• Member Since 30th Nov, 2017
  • offline last seen Yesterday

Order or Chaos


Who said I can't be both or neither?

Comments ( 337 )

What the heck??!! WHat the hell happened to him? WHat was with that last paragraph?

I just hope you have Queen Chrysalis as one of the lemons. And i hope this is a harem story. With some impreg.

-Puzzle Master

What the heck??!! WHat the hell happened to him? WHat was with that last paragraph?

Well. He saw the aquarium. He saw the different types of plant and fish in it. And he saw the fish let out three bubbles.


He finally sees in a very long time. It's also because of the actual reason he had shortsightedness and what it took from him.

Or I was just being creepy and poetic.

Take your pick.

I just hope you have Queen Chrysalis as one of the lemons. And i hope this is a harem story. With some impreg.

Uh...keep hoping?

But hoping about what part- that is the question.

Good luck on the story.

Thanks. If I'm lucky enough I won't need it...

"Paradox"

8586932
Don't torture me with that. The sight thing, i get it know. Thanks for explaining. The Chrysalis and harem part, I'm going to be hoping for that a whole lot more than impreg, but i will still hope for it. GOod luck on the story.

Interesting start. Will you be keeping the displaced universe separate and focus mostly the story or will you cross-over with other Displaced later on?

Interesting start. Will you be keeping the displaced universe separate and focus mostly the story or will you cross-over with Displaced later on?

-Displaced Writer.


Heh... that's the thing. Was he actually displaced? Merchant style that is.

8586968
its not required though. Like my Master Hand Displaced story, the merchant wasn't mentioned, the summery only says 'some powerful being' which can be anyone.

its not required though. Like my Master Hand Displaced story, the merchant wasn't mentioned, the summery only says 'some powerful being' which can be anyone.

-Displaced Writer.


Hmm... I see. Well in that case-no, no crossovers with the other displaced.
The circumstances behind him popping up in Equestria are very complicated, but if you read the chapters closely enough, you'll realize that words have meaning.

You may want to put that in the description that there will be no cross-overs, that way people won't be asking about it.

I could, but I'm am a lazy cube, so I just simply won't put this story in the displaced folder. Simple as Pi.

8586988
You may want to put that in the description that there will be no cross-overs, that way people won't be asking about it.

Hmm...I read a bland "story.

-Hamster Master


I am really sorry about that. I hope you like my one more.

Is this chapter important?, because I never liked the 1.000-3.000 words long "oh I meet the convention guy and he makes me go to Equestria "." chapters, no offence.
I just want to know if you have written anything here that explains some stuff.

Comment posted by Order or Chaos deleted Dec 3rd, 2017

Is this chapter important?, because I never liked the 1.000-3.000 words long "oh I meet the convention guy and he makes me go to Equestria "." chapters, no offence.
I just want to know if you have written anything here that explains some stuff.

-Texus


The first chapter shows a part of the characters personality, his costume and how he got to Equestria. And you might not understand some bits in the second chapter if you don't read the first one.

However if you're not interested in half of the currently written story you are free to skip it. I am not going to force people to read what they don't want.

I'm going to ask a few questions because at least in a story I have some clear preferences:

I'm honest and say that I only tried to look for what creature he turned into, but I haven't seen it yet, he/she is maybe just having that usually smug, cool guy attitude that I sometimes like but more often not. (rember it is only from what I can judge while reading here and there a piece or going trough it rather fast).

Also for anyone wondering: No there will be no crossovers with the other displaced.
They might be mentioned, but that's your lot.

that sounds good, there is often more harm done than it being actually good in the story when they do crossovers.

I have to read the whole thing again to be sure, but what I have seen so far looks good, I just hope there is not to much meaningless sex if there are any scenes at all and if he enters a relationship that its not a rushed one. It is just something I prefer when reading stories and I thought Adagio and Sunset are together from what I have seen. From just taking a look, it looked like they were maybe just in the middle of

IF there should exist herd stuff I hope it is mostly meant as familly and not three wifes and two husbands or something like that.

I say it right now, so that you can warn me if I'm not going to like what you have planned.
Have you even said what your character is right now? I only noticed "necromancy book" and "snake eye" (destiny).

That and somewhere I have read displacer, so I just hope there isn'T going to be the league of "displacer" (that third generation shit), where they train their displaced to become awesome warriors.
That and I hope they don'T come looking once in a while to kick the displaced in the ass and force them to do what they want.

Comment posted by Order or Chaos deleted Dec 3rd, 2017
Comment posted by Order or Chaos deleted Dec 3rd, 2017

8587340
ah okay thank you, It is just that i have read it so often that it usually has no element of suprise for me anymore and it is often stuff that doesn'T matter in the world at all anymore.

What character did your human wanted to be? if I have the time and no other story to read I go back to this first chapter again.

8587532

What character did your human wanted to be?

He was dressed as, and I quote Ch.1

A necromancer assassin

He came up with the costume himself. It's not based of any game, movie, or story.

OK, I like this story,

I haven't seen any stories where the merchants target gets poached right out from under him. Very unique, I loved it. It is a bit rough in some places, and I am going to assume that the Author is new to writing. Over all the Author did a good job and I had no problems following the story through the first two chapters at all. I caught a few minor typos that I forwarded to "Order or Chaos" but over all these were only minor issues. This Author definitely has my attention and I am looking forward to seeing where he is going to take the story.

Keep up the good work.

The Monk

8587747

Dear The Monk.

First of all: I am glad that you are enjoying the story.

Second of all: you're right, I have never written a fanfiction before, but that does not mean that I haven't been thinking on this ones storyline for months.

Third of all: Do you always end you messages with, "The Monk"? Just curious.


The Cube

8588726
I am currently in the middle of writing the next chapter, however I don't want to release a new chapter almost every day, because people will expect me to do so all the time, which I can't do.

So instead: I will release a new chapter every 2-5 days.

"Also for anyone wondering: No there will be no crossovers with the other displaced.
They might be mentioned, but that's your lot."
Good, this crossover nonsense is usually what ends up ruining these displaced stories for me.

8589453
same, I can follow a good story, but when you add a completely different universe into the mix on a whim? that just ruins all the effort. I enjoy a story that can suck you in, adding another universe just breaks the emersion

You know what I would find funny if the first page of the book was "Necromancy for dummies". Also; shot in the dark here, but what if the storm was being made by his roommate/potential love interest. I can see her getting taken first by the unknown displacer and ending up there years ago. Her going crazy, her love turning into a yandere thing with Vadon as her "senpai" and Equestria trying to take him from her.

just a fan theory.

8594803

shot in the dark here, but what if the storm was being made by his roommate/potential love interest. I can see her getting taken first by the unknown displacer and ending up there years ago. Her going crazy, her love turning into a yandere thing with Vadon as her "senpai" and Equestria trying to take him from her.

Good theory. But zero facts.
And if she appeared years ago, why would the storm happen only a week ago? Makes zero sense. Plus: if you read the beginning of the first chapter more thoroughly, you'll find another reason why your theory is incorrect.



Ps: I think I'd read that kind of story.

Comment posted by Order or Chaos deleted Dec 10th, 2017

Man!! YOu made me cry for the sirens. ANd i'm not a fan of theirs!!

No crying for me, guess I'm just as cold and heartless as everyone says.

Nice world building.

Comment posted by Order or Chaos deleted Dec 9th, 2017

8599578

I didn't have a single shadow of doubt that you were cold.

Thanks for the compliment.

Usually I don't think what I'm thinking, but now I was both remembering and thinking about what I though a moment ago.

That sentence made my head hurt.

8601216

A mortal mind cannot comprehend the other dimensions in it's own dimension. Imagine a four-dimensional apple. Can you?
If you can't its because you need to have a basis. An apple has a colour, mass, shape.
What does the fourth dimension add to the mix? You can't imagine, because you need to experience something in another dimension, to understand it in yours.

You understand?

Yeah that makes sense it's really a matter of perspective and prior knowledge but even knowing that that doesn't make it not hurt my head I understand but my head still hurts XD

8601236
N..no? Yes? Maybe? U just killed a part of my brain trying to think of this

I am notifying all my readers right now.

I might only be able to release the next chapter near the weekend. I want to have the next chapter written properly, but I don't have much time at the moment, so don't get your hopes up for the next chapter coming out on Wednesday, or Thursday maybe even Friday.


Order or Chaos out...



Are-are we done? We're still transmitting? Well then, turn it o-!

My name eh? Well it's- Wait if that merchant has turned my costume into actual necromancers armor it's not a very good idea to give my real name.

....WHY?!

8605704

...Well by common nerdy, RPG, fantasy, mythsbuster stories: a name holds power and... basically if you know a necromancers real name, then you can use him like a voodoo puppet.
Plus you can never be too careful.

More please my friend this story came out great so far

This story while sometimes a little hard to follow is very well written and very exciting im looking forward to more chapters :)

Well, i cant wait for hi to meet Celly.

This is a great story so far, reading about the different abilities of his armor only made me more curious about what else it can do, same with his weapons.

Ahh, Kos... or some say, Kosm... 
Do you hear our prayers? 
Grant us eyes, grant us eyes!

Login or register to comment