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Redrose99875


I'm a Thirteen year-old-girl who is a fan of MLP:FIM and is a MAJOR FLUTTERCORD SHIPPER/FANATIC


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When Fluttershy finds out that Discord despises Christmas, goes back in time to change that, but will she come back without changing history? or Worse?

(Art cover was by me)

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So...is there more or is this one chapter? Also, you made a cute story and a pretty nice picture for it.

So cute i Could explode with to much cuteniss energy :heart:

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nope, this is all, but I´m glad you like it :heart:

That was so wonderful!

Hey! Wanna just say nice story, firstly, but I feel there can be a few minor things you could do to improve it.

First thing would be to use more periods. It kinda broke the flow for me when an entire paragraph was composed of two sentences.
Secondly, I'd try to add a bit more, especially to the first and third acts of your story. The middle portion was really nice, maybe minus the singing part, but I still really enjoyed that. I feel if you add a bit more to the story, then I will help you in the long run.
Finally, I would suggest to build their relationship a tad bit better in the middle portion. That's all I can suggest there.

This story was really nice. Keep up what you do!

'Tis the season for some Fluttercord

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