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first! I really like this story! faved and watched!
Thank you! Now that the set up is out of the way, I am quite eager to get into the meat of it where the idea was originally inspired heh heh heh.
Oh come on...
Aww this is so sad but funny
aww well thats how jobs are
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And it f###ing sucks!
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And it f###ing sucks! 1031682
Not the story, but the jobs. Great job on the chapter.
I just thought of a way out of this mess
I just thought of a way out of this mess
haha, thanks for clarifying that, aporath. And thanks for the comments, too. I didn't intend for it to necessarily be a kind of sad ending, but there will be more! It will pick up, trust me.
Cute story, are you going to be continuing it or it is kinda dead'd?
Well, first of all I was quite surprised to log in and see all the notifications hah. Thank you for the follows and favorites Ferret. In answer to your question, I don't want this fic to die I just haven't looked at it in a long time. Originally I had started writing them because I was bored at work and didn't have much else to do. However since then my work has really picked up and I haven't been able to write while there. When I get home I'm usually playing a game or somesuch so I just haven't found time for it although I do have ideas for the next chapter.
Christmas break is coming though and I have a lot of time off work. Perhaps a chapter might appear then...
Why can't twilight just ask for a paper and pen and have spike take a letter to let the princess know of there situation? Wouldn't that solve everything?
Loving the story
-See the first chapters comments for my previous one-
thank heavens an update
1) Why dont they ask Celestia for money?"
2) what will Celestia do when she finds out what is going on
3) what if a disaster happens while they are working
*laughs and cheers* Beautiful! Don't worry, I think folks figured life had gotten in the way, though certainly updates sooner won't be disliked n_n
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To be perfectly honest, it started out as a glaring oversight on my part. However there is a plausible explanation as to why Twilight doesn't contact Celestia. In the first chapter, Bottom Line says that he was willing to make a deal with the mane 6 quietly, however because of the visibility of the issue to the patrons around them, everypony knows what is going on. So now it is not only an issue of collecting what is due, but also of avoiding setting a precedent. As Bottom Line says, not seeing any consequences for walking out on a bill, or merely claiming that some other party will cover the tab is a good enough reason for many of his high-society patrons to think they're too good to pay up. The most likely time that Twilight would ask to be able to correspond with Celestia would be when they are all back in the office with Bottom Line. But what would the other patrons see then? Only that they know they didn't pay the bill at the table, were taken back into the office, and then walk out free ponies. It wouldn't quite fit the atmosphere for Bottom Line to go waving around Celestia's IOU/payment around the restaurant for all the guests to see afterward. He has to make sure that a very visible punishment is enforced, and really Twilight and the others don't want to cause further problems for him, so they go along with it, albeit in varying degrees of reluctance of course.
That is something that deserves to be mentioned in the chapter, and I will likely edit in something to fill in later. I hope that it is plausible enough for you. Believe me, when I started trying to envision the scenario that gets them all stuck working for a restaurant, it was difficult to head off any 'out' the mane 6 could have taken, so forgive me for overlooking this one.
TL;DR version: Because then there wouldn't be as interesting of a story to write about.
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ok that makes sense..
I guess it would be ok to be like "You 6 cant leave until Celestia gets here with the money":
Or "I tried to contact Celestia and she is unavailable so we are on our own "
That would be fine as well
I just wonder what Celestia is going to do when she hears about this
"perpetrator of the pervasive plague of gastrointestinal passed gas..."
Cut, pasted, and framed for viewing - I love that line!
Anyway, I can see this becoming adapted into a hilarious radio play or a rare gem of a sit-com. To me, the tone is light, the situation: ironic. Have fun with this!
Not totally understanding Twilight's thought of refusing out of spite. She's the one in the wrong her so the idea of her debating pique feels off. Honestly other than really enjoying the fic so far and yay new chapter complete with creepy stalker!
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It's intended to just be a momentary thought that crosses Twilight's mind, not to be taken too seriously. Kind of a nod towards 'absolute power corrupting absolutely' but the reference is admittedly a little weak. You are on to something though, the tone Twilight uses is not quite what I intended. I rushed the end a bit wanting to get it out before I had another commitment :-p
I... LOVE THIS!
*faves, upvotes, prepares to read more*
eeep its back :
D'aaaaaw this is good.
I can see problems happening already
Oooh, I like this, Carefully constructed and well written. Everypony seems in character, and in too many stories to count, the author wouldn't have bothered explaining Celestia's absence, or would have resorted to Trollestia. You clearly thought this one through, thank you!
1902520 Unfortunately, the window for that opportunity seems to have passed, as a scene has already been caused before anypony could think of something like that
Of course, the managers accusations certainly didn't help matters
You mean ponies. If you think that use of word is too redundant, my patrons, diners, or customers.
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Good catch! Of course I meant ponies...What are people?
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"I just wonder what Celestia is going to do when she hears about this
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Knowing Celestia, she'll cheerfully ask them if they've learned anything, nod sagely as they give a big speech about responsiblity or whatnot, send them on their way, and once she's alone, laugh herself sick, secretly pleased that her beloved student and her beloved students friends can still liven things up wherever they go
you know, i wouldn't be surprised if Dash did dosomething like that
Wow! I just found this story, and I love it! Very funny, everyone is in character, great, realistic OCs.'
An upvote, a fave, and a mustache for you, good sir!
At this point I'm half expecting him to be completely unreasonable and end up on the other end of the stare and half expecting him to start blubbering like that dragon from Dragonshy... either would be rather hilarious.
That said, keep up the good work.
Very nice chapter!
The bunny part at the end got a chuckle out ofme
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Stay tuned, I think you'll be pleased
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Thank you! I love gathering mustaches.
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I'm glad you're enjoying it! Poor Fluttershy. She wouldn't do anything to the General...Would she?
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Heh heh thankies. I worked hard to keep that little bit of dialogue relevant through the revisions.
This was sooo perfect! the first chapter felt like the retelling of an actual episode! I love how well the characters mingled without overshooting boundaries. sweet, cute, and all to realistic. good job.
Five stars out of five, excellent job.
Truly an epic tale, friend. Cute, funny as hell, just an all around great fic.
Though I wish you had followed through on that initial hint of a bit of AppleGrease shipping. Best Poni should get some snuggles, you know?
That end was glorius. xD
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Thank you! One of my primary goals in writing with established characters is to stay within a realistic realm. That's one of my favorite compliments and I strive to earn it!
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I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Thank you, glad you enjoyed it! Sorry to disappoint in the tease. It occurred to me after writing that, that I didn't want Grease to turn into a mary sue type OC, and I developed more important things for him to do.
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I'm so glad to hear that haha. The ending was one of the parts I was most nervous about in its reception. Glad you enjoyed it!
I get the feeling the author has put the worst possible characters for the job in those roles on purpose...
I approve.
This was amazing. Worth reading this instead of doing worksheets in class. Funniest/punny-est last few lines ever…this was a good story dude.
A flawless ending to an awesome fic! I am so overjoyed this got the stellar conclusion it so richly deserved. I can't wait to see more from you.
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But... she did.
Very nice story and good ending, troll celestia is a troll.
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And you ignore all the griffons and changelings that could walk through that door.
Preposterous.
Absolutely flawless. Wish I had followed it from the beginning, but glad I got to shotgun it all at once. Nice twist ending, I thought Celestia was trolling the whole time.
I'm sure it was.
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The buck is this fic's rating?!
HolaHolaHolaHolaHola-Hold up.
You're putting your restaurant in the hooves of a mare who may have caused the death of two colts via hypothermia?
I'm just saying. What proof do you have that she won't teleport him to the Griffon Kingdom?
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Did you not read the last bit? Celestia WAS trolling the entire time. Or rather, genuinely did stand them up.
Anyway, that was fun to read. I was particularly amused by the mild innuendo related to Spike, turning into a bait-and-switch.
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But she wasn't trolling. She made up the whole 'I did this on purpose' on the spot and Luna called her on it.
True trolling would be if she hadn't made it up.
I forsee a great future in writing for you, Raz L Dazzle.
I loved the story, and I can't wait till you do another one