The Temptress

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Shadowking58

Shadowking58 #1 · Dec 16th, 2017 · 2 · · Epilogue (SFW) ·

Blank Slate... is that the red pony from YouTube?

pahnazd

pahnazd #2 · Dec 21st, 2017 · · · Epilogue (SFW) ·

I'd say you've done quite well, considering it was your first writing foray into nsfw... even if you didn't write the whole thing yourself.

Still, it was a fun read, and that was quite the way to hand in one's v-card.

That epilogue though... Blank seems to get way too invested into his story-telling for him to forget his audience. That was hilarious, good job!

lambda

lambda #3 · Jan 7th, 2018 · 1 · · Epilogue (SFW) ·

What an ending indeed. And thinking about Blank Slate all fussed up telling his children his tale of love made me chuckle

Keep it up pal!

P-Berry

P-Berry #4 · Jan 7th, 2018 · 1 · · Epilogue (SFW) ·

8610979
Thanks! Glad you liked it! :D
8613653
Well, I don't know of any red ponies from Youtube (safe for Big Brian, maybe) but eh, could be.
8622319
Well yeah, I gotta give props to MadDonut for writing most of it. It was his first shot at writing clop as well, so technically all three of us (Him, me and Blank) handed in our v-cards in this story - in one way or another xD
But yeah, we both weren't sure about including the epilogue, but I gotta say, I quite like how it turned out. Glad you liked it!
8653868
Thanks man. Glad to hear you liked it! ^_^

ShadyAwesomeness

ShadyAwesomeness #5 · Feb 22nd, 2018 · 1 · · Epilogue (SFW) ·

I swear I always get a tingling sensation in my chest every time I come back and read this. Fresh Coat was just too dangerously and sexually adorable in this story I'm already in love with her. And I couldn't help but feel bad yet laugh over Blank's petrified state. Plus, that ending with their children is so freaking priceless! I'll have to remember to try that with my future kids to get a taste of their reactions ^^

You and MadDonut never cease to amuse me and your readers with interesting content. Never stop being awesome you two :D

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...even Chuck Norris approves of this.

The Blessed One

The Blessed One #6 · Jun 9th, 2018 · · · Epilogue (SFW) ·

It took a trip to the dentist that essentially incapacitated me to give me the time needed to finally finish this. My cheeks burn, my gums are sore, my teeth ache, and overall the inside of my mouth feels like it was hit by a car... I can officially say this saved my day.

Berry, you and Donut definitely don't disappoint. The ending more then lived up to the journey of these characters, and to be perfectly honest, I'm kind of sad it's over. But, all good things have an end, and this was most definitely a great end.

PS: That epilogue!

Golden Fang Ryu Shenron

Golden Fang Ryu Shenron #7 · Aug 4th, 2018 · 1 · · The Temptress ·

However, my bliss vanished for just a second as I felt her body tense up. Raising my head to see what was going on, I caught her glance, and found her looking at me with meek, almost fearful eyes. “Just … just please,” she whispered, sounding genuinely concerned. “D-don't ever leave me.”

Oh Fresh Coat....

“I won’t, Fresh Coat. ... I never would.”

That one shot was sweet, cute, and sexy all at the same time!

Golden Fang Ryu Shenron

Golden Fang Ryu Shenron #8 · Aug 4th, 2018 · 1 · · Epilogue (SFW) ·

“And that, kids…” I said conclusively, looking at the colt and filly sitting on the black leather sofa opposite to me, “Is how I met your mother.”

Oh my FAUST!!! Really Blank?!

“You really gotta work on that G-rating, dear.” she said, cracking a smile at me. “I hope that didn’t traumatize the kids too much.”

Yeah, he really really does.

“Uhm, yeah.” I admitted a little sheepishly, rubbing the back of my head with a hoof, “I guess I sorta just ... got carried away.”

You think?!

“I can’t blame you.” Fresh Coat replied, smiling as she slowly came walking over to me. She stopped in front of me, looking at me with those beautiful magenta eyes of hers, and said, “I tend to get carried away as well when thinking about it. It was one of the best nights of my life, after all.” she admitted, closing her eyes and leaning in for a long, passionate kiss, which I reciprocated to the fullest, enjoying every second of it.

Yes, yes it was.

“I love you, Blank.”
I couldn’t help but to smile as she said it, my own emotions overwhelming me once again. I leaned in for another kiss, feeling her body slide onto mine as she leaned forward, softly sinking into my embrace, and making our bodies mold together like they had at the end of that long, passionate night so many years ago.
I kept my lips locked onto hers for a few blissful moments, then slowly pulled back, locked my eyes with hers again, and said the only five words I knew she needed to hear to send her into a land of bliss as well.
“I love you too, Fresh.”

Lunatic God