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King Ice


Twidash is Love. Twidash is Life

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For a first time, it's all right.

I would say a bit on the short side though.

well that was a nice read :derpytongue2:

"Okay, now, Ah can’t wait to see that letter she’s writing for me,” Applejack muttered to herself

I think Applejack has the wrong idea lol

What about Applejack?

Grammar kept getting worse, after Applejack's part it devolved into a stroke, you need a sentence checker like Microsoft Word or preferably an editor.

“Okay, now, Ah can’t wait to see that letter she’s writing for me,” Applejack muttered to herself

I wonder how applejack felt when she found out it wasn't her.

“Okay, now, Ah can’t wait to see that letter she’s writing for me,” Applejack muttered to herself

Actually AJ.... 😂

“Okay, now, Ah can’t wait to see that letter she’s writing for me,” Applejack muttered to herself

AJ........ I'm sorry.

Before posting a story, go back and re read it to make sure it sounds alright. Maybe even have someone else take a look.

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Thanks for the advice, but that story’s from 5 years ago, a lot has changed since then

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