I can do with hat happens to Electro Trance afterwards.

947948
Maybe you could make that part of the same fic no? Add a few chapters, maybe your protagonist ends up in the street somehow, with no idea of how he got there... I dunno, brain droppings and whatnot

947972 Sounds like a plan. I'll see what my brain can work up :pinkiesmile:

947980
Cool, just don't forget to switch the completion of your story to incomplete so that I get to read it! :pinkiecrazy:

Horror! How delicious and rare. True Dark story, with all the goodies, traumas, insanity and gore (possibly? :pinkiecrazy:), right? And maybe some backstabbing too! What's not too like! My second delusional personality is already happy

Yes, yes, we expect to see some craziness and blood, or we will stab you! :pinkiecrazy:

Hey! No stabbing people!

Feh, you're not the boss of us! :pinkiecrazy:

Shush, or I'll take the pink pill...

NO! anything but that, we are sorry... :pinkiecrazy:

You better be! That said... Well done!

948059 Thank you.....though I'm a little worried about those "multiple" personalities you seem to have buzzing around in your head.

My idea of horror is the kind that affects the mind. Paranoia, leading to potential, perpetual madness........I'm very Lovecraft inspired

948406 Oh yes, madness is surely my favourite. Don't worry about my personalities though, they all agree on that and were threatened with a pill... that's enough to keep em down for a while... i think... :pinkiecrazy:

948425 the creepy Pinky face doesn't help.....and what dies the "Pink Pill" do?

He trotted over to find that it was a camer.

Camera.

"From what I've gathered, they keep seeing a pony, wearing a dark suite, with a pale, featurless head. So I decided, that after all this hype, I'm gonna see what I can find out in the dark forest."

Suit.

The sound of his racing hoof beats fades as well. After a few silent minutes, however, the sound of soft, steady hoof beats returns, and a back hoof lands in front of the camer, and then the screen is filled with nothing but static.

Camera. Not sure about the steady hoof beats returns part.

948474 was all this because of the errors? I know i made them, but I'll get to those later

948440 Oh this and that, mostly mashes 'em all up together, which is probably painful. Imagine your consciousness being erased for a while, not pleasant eh? My, my, you're a quite inquisitive one, aren't you? A crazy person likes your fic, be happy and enjoy, as it doesn't happen often (I suppose) :pinkiecrazy:!

948485 I'll take your advise. Thanks again for the compliment

This was pretty good, the game was bucking creepy as hell

SLENDY!!!! i love you~ great story

soon as i saw the title and picture i knew :fluttershyouch:...

you can have my moustache :moustache: (puts in hand and clamps it shut with other hand) take good care of it, it will keep you from getting scared :twilightsmile:

I'm scared now because my bedroom window is facing the woods outside.... help. me... :fluttershyouch::fluttershbad:

951033 Don't worry :rainbowdetermined2: I can handle him

Hellooooooooooo...*Sees Slenderman* AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!:raritycry:

969053 lolololololololol :rainbowlaugh::rainbowkiss::rainbowlaugh:

Suddenly, Slender Mane. Nawwwww it's all good, jus' give 'em 20 dollars.:ajsmug:

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