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Amethyst_Dawn


A good story displays a moral, the best ones attach you to the characters who display them.

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When Cheerilee asks to talk with Big Mac after her classes are over, the stallion's nerves skyrocket as his assumptions seem to be correct.

Little does he know that it won't end like he thinks.

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Weeks later Sugar Belle help fill Big Mac's heart and more.

8585177
Indeed, my friend. I agree.

8585061
you know I cant help but wonder if sugar belle is related to rarity?

That did not at all go the direction I might have guessed it would. Quite a lovely scene, though I must admit it seems awfully short for what it's trying to cover. Feels like it should be part of a longer story, and doesn't quite stand on its own, but I think you did what you were trying to do quite well here. Thanks for writing this :twilightsmile:

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I'll admit I do feel it's a little rushed, since this was kind of a last-minute project. But I'm glad I was able to carry the emotions nonetheless. Thank you for the feedback. :twilightsmile:

I also expected Cheer/Mac but I was pleasantly surprised. Yes it's a sad tale, but sometimes two ponies(people) seem right for each other but just don't click. With the advent of Sugar/Mac in the show we have to accept the Cheer/Mac ship is sunk. But yea Mac would never break a mare's heart. Attraction doesn't automatically equal romance. Cheerilee and Marble Pie just weren't meant to be with Mac.

Big Mac was laughing before he knew it, undoubtedly confusing the poor schoolmarm as he leaned forward. Once he was able to catch his breath, his eyes beamed at her.

I think you meant mare.

8587647
Good catch, but I did mean schoolmarm.

8587682
Oh my bad, didn't know that word existed :derpytongue2:

8587724
Welcome to the world of reading my fics. :derpytongue2:

Still a better love story then Twilight:moustache:

8589014
True, because this is based off a true story. :moustache:

8589043 Oh? I'm curious now.

8589050 That/this was what it was referring to? Impressive. Sorry about that.

8589051
Yep, and it's all good. Oddly enough, I think we're even better friends now than we were before.

Big Mac looked out towards the center of town. “Ah… Ah don't rightly know,” he admitted, turning back to her. “But Ah do know one thing, Cheer: it ain’t entirely about what the other pony ‘deserves’ or ‘don’t deserve’, it’s mostly about if there’s love between ‘em…”

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~Melly~

Nice job. This should have been in the show/comics. Also, you said "schoolmarm" not "schoolmare" near the end.

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