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blablafreckenlover


20 something living in mississippi just writing whatever comes to mind. Sometimes it's hot sometimes it's not. Hope you enjoy it either way.

Comments ( 95 )

Outside of a few grammatical errors here and there that I don't feel like pointing out since there aren't enough to ruin anything, this was certainly a good first chapter.
I look forward to the rest.

I would prefer ponies maybe

Keep writing i am for some reason interested.

I see Merunyaa artwork and I'm already hooked.

I have my suspicions as to why Dash is behaving the way she is.

Who is the woman in the cover art?

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Is supposed to be AJ. I know it's not, but it's really close, and I couldn't find any decent ab/dl art of eqg aj. If you know of some send me a link I'm totally open to changing the cover to something more relevant.

"What?" Applejack asked confused. Her question was quickly answered when Rainbow Dash held one pink and one blue diaper to Rainbow Dash. 

I believe something needs to be fixed there.

Aside from that, this was a pretty good chapter.

8576581
good catch 10 bonus points to you. I fixed it. Now she's showing them to Applejack instead of to herself.

Will this be getting a chapter 4?

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Yup. I'm currently in the process of editing chapter 4. Should be up tomorrow-ish

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Awesome! I’m looking forward to it!

This was a cute chapter

I noticed a minor spelling mistake.

At this Rainbow Dash's face lite up.

I think you mean lit up.

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you are correct. It's been fixed. Good catch 10 bonus points to you.

I look forward to what comes next

more more more i need more

This was a nice chapter.

One correction, though:
It's Apple Bloom, not Applebloom.

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Is it? I guess that makes sense. Sweetie Bell is two words. Don't know why I thought it was one word.

Hmm...this story...intrigues me. Not many stories do that, or at least not the way this one does. Regardless, an interesting chapter that succeeds in making me want more. Bravo to you, you've just earned a follower.

awesome chapter looking forward to more

This was a nice little chapter.

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i agree with you this was a nice little chapter

Another awesome chapter. Can't wait to see what else is to come.

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What does ab/dl stand for? Also, it's Sweetie Belle, not Sweetie Bell.

What does ab/dl stand for? Also, it's Sweetie Belle, not Sweetie Bell.

it stands for Adult Baby/ Diaper Lover.

Nice story by the way.

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If you're still confused about what ab/dl means, you can read the fic too. I'm sure it'll be ... enlightening in that regard.

awesome new chapter and yes I do see why you split it in two and I must say I agree. these work better separately

“It’s just kinda intense you know,” Rainbow Dash laughed.

Rainbow Dash said this?

Applejack let out a long sigh as Applejack diapered her

Time Paradox Detected.

hey really liking the slow and realistic approach. keep it up!:twilightsmile:

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Good catch 10 bonus points for you.

a very cute chapter thanks for the update it is nice to see aj happy after all her hard work. she deserves it and I'm glad rainbow dash felt the same way

I really enjoy this story. Normally I hate reading but I like stories like these.
I come check this story every day looking for an update and I have not been disappointed, though I do hate whenever I reach the end of a chapter since I have to wait to continue.
I can't wait to see how this story develops, especially now that some of the others are starting to get suspicious.
I can't really give any constructive criticism since I felt like this chapter was perfect (in my opinion) so all I can really say is "keep up the great work"

*sigh* Pinkie... why do you have to be a creepy stalker sometimes? Also, I see the new cover pic, but who made it?

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Sorry about that I guess the change to the description didn't save. It's a deviant art user thunderDash07 https://thunderdasher07.deviantart.com/. The description should be updated now too.

Thanks. I'll be sure to look at their art. Also did a quick reread and found two possible mistakes.

Twilight walk talk

...Not entirely sure what you meant to put here. Also, Wemon?

Awesome chapter looking forward to more of it my friend

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good catches 350 bonus points to you.

yahoo another chapter! :rainbowkiss:

I swear SF requested this concept from me.....of course I never fulfilled it just the other ones he's asked of me:applejackunsure:.

Someone's in so much trouble.

This is such a great story!
It's so fun to read and that's coming from a guy who usually hates reading. I always come back looking for a new chapter and I was not disappointed.

Btw, I saw a few errors that I thought I should let you know about.

“Careful sweetie,” Applejack cautioned. Rainbow Dash quickly calmed down as Applejack took both of their bowls to the sink. She then returned to release Applejack. “You want to have a bath sweetie.” Rainbow Dash nodded and grabbed Rainbow Dash’s sleeve.

The names underlined need to be either applejack ➡️ rainbow dash or rainbow dash ➡️ applejack.
Also, “You want to have a bath sweetie.” could have a question mark there instead of a period but people reading should be able to understand that this is a question rather then a statement regardless of not having a question mark there.

“Ok I’ll help you with your little bath,” Rainbow Dash said here mommy voice wavering a little.

That should be "her"

I'm not pointing these out to make you feel bad, I just wanted to be helpful. As I said before, I really enjoy this story and I'd love to see more chapters regaurdless of grammatical errors. Also, if you'd like a proofreader then I'd be willing to help you ~if that's ok with you. :yay:

“Careful sweetie,” Applejack cautioned. Rainbow Dash quickly calmed down as Applejack took both of their bowls to the sink. She then returned to release Applejack. “You want to have a bath sweetie.” Rainbow Dash nodded and grabbed Rainbow Dash’s sleeve.

the characters should be reversed

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oh no you're fine. I'll admit any day of the week that I'm terrible at proofreading, though I am trying my best.
400 bonus points to you for finding the errors and
250 more bonus points for being so nice about it.

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Unfortunately someone else beat you to the punch on finding this one, so you don't get as many bonus points for it. but you still get some.
75 bonus points for you.

no need to give me points I just wanted you to know

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