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Chokfi


Just a Post-Apoc Bunbun writing to pass the time...

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Electra, the young and newly crowned captain of the Budgie Dream, has spent her entire life being told of the Carrion Skull, the Pirate ghost ship that supposedly has been flying the skies for over 200 years under the guiding wing of the legendary Celaneo. After her mother, the captain of the Dream, dies Electra becomes more and more enticed by the dreams of treasure.

Her crew leaves her, due to her young inexperience, and abandon the trading ship. And, with a bit of a twinkle in her eye, Electra forms a new crew with one propose: Finding the Carrion Skull or die trying.

And so, the motley crew made up of all the flying races began to raid towns for supplies, and become a new force in the wasteland. However, after conflicts with the enclave, they gain a brand new reputation as they continue to try and find the lost ghost ship.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 11 )

Huh i like the idea it's very intresting.

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Thanks, I like it. It's going to take a different path, as the next few chapters will be about the crew and not about any journy.

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I like that idea. I oddly have the same idea myself but of a cargo ship on the water. Kind of like the show the last ship.

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It's going to be about piracy

Time to spit on our hooves, hoist the black flag, and start slitting throats.

I look forward to seeing more.

Well, only one song to go with this story. (And no, it's not He's a Pirate.)

I look forwards to traveling the sea and skies with you, matey! Time to sharpen my sword...

So, a noble pirate with a heart of gold. Sadly, kindness and other traits like that are a hard thing to keep in the Equestrian wastelands...

Heh, our hero's like a regular Captain Jack Sparrow or Edward Kenway, isn't she? Great chapter, though might I suggest making these a bit longer, adding more to them?

You really need to proof-read before you post your chapter, even your author's note contains mistakes, that makes the whole process of reading unpleasant and jarring to the reader. Even using a relatively simple tool like word should facilitate your task.

I really liked the original version you posted though, so if you can spellcheck those mistakes away, you should see a definite improvement in the quality of your story. Keep going, I love to see stories that make use of 'rare' creatures like parrots and sphinxes.

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yeah, I have trouble cus this thing doesn't have spell check so I don't notice they arn't spelled correctly.

I fixed most of the spelling errors.

I'm thinking I won't have a sphinx in this fic, and give him his own instead actualy, tho.

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