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"I'm significant!" screamed the dust speck slowly spinning on the bigger dust speck which was floating solemnly inside an even larger dust speck.

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Confused and alone, Zenith suddenly awakens in this land full of color, ponies, and friendship. Soon enough, he realizes he has become one of these brightly colored equines. For most fans, this would be a dream come true, but his cynicism assures him that this will be a nightmare. How will he fare in his time in Equestria? Will he make any friends or stay solitary?

(Real talk, don't take this story too seriously as a self-insert. It's usually updated whenever I'm stuck on another project.)

Chapters (9)
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Comments ( 9 )

And how will Pinkie handle this pessimist?

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She'll find a way, whether I like it or not. :)

This story deserves more attention. While you follow the timeline of the series you are not just writting again the same chapters almost verbatim like many of the stories that try something similar, and it's all changed thanks to the new interactions between characters.
Keep the good work. I'll be tracking this story and see where it goes :twilightsmile:

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Thanks! I'm glad you like it!
And your point is absolutely perfect. If I re-used all of the dialogue from the episode, then inserted myself, I feel like all I'd be able to say is 'Cool' or 'I agree'. That's why I only just take some important parts and then carve my own story in there somehow. Most of the time, I want my character to learn with them, not just be there clapping on the sidelines. I'm glad that you see that.
Thanks again! :yay:

I’m pretty sure swearing fits the ‘T’ rating, as long as it isn’t a slur, and is not super excessive. The [BEEP] is kind of disrupting the story.

Also, pessimist ponies are the most hilarIOUS THING IVE EVER SEEN! :trollestia:

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Fair point. Wasn't quite sure if I had to censor it or not for that rating, so I just played it safe. I chose that purely because I don't like asterisks censoring words, but I might change it to make it flow easier. If need be, I'll change the rating. Still new to fimfiction and fanfiction and all the rules. Better safe than sorry.

Thanks for your kind words and criticism! It means a lot that people enjoy this story!

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Thanks. Very concise. :ajbemused:

In all seriousness, thank you for checking out the story!

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Mkay thanks mate.
Keep it up lad.

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