Behold! I bring you the written word! ...That is all.
It seems Rainbow Dash is a little overeager when it comes to stallions; can Applejack give her any sound advice to help her out when her aggressive attitude backfires?
Written for the Sexty Minute Ponies tumblr challenge, but this one is far, FAR better than my entry for the previous prompt, so I thought I'd share it here. And yes, the teen rating is intentional.
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Good story. But i think you overdid it with AJ accent. It was really hard to read sometimes.
Well, time to read this story
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934972 I also think it was a littler overdone
, other then that it was a overall great story! And JujubeLand, are you making any more chapters?
This was really good. I loved it!
Hmm, Rainbow just throwing herself at any stallion pretty much at anytime? The mare is all about loyalty, and that doesn't sound very loyal to me. But, whatever, this is still a good story with a nice message.
It's good that AJ is very reasonable in this.
Also, Apple Bloom is two words.
934972 I'm glad you liked the story. As far as the accent goes, I didn't feel like it was overdone; perhaps I got a little carried away, given the whole time limit thing.
935008 Thanks for the read! See above for my response concerning AJ's accent. Also, I wasn't planning on extending this particular piece unless I get enough requests to do so. Even then, it would have to wait until I'm finished with The Second Time Around.
935096 Much appreciated!
935592 The way I see it, yes, Rainbow Dash is the Element of Loyalty, but she's also very impulsive, and in my opinion, her reckless, devil-may-care attitude would carry over into her love life as well. I also feel like she might not have been raised in the best of environments, and that would also factor in to her...overeager ways. That's why AJ seemed like the perfect complement to her: having been brought up by Granny Smith (not even gonna touch the whole parents issue right about now), I can see her having a much different, more down-to-earth set of values than RD, therefore providing her with an insight that the pegasus would lack. ...And I fixed the "Apple Bloom" gaffe. Your commentary is always appreciated, sir; thank you for the read. (And thank Celestia this is better than that other piece of garbage, amirite?)
Gah, I've been in the south too long. I didn't have any trouble reading AJ's lines.
Anywho, good read! I too would be interested in seeing what happens between them.
Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!
If you need some help with writing or proofreading, give me a message and I'll most likely be available
. I'm saying this because I want to see this story go on 
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I MUST know how the story ends