A trans man searching for acceptance. Kind and submissive.
Twilight's secret is accidentally discovered by Starlight...It turns out that the secret is super embrassasing. How will this end for Twilight?
Warning: Contains cuteness and diapers, if this isn't your thing, please don't read it.
If you take hate to me personally, I will refer you to my blog.
Here is the link: https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/785186/something-that-i-have-to-admit-my-mental-challenges
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Way too short. The way the story is presented left it feeling rushed, you should really slow down and take into account more details. Things like texture or smell.
Nice start… but I felt like it was SUPER RUSHED!!!...'little tip'
Slow down... Think about it...Write it...or at The VERY Least...
Read it afterwards...
Fill-in more when you think you are able to...But Also DONT OVERDO IT!!!
Not the worst I've read, but...yeah. Rushed.
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Thank you for your feedback!
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Thank you for your suggestion!
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Thank you for your comment and informing me in extra detail. What areas need more detail?
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The entirety of the story.
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Alright I will edit it then republish the new version.
I see alot of potential. Ill be watching and see how you grow
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Thanks!
What a cute and fast-paced story. the mind doesn't get too much time to drift away from the situation at hand as you keep the tale flowing steadily from chapter start-to-finish. Very impressive.
I'm most impressed on the back story. Becoming an Alicorn does seem like quite the change on a pony's anatomy. So becoming a bit incontinent does make sense. Kind of like how some human children can become bedwetters as they near their tween years. It doesn't seem to make sense but the ever-changing body can do oh-so many things with bladder control los being one of them.
You also made a great point about twilight trying to escape her "Freak Out" moments since 'Lesson zero'. A pacifier could help her to channel her stress. However, like any sources of anxiety calming devices, they have their limits and she had a total breakdown from having to admit what Spike has been doing along with Starlight 'goingwith her gut' to summon Star Swirl to see if he could help. Starlight is one to get straight to the quickest solution. This may not always be the best way to handle anything but she is certainly not one to dance around 'Arcum's Razor' (Going to the most simplest answer to a problem instead of thinking too deeply on possibilities of repairing it)
Great little story. It will be fun to follow. Lots of emotion, acceptance, and hopeful resolution to our beloved Princess of Friendship. Plus points for Spike being such a loyal and caring #1 Assistant. :)
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Thank you so much!!
Look at it this way, she just got back at you for not listening to her about releasing the pillars.
very cute and i am looking forward to more
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Thank you, hope to make one soon.
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Wow!! I never thought of that,but you do raise a good point.
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Thanks!
8549819no problem
Too rushed
its a nice story if it were a bit slower paced and allowed a bit of buildup.
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You do know that this is only the first chapter right?
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Oops, I didn't lol!
NEED MOAR!!!!
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i agree twi did get really powerful really quick i'd expect something like this to happen being incoutinent that is her body basically "grew up" too fast as it were. now her body needs to re-adjust and re-balance and almost re-learn everything to adapt to her new body and power.
oh that was aborable of starswirl i too felt he went too far with scolding twi and making her feel like she was stupid and inferior at the end of season 6 she didn't know the pony of shadows would come back as well as the pillars. i believe starswirl was in error. if he wrote down in that book that the pony of shadows would return as well as the pillars if they were ever freed then twi would have tried to find an alternate way to free the pillars but keep the pony of shadows imprisoned. He never really apologized to her for it. it was one of my reasons why i started disliking starswirl. as for twilight ooh i feel sorry for her i want to hug her and tell her everthing is alright and rock her back and forth til she calms down or falls asleep. call it my "father instinct"
Ohh no not math ummmm 6-4= 3 right