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NightCoreMoon


I'm Sheena. I write mostly angsty teen lesbian romantic dramedy, a few AUs, and sometimes porn.

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Sunset Shimmer is just trying to have a nice dinner with her friends when it is RUINED by an uninvited guest with an affinity for black goo. She knows what it is, she knows who is responsible, and she is very VERY unhappy with him. And she wants to let him know.

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Rated T for exactly one instance of harsh profanity.

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Comment posted by MatTheBook deleted Sep 26th, 2022

for sending something to their side

Again

Meanwhile Sunset drove to her destination. The trip was uneventful enough to barely warrant mentioning for any reason behind ensuring there were no silly plot holes. She arrived at the Wondercolts statue in front of the high school, calmly stepped off of her vehicle, and strolled into the portal hidden on the statue base.

SHE JUST STRAIGHT UP LEAVES THEM TO DIE!!!?

“Well it would probably take watching seven seasons of a televised serial in order to explain absolutely everything. I think the short answer is gonna have to suffice. Oh and by the way, Starlight Glimmer says hi.”

!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!

This is so silly, I LOVE it!

OH MY GOD THAT WAS AWESOME :rainbowlaugh:

Silly, self aware, ridiculous, and an annoyed Sunset and of course Sunset riding a huge pet dragon.

Exactly my kind of humor and loved to read it :twilightsmile:

squirrels made whatever you call the noise that squirrels make.

The word is question is chitter.

I can't say I saw that solution, but it works.

chop chop beardy!
:rainbowlaugh::trollestia::rainbowlaugh::trollestia:

That was a good story.

The fic when we remember Twilight is very stupid, Celestia learned from Stsrswirl to hide things under the rug, and Logic is the weakness of all villains

Nice. Just burn it away. Reminds me of a line from an episode from ”the amazing world of gumball”.

Something about ”most things being vulnerable to fire”.:moustache:

The only problem I can't get past, EQG Earth is not Limbo. Limbo the space between dimensions outside time. The Sirens where specificly banished to another dimension not to Limbo. So sending the Pony of Shadows into Limbo would not send him to the EAG Earth.
But say they where the same place, that means the Pony of Shadows would have noticed the portal and already tried force his way though.

The Sunset gets angry at Starswrill for dumping things on Earth story is a fun concept, but the Pony of Shadows is not something he sent there. Seen the idea done better with Sunset visiting Twilight bumping into Starswrill then loseing it on him because he dumped monsters and artifacts through the portal that she had to clean up.

Well, this was silly.

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No, she went for back up

The whole 20 questions with twilight got kind of annoying, but good chapter overall. Especially Winona.

“Because it’s FIRE!” She cried. “Fire is the weakness of almost everything that isn’t water!”

She's not wrong. And if you grab yourself a toaster you can use the power of lightning to defeat anything related to water. Cover all your bases.

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I’m thankful for your kind words, and I’m glad you enjoyed it!

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I wasn’t sure whether to go with chittering, so I settled on what I considered the amusing option of being a biased and unreliable narrator. I also did not know how I was going to solve the problem until I got there because I did not draft or outline this at all in any way whatsoever. Every single line was spontaneous.


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Hey now, to be fair, Twilight isn’t stupid when she’s fully rested. She’s just stupid when she’s very very very tired.


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I’m not saying that this story is canon. I just wanted to have fun writing this, so I’ll throw you a bone and say this is an AU where Limbo and the Human World are the same place, and that Star Swirl and the Pillars’ magic locked down the PoS’ senses and kept him unconscious. I hope this answer suffices. I don’t even consider this story canon to the rest of my own fics, I just have always had this plot bunny and thought the concept of Sunset going to visit Equestria for the sole purpose of cursing out Horse Jesus was funny.

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I’d say something like “annoying is what I was going for because Sunset herself was getting annoyed and so I wanted it to reflect upon the reader because I’m so meta hohoho” but yeah you do have a point. I feel that the entire second act drags a bit, pacing-wise, but this was more a stream of consciousness than an actual outlined drafted story so it stands to reason that some cracks would appear in the plot structure and general feel of the narrative. If I were to do a remaster of this fic I would trim a lot of the fat.

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Fire beats everything, water beats fire, lightning beats water, ground is immune to lightning but weak to grass, and I still don’t remember how fairy affects dark psychic and ghost. Wait, what do you mean this isn’t Pokemon?
[alternative response:]
me and the toaster from fallout: new vegas: old world blues are gonna wreck this planet

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Sure, and because of that she decided to comfront Chrysalis/Cadence in front of everyone instead of trying to find proof during Shining Armor wedding, or fighting with magic against Tirek that absorb magic, or fight again and again against Starlight when she time travel (and let's not say about what happened in the alternate timelines) or believe Discord and don't suspect something is wrong when her friends are acting strange, or disguise as "Mare Do well" to make a lesson to Rainbow Dash instead of talking with her, going to fight against Nightmare Moon a alicorn as powerful as her mentor with only a seamstress, a weather manager, a party planer, a animal caretaker and a farmer instead of reunite with her brother the 'Captain of the Guard' or find more information about the 'Myth' of the Elements of Harmony...

And that is only some of the mistakes I can remember right now

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It's fan fix or course it's not Canon, but I am saying the contradiction is distracting.

This was just the right amount of crazy. Loved it, especially when they were figuring out how they were going to save the day. I once tried to think up a story where starswirl has to answer for all the creatures he's sent to the human world. Some lone hero who's been protecting humanity secretly for ages reads the list of things he's sent, turns to him and says: "you know, I think I gotta kill you. Your body count is probably in the nine to ten figures."

Well guess winona’s staying in the human world since I can’t see how they’d get a dragon to go back through the statue portal

I read this imagining Discord narrating and retelling the story for the audience.

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I'm gonna go try this right now! Let's see if my toaster can beat the power of my bathtub full of water! :pinkiehappy:

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Make sure no one you like is IN the bathtub.

Sunset looked up at Wynona. “You know… I never exactly discussed with Applejack how long I was gonna borrow her for.” She slowly turned to face everyone. “Wanna ride the dragon?”

“Well, did you try shattering the stone? I think that sounds like a pretty definitive way to make sure your antagonist never comes back.”

:rainbowdetermined2:: "We did that with the Storm King. Seems to be working so far."
Sunset: "Wait a thousand years and check again before you celebrate."


Good story!
I enjoyed reading it.

“No! Logic and reason! My other one weakness!” The Pony of Shadows began to melt as the fire coated his entire body. “I was supposed to be the coolest and edgiest antagonist that wasn’t in the comics! There was supposed to be an epic fight! I should have at least had some minor character development! I don’t wanna be relegated to just a footnote in a silly little three thousand word comedy ficlet! Nooooooooo!”

Shame he didn't get his character development.

“Well, DUH!” Pinkie Pie interjected. “That’s Stygian. What, you couldn’t tell by the fact that his name was written down on the dialogue tag?”

Pinkie...
I swear at this rate you'll blow through the universe's supply of forth walls!

“Who came back a thousand years later.”

I feel like magic has a hard cap limit of 1,000 years
I swear SOMEONE GET ME THIS RESEARCHED

ok im kind of disappointed she didn't get any nut shots and drag his ass through the portal to fix his fuckup

Fucking brilliant.

this was all pointless bullshit

just how I like it :ajsmug:

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She's cute so it's okay. Either way Putting it like that basically every character in the show is an idiot. Although maybe that isn't exactly wrong..

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I guess this shows something, The children learn the lesson that they should be stupid and still win thanks to luck and friendship

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