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New Canterlot


I can finally see...but not for long

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YES! NEW STORY!

Gonna read it right away!

what happened to dash at the end there?

. She tossed her shoes half-hazardously to the bottom of her locker before reaching for her normal clothes.

Haphazardly, but other than that, this was freaking immaculate.

Very well done. I look forward to reading more. :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by Commander Darklight deleted Jan 14th, 2018

also MR author if there is not a nude tutor scene, later on, were every time dash answers a question twilight removes an item of clothing revealing the correct answer

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i was not expecting there to be so many ways to say that

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to bad you forgot yankee its like a quickie but by yourself

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huh never heard that one mind you 'the stranger' is better, bit of prep work needed, apparently you sit on your hand till it goes numb that way it feels like its somebody elses, from what i heard

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iv heard of it never tried it myself tho

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Holy. How long did it take for you to do that

Likeing the idea but think you missed world after whole in the description tho i may be wrong

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That's a rather comprehensive list, gotta give you that.

I think the twist this story needs is Twilight packing more heat than the captain, and making plenty use of it on and in Rainbow, if you know what I mean :ajsmug:

Great writing, pal, looking forward to the next chapter!

At the University of Northern Canterlot, Rainbow Dash is on top of her game. As the fastest freshman on the track team and the star of the alternate soccer team, her life has never been perfect

her life has never been perfect

Err...this doesn't seem right - I think you mean "her life has never been MORE perfect" or something, because the way it is now seems like she doesn't like her life.

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OMG! that post was so long you must be over confiscating for something.

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:scootangel: auto correct is not always right LOL

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would you mind not spamming

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were have i spammed ?

all i have done is reply to comments


learn the definition of spamming if the creator's did not want us to reply to comments they wouldn't have added a reply button for us to do it with

SO.....

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couldnt just leave a dislike like a normal person NO your special got to comment on it huh.

Eagerly awaiting you butthurt reply
Cmd. Darklight

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you mean compensating for something right

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Making a post that has several hundred lines of copypaste is definitely spam.

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oh, the irony of making a grammar mistake while correcting another's

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FORGIVE ME mein fuhrer it was this cheap western phone, and its tiny buttons

This sortof brought me memories of Ponuville University. Anybody remember this masterpiece from the early days?

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I'm impressed. I didn't know that there were 431 ways to say masturbate. Someone should make a story just trying to use all those.

That segway into jacking off was like, a huge spike. Still stoked to see what follows.

That tutor better get her soon.

*here

but you can all me Rainbow or Dash or whatever.

*call

preference of tea over coffee and vise-versa

*vice-versa

you wanna see a real track team senior is all her huge long glory

*in all her

You know what else would be impossibly cute? Actual yuri. Vaginas. A romance fic that didn't shoehorn in futa.

Maybe one day.

Yeah, this was kinda odd. Not sure why you went with the whole 'half the girls' track team have cocks' bit. It's the otherwise fairly realistic humanized setting, I think. Everything seems perfectly normal and then *bam* a giant pile of dick-girls with no explanation. If it was pony or anthro or even Equestria Girls I'd probably have glossed over it with 'I dunno, magic I guess', but as is it's just a big lump of what the fuck.

If you're planning on having Twilight take on the whole team in some kinda fucked up bukakke orgy or something, then whatever, I guess needs must as the power of boners compels you. But as is, it's getting in the way of my enjoyment of watching a humanized horse-girl fuck another humanized horse-girl with her giant cock. And really there's a lot more story you could mine out of Rainbow being unique in her becockedness that could turn the story into something more than "Hello, owner of slot 'B', I'm going to put tab 'A' into you now."

Not bad, not bad. Admittedly, I'd at first thought that it was Twilight who was going to be the futa, but either one is good. All I ask is that there's no pseudo-visual punnery about Spitfire doing some Spitroasting.

I'm not really into futa, but this is pretty well written, so I'll give it a go :twilightsmile:

Only thing that bothers me is that, judging by amount of mentions, Rainbows dick seems to be the protagonist of this story. You really don't need to mention it in every single paragraph...

Huh ....

story and clop. Well, okay then.

Here's hoping both Dash and Twi are equipped in this setting. Could lead to some fun 'entanglement' situations.

Twilight has taken the sexy librarian style and dialed it up all the way to 11... 12... 20... dammit, the dial broke.
I'm really enjoying the story so far, the interaction both Twi and Dash had were great!

And I like Twilight's approach here - you don't need to drill stuff into someone, just a push in the correct direction to help them understand, and suddenly the seemingly insurmountable becomes a breeze.
Top marks.

And Dash is absolutely smitten. That won't lead to a lot of teasing at all. Nope.

Definitely looking forward to more! :twilightsmile:

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The funniest comments I’ve ever read on anything ever! Thank you very much for that. ^_^

"But since coffee was invented after tea, maybe it was the other way around?"

Actually, coffee and tea existed at the same time. We just have less on central and south American history, so we don’t know as much about it.

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I lost it at Onan's olympics

Love this, need more, SHIP IT LIKE FEDEX

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Holy fuck, they're alphabetized...

Well, um, this was published on my birthday I just realized...

I hope that's not a bad omen. :rainbowlaugh:s

Adorkable sci-twi is gonna kill Dashie xD

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