- Member Since 14th Nov, 2014
- offline last seen 6 hours ago
TheUltimateBrony-Class-S
A young adult whom has been getting and trying ideas for fanfictions...
TheUltimateBrony-Class-S
Joined 14th Nov, 2014 ·
Offline
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- golden dawn · 9k words · 129 14 · 6.6k views
- black night sun · 4.4k words · 42 7 · 1.3k views
- Brony Parasite · 5.2k words · 113 16 · 3k views
- Zedfire · 3.5k words · 65 2 · 1.7k views
- Protoform66 · 4.9k words · 112 8 · 5k views
- gundamexia34 · 19k words · 73 12 · 1.9k views
- RiotWeavile108 · 8.5k words · 56 8 · 2.3k views
- Grey Knight Neltharion · 4.8k words · 116 6 · 5.6k views
Stats
Page generated in 0.134 seconds
Total duration
951 users online
508,485 hits today, 2,054,621 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Kewl.
You used "Life" three times in just the very first sentence of your short description. That's your first impression, the very first thing that 98% of everyone who sees your story is gonna see.
8580076
...huh... I did not see that....
Pyramid Head and Slender Man I'm familiar with, but not the other two. Who is the Keeper? And is the Nightmare the Soulcalibur character?
8580308
The Keeper is the guy who has the safe for a head in the game called The Evil Within, and Nightmare is The FNaF 4 character, not the Soul Calibur character.
8580415
Yeah, your done now goodbye.
I like this, plz add more soon
8580828
I will try, my little reader...
8580876
More of this awesome story please!
8581814
I will try to get another chapter of this story out before the end of today.
needing more
This is a very interesting chapter I can’t wait to see what happens next keep up the good work update soon
8581880
*mentally screaming at self because unsure of what to say to complement*
I am... intrigued to say the least. This looks interesting, and the rating bears a good sign, but I am withholding judgement until I have read it.
The God of creation Approves of this story
8581959
Yep, I prefer people to judge stories that way, not by how good others say it is, but by how you may enjoy it.
8582377
*slams face on flat surface to avoid showing the blush*
...I can't handle these compliments... yet they make me feel so goddamn happy as Pinkie at a bakery...
media.giphy.com/media/M0cWmMOAdn9Ek/giphy.gif
You have my ATTENTION.
Interesting
When I started reading I was intrigued, now I can't wait to see where this goes, and honestly when you introduced nightmare I was thinking of the one from Prey.
Anyhow, addings to favs.
AH! Suck it hacker *troll face*
8580180
So far you didn't misspell anything so that's a good sign but you see to forget to add words in the middle of sentences which makes them feel blocky and incomplete or some words are added out of the blue like you rewrote the sentence multiple times and forgot to erase them and lastly you seem to have forgotten the “Literary Past Tense” rule. For example
turned
why the unrelated “I”
in front of them levitated
filled
walked
grabbed
I looked to the parents
and then back to the unicorn in my hand
8619569
0.0' ...thanks, you officially are the first person to point all that out to me, I will fix it soon, but right now I'm working on something but thank you so much.
Feels like there should be a prequel. Or more details in each chapter.
...You can do better... right? What are you motivated by?
I can guarantee, that if you continue to write, then you will feel more and more like you need to rewrite the first couple chapters, so they are about five or four thousand words each.
Your answer, awaits.
8622447
I'm not really sure what motivates me, to be honest.
Possibly my emotions?
I'm certain I can do better, I just need a push in the right direction I suppose. *shrugs*
You may be right there, every time I write, I seem to put more detail and ideas into each chapter. And when I reread some chapters that I have written, I seem to have this feeling to rewrite a paragraph or fix a few more details.
Although, for me at the moment, I always seem to have a hard time trying to focus on my end goal when I start to have to many of my ideas clumping up together. I'm not sure what I need to do sometimes. Maybe I need an editor...
8622455
Are you on a computer? Use notebook. It's what I do, or I just remember and sort them in my head for a while, until they settle into a formula I like.
8622463
Maybe...
I use the computer most of the time, mainly because if I were to use a notebook with either pencil or pen, I would either go through the entire notebook and all the ink or almost all of the notebook and a pencil because of all of the mistakes I would've had to correct and all the holes in the papers from I where I couldn't think of a good word.
That up there, is not a guess, it is a fact...
8622467
I meant the app...
8622470
...did not know that is what you meant...
8619569
... wow, thank you for the help!!!
8619569
Fixed!
8622502
thought you'd enjoy this. Sorry I couldn't find one for the others.
You forgot to change the text color here.
8660392
whoop... thanks!
AhahahahahAhahahahahAhahahahahAhahahahahAhahahahah!!!!!!!!!
That torture scene with Gnarl priceless
8662968
Why thank you!
I do try to do my best... and there will be at least another three more of those in future ANs.
your missing "stallion" in between "the" and "cried"
your missing "my" in between "was" and "sister"
other than a few spelling mistakes, your story is looking really good! keep at it!
8664813
Thanks, I will fix those right now!
I believe you mean Here.
Red: Redundant information presented twice making it a runon. Consider shortening to 'Twilight had sent a report of a sighting within 'forest name here' after investigating a rumor that a younger filly had seen him and then the rest was fine. Otherwise this is a bit of a run on way of saying that the clouds were seen being clouds because people saw the clouds being clouds with clouds.
8667634
Fixed! Thanks!
8667656
...you know I thought I had retyped that sectio to say something along those lines... might've forgot to hit the save button on that edit.
Anyways, thanks again!
You use commas a bit too often. Go over your sentences a few times, try reading them aloud and figuring out which commas should be replaced with periods and which commas should remain.
8665268
NP Man, always out to help a bro out!...../)
Would you mind translating that?
8687455
It has been awhile, but it was something along the lines of 'Hear me brother, for I summon thee' but i don't remember the exact wording... might need to retype that I think.
Wait...one? THERE’S MORE!?!?!