Twilight conducts a experiment on her Miss Smarty Pants doll that causes the doll to become a real pony. And so Miss Smarty Pants being so excited to have a actual body goes and and trys to tell Big Mac how she feels. But when Big Mac sees Miss Smarty Pants he doesn't recognize her and doesn't believe the story that she told him and now thinks that she just some crazy mare running around Sweet Apple Acres. So now Miss Smarty Pants must try to convince Big Mac that her story is true and that she loves him though how she will she does not know.
Chapters (2)
I really like how this is starting out and I'm feeling sad that this may remove Big Mac's memories, especially sense Smarty Pants really appreciates the way he treats her. I look forward to reading more and if you need any more assistance just send me a message.
nice story so far
I love this pairing! I love it so damn much and I always appreciate it when I find it.
I love it so much I must correct as I go:
there annual holiday: their annual holiday
than its usual: than usual (the its is entirely superfluous)
job” thought Big Mac as he did his usual work all around the orchard wether it was was fixing a fence: job,” thought Big Mac as he did his usual work all around the orchard; whether it was fixing a fence
Knowing it was just one of Applejacks friends named Eyesight Glitter or whatever her name was, she was just probably here looking for Applejack.: (This is a sentence fragment, you should start it with a subject and not a gerund, like, "Big Mac knew it was..." also, "Applejack's", possessive, not plural. And you may or may not want a semicolon after "her name was.")
my name!?”Said Twilight surprised and somewhat hurt by: (Use a more active verb than "said" like "shouted" or "exclaimed", aplso place a comma after "Twilight" and a space after the quotation marks.)
“Sorry Mam” Said Big (Unintentional hilarity aside) "Sorry, ma'am." Said Big
(That's... enough to give you some idea. I note you miss punctuation in quotations and you missed a few close quotes.)
949477 Thanks for your feedback.
949503 Thanks I hope I can keep the ball rolling.
949924 I like this pairing to and i'm surprised that there aren't that many stories with this pairing.
949995 Wow........
I was really not expecting that thorough of a feedback comment.
I will try to decipher what some of your comment means but I will probably need some more help from you to really nail it.
I really appreciate these kind of comments because they are really helpful. Thank you
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I did a story called "The Plaything" with this couple. Smarty Pants is brought to life by Twilight and she and Big Mac fall in love. It's a semi-tragedy because she can't be brought back again without making her depressed over her state.
My comments are pretty standard. But then, I'm a university trained editor and I used to do essay cleanup for most of the guys in my dorm hall.
Basically I'm trying to make you aware of broader issues. Missing quotation marks, and some very bad spacing errors. One part has you dropping the end of a paragraph to the next line. And a story with this couple deserves a glowing polish 
Very interesting. It kind of reminds me of some of the stories I would read when I was younger. Keep it up!
950195 sweet you can do it
It doesn't look like you changed anything. Did you forget to save the changes before closing the edit box?
Oh crap I forgot
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Once again, you may have missed the save. Or you missed a lot. Including some of the corrections I suggested like the possessive apostrophes, and one instance of using "quite" when you mean "quiet."
TYPOS, honey. TYPOS AND LITTLE ERRORS HERE AND THERE!!! Be a good boy and go clean 'em up,now!
Damn. This is short. Another thing, why does Twilight need to chant? Aren't all the spells in her head?
Hehe. Cute. Smarty Pants alive and still in love with Big Mac.
1039319 Could you please give some specific examples because I'm just blind as a bat when it comes to editing
1040305 Some people look at that and say why I look at that and say why not
1041720 To me it just seemed a little out of place. Other than that though, this is looking to be a very fun story.
CContinue this please
P;EASE CONTINUE!? this is amazing and kinda funny!
I doubt you are still around, but is there any chance you might continue this?