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For lack of a creative handle.


It is a well-known fact that no one gets through the holiday season without seeing at least half a dozen parodies of the classic Charles Dickens tale A Christmas Carol (and that's assuming you don't read the original story). This is one more of those parodies. 'Tis a tale of Hearth's Warming past, present and future! A tale which makes a fair amount of assumptions about this holiday which are sure to be demolished by the canon story we'll get in the actual Hearth's Warming episode. Thou hast been warned.

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Wow, I have the time to read something this long right now, but what I've read is good! Awesome job!

#2 · Dec 6th, 2011 · · ·

This is a very heart warming tale about christmas wrapped up with princess luna! :heart:
well done~ :pinkiehappy:

#3 · Dec 6th, 2011 · · ·

The Woona who stole Hearth's Warming Eve.

But seriously, a good ponified interpretation of the story.

#4 · Dec 6th, 2011 · · ·

Colt. Pipsqueak is a colt. A filly is a young female pony.

Great story! I loved it :heart:

:trollestia: - Princess Celestia is awesome in this story :rainbowwild:

53662 Ah, thank you for catching that! All fixed now.

I don't know, I think Luna kinda has a point here. In particular, 'You can't replace the big tree! That's a tradition that's been going on for generations!' seems kind of silly when Luna's attempting to replace it with a tradition that's even older.

Also, lol at Key Ton and Coltroy.

Finally got around to enjoying this tale. Very welldone adaption of the original story.

P.S. Pinkie is even more creepy now.:pinkiehappy:

#9 · Dec 9th, 2011 · · ·

Nice job making sure Rarity (almost) doesn't appear and has no lines, just like in Nightmare Night.

#10 · Dec 9th, 2011 · · ·

I am sick and tired of all these fanfictions and portrayals of Luna as somewhat inferior to that mule that is her sister. And why must always Celestia have to be having fun at the expense of poor Luna. No wonder she turned evil I would to if I had to deal with her consent dickery. And another thing why oh why must Celestia always be depicted as some perfect flawless character? Seriously sick and tired of seeing the same thing over and over again in basically every fanfiction.

#11 · Dec 9th, 2011 · · ·

Very, very entertaining story and very close to an episode style, well, one that's willing to centre on Luna that is.

Just a couple notes:

Luna's Early Modern Equestrian needs work. It's not 'do thou', it's 'doth thou', and she can use 'you' in certain situations, especially to close acquaintances. This link should help aplenty. http://www.ponibooru.org/post/view/75179?search=luna

Luna is so spot on it's scary good.

Love how this fic is a hype machine for the actual episode.

Christmas and Luna.:pinkiecrazy:WILL READ!

#13 · Dec 9th, 2011 · · ·

Congrats on getting featured on Equestria Daily.

Good work, you really have a good flair for this sort of thing. :D Merry Christmas, Happy Hearth Warming, Happy Holidays. May ponies deliver you what you want for Christmas.

#15 · Dec 9th, 2011 · · ·

It ws good... Not so much Rarity but it was still heart warming :pinkiesmile:

Regarding Rarity: yes, I didn't put in much of her, but that was just because I didn't really have any ideas for her and didn't feel like shoehorning in the whole mane six cast. Rarity fans shouldn't feel too bad though: Applejack and Dash only have one line a piece, so they get about as much love as Rarity in this (which is to say, very little).

58758 Because she's portrayed as a perfect character in the show. :rainbowlaugh: We're just sticking to canon here, pal!

58763 Ah, thank you, I'll be sure to look into that. I was wondering about how to use "doth" but ultimately I decided not to risk it and make some horrible mistake. So there it is. :twilightblush:

#17 · Dec 9th, 2011 · · ·

This was very well written and I thoroughly enjoyed it!!!!!
jst wsh that they wold make an actal chrstmas specal lke ths ^^ that wold e AMAZNG!!!!:heart:

#18 · Dec 9th, 2011 · · ·

aw so sweet. :fluttercry: man, that christmas carol story really holds up.

:twilightsmile: I believe that is all I need to say. (Also, I read the Original every year. MARLEY WAS DEAD and don't you forget it ;) )

This is my first time ever commenting to any pony story, despite being a relatively new brony.

This...is just amazing. I personally love how you and other writers can take these adaptable characters and put them in situations that aren't just plain awkward but actually fitting. Luna would be the best example of a Christmas Carol, minus maybe Blueblood, I guess, but I've already read "The Best Night Ever" for that. Still, this is a really heartwarming story and puts me in a Christmas spirit.

God, Celestia, whoever you choose,
bless you, Mr. JohnPerry and whatever ponies you use.
And may all bronies, young and old,
Get the heck inside, because outside it is cold.

...well, except maybe Hawai'i and Florida, but who cares? Happy holiday.

You have some of your Thees and Thous (and Thys) confused... And a couple Thys could be Thine instead. Other than that, pretty awesome story (Zecora was well done which doesn't happen a lot).

Lampshades, lampshades everywhere! Pretty adorkable story overall, and it manages to not clash with the episode pretty well, which is a feat in and of itself. :pinkiegasp::heart:

Bravo good sir, that was a great journey to a destination we know all too well. I caught a missing 'of' near the beginning and Luna's use of old speech was a tiny bit off, but those are my only gripes. I love all the callbacks and lampshades, I was quite giggly reading this last night. Zecora as Heath's Warming future was perfect, who else could pull off looking scary and helping out at the same time?

I might be a little late to the party here, but it was a very fitting read for today.

Anyway, while the references to the fandom and other lampshades were pretty blunt at times, that was fine in this story, and I certainly would have liked a story with a premise like this better than the actual Hearth's Warming episodes (which felt like it did not have the mane six in it at all, since they were all playing roles for most of it.)

Also, I don't think you need to worry a whole lot about "ye olde Equestrian", as English has never really existed in that form. Try to get the thous, thee, thy, and thine right, since that's the most noticeable (though the expectations of Ye Olde English probably don't match up to the original use, either), and that should be enough.

Anyway, overall a very enjoyable story.

Doth thou not enjoy serving your princess


“Thou did not explain enough!”


Hast they not planted the trees yet?”

have - thou is singular only.
There's a couple more misses, in fact. Thou is a very tricky word to use - that's probably why we stopped using it. Wikipedia's a decent source of information on it.

“There’s no ghosts, Pinkie,”

Quantity mismatch - There are no ghosts or there's no such thing as ghosts.

Evidently this has been on my read later a loooooooong time, so any criticism I'd have is a rather moot point. I wish it poked more fun at the tired old tropes rather than dutifully following them while pointing it out all the while. It's still... nice, but this straight playthrough might have been better if it hadn't been so self aware. :fluttershysad:

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