Planning Stages
For Captain Fizzlepop Berrytwist, there was nothing like hitting the ground galloping, and that's essentially what was happening barely two hours after her swearing in. The first order of business was building the ranks of the guard up from just the sole Captain, and that meant posting notices in town to see who would be interested in such positions.
"When you're writing those up, please make sure to point out that ponies that apply solely to hobnob will be rejected immediately." Twilight informed her.
Twilight's tasks involved sending official documents up to Canterlot. Ponyville had never had an E.U.P. Guard division before, and now that one was in progress, there were certain procedures that now had to be addressed. For instance, Celestia's and Luna's protective detail was usually the only E.U.P. presence Ponyville had ever seen, and now that the town would have a presence of their own, they would have jurisdiction whenever any non-local detachments accompanied a royal visitor.
For Fizzlepop, it was a crash course in interviewing and vetting. She quickly came to the conclusion that any outfit she assembled would most definitely be more along the lines of a militia, and not regular military. While Ponyville had grown in the years since Twilight had come to town, it was still by all means a town, which was surprising given it's age of nearly 75 years and proximity to Canterlot, and virtually all the residents had responsibilities and occupations already. But she still had plenty of ponies eager to help the Princess, but she was having a hard time of accurately judging them at first glance.
"Rainbow Dash, glad I caught you, I've been meaning to ask you something." She asked the pegasus a couple days later when she passed her in one of the halls in the castle.
"Sure thing, what can I do for you, Captain Fizzle?"
That moniker had stuck more than anything else in the past two days, and honestly, she liked it better than her full name and title.
"I'll get right to the point. Of the nearly two dozen applicants I've gotten so far, only three of them are Pegasi, and I also don't believe I'm fit to judge their flying ability. Princess Twilight's given me the authority, and I know you've also got your commitment with the Wonderbolts, but I'm wondering if you'd accept a commission as a Commander in Ponyville's E.U.P. Guard to help train and direct the fliers."
The open-mouthed smile on Dash's face told her everything she needed to know.
"You've got it, Captain. Where do I start?"
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A nice little bonus chapter, glad I caught it before heading off to bed!
Okay... as it stands right now, there is a full length story inside screaming to be written.
Don't let that story fizzle... WRITE IT!
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Badum tss.
But yes, I agree. This definitely deserves continuing, whether it's here or in a sequel (I'd guess the latter, but your call, Miles).
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A full-on story? No.
A few scenes like this that I don't want to let go to waste? Yes. I'm going to slightly flesh them out and post them because the reception of this story has been so insanely positive. This is my highest rated story on the site.
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Good enough!
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Agreed!
Woo!
So happy to see more of this, even if only in short scenes.
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Because
Therefore
Seriously, crippled-horn-fetish pony demands you write it, as well as all your fans!
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I still think this is absolutely amazing and hope to see more of it.
Still not great. It would be better to either fully explore the threads laid down or not expand the story with pretty much worthless chapters like this at all.
Also Ponyville is a lot older than 75 years.
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Really? Granny Smith said it was founded in her youth. I'd put her in her 80's in human years.
Should be:
Also:
Given that "but" is a conjunction, i.e. a word used to connect two phrases, it's not the best word to start a sentence on. It's jarring to read, and consequently isn't the best for preserving immersion. Given the context, it might be simplest to simply snip out the first "but" and just start the sentence as "She still had plenty of ponies..."
..Okay this looks good....but to Me, Tempest is always Tempest...even if her real name is Fizzletop Berrytwist.....just can't see her with that....even more when you put title Captain in front of it.....
I really like Captain Fizzle as a serious enough in-between of Tempest Shadow and Fizzlebop Berrybeebopbopadoh
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Glad you think so!