With being outcast from Ponyville and only feeling ill staying in Cloudsdale, Gilda has lived in the Everfree forest for over a year ever since she lost her friend Rainbow Dash. More than half her nest lays littered with crumpled and pierced letters she never sent, and the creatures of the forest have given up on comforting her. Gilda has never felt more alone in her life.
When the wandering Fluttershy happens upon her home, Gilda finds forgiveness in the last place she would ever expect. But will the rest of Ponyville forgive her?
And will that include a specific rainbow pegasus?
Chapters (5)
I want moar please!?
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There's going to be more; don't worry.
Thats good. No, it's great. Let's roll it up, bottle it, cork it, and let's see it on EQ Daily, shall we?
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XD I wanna submit it to EqD, but I'm going to finish at least one more chapter first, if not two.
Very nice start. The imagery was described perfectly; it really encapsulated Gilda's isolation. I'm impressed.
I'm interested to see where this goes. I always felt that there is a lot more depth to Gilda's character than what was shown on screen. I'll be watching this story closely.
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Thanks! I really appreciate it.
The story's mostly inspired by Past Sins and realizing that all my friends hate Gilda's guts.
Your writing is quite good. Very descriptive and, while sad, manages to stay just on the right side of whiny. My issue would be with Fluttershy, though - she sounds far too confident, or at least not timid enough. While she does have a track record of getting her courage up to eleven when her friends need it (and by extension, a distraught Gilda), starting a conversation with "Hey, are you alright up there?" kinda clashes with the personality of whispering, squeaky-voiced, I'-so-sorry-for-bothering-you Fluttershy.
Damn it, another top notch story to follow...
I can see the beginning of a powerful story here
I'll be tracking it and waiting for more!
1295 That was me, BTW
somehow fimfiction logged me out...
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Thats nothing. I broke mySQL on here once. It added a space in front of my name, therefore I didn't exist.
Glad ya liked though! I appreciate it!
I am not one for fiction... but this was amazing, and I want more.
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Aww come on, let's not make Fluttershy cry again!
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Is that in order?
<=O
...I like this story. It's incredibly well-written and sets the mood for Gilda's regret over everything she's done. I think this should be made into a canon episode. I don't know if small children will have the sensitivity to appreciate a sad story, but the older audience (which is about 90% of it) will.
Moar plz. Must....see...next...chapter....
D'aaaawwww Fluttershy's the best.
*hug*
omc this is gonning to be a sad story i can tell im almost in tears now please finish this
Oh gods this is up to
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levels of sorrow! MOAR MOAR MOAR!!!
I think you might have overplayed the crying/sorrow a bit, but otherwise this almost exactly how I'd imagined a Gilda forgiveness fic would work (with the possible exception of Rainbow jumping the gun on Fluttershy). Nice job.
Aww it's over already? D: I need some way to tell when you've uploaded new chapters.... I was a little late for it this time.
Gilda seems a little too weepy, given her general characterization. If she was this massively torn up about her falling-out with Dash, she'd likely just become more abrasive, or express it some other, likely somewhat aggressive way.
Only just started reading this story with the latest update.
This initial chapter is well-written, but I find the high-brow prose style slightly at odds with Gilda's rough, punk-like manner in Griffon the Brush-Off.
It's kind of like reading a story about Charlie Sheen as written by Lord Byron - not necessarily bad, but perhaps a bit...disorienting.
And I second Quinch's comment about FS's timidity, though I do acknowledge that it can be difficult to get scenes moving when she's "properly" shy and retiring.
Anyhoo, nice job regardless. I shall read on.
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Danke; I appreciate you reading it.
I would have never expected to be called "high-brow". XD I guess it just seems that way. Just note that I don't go out of my way to seem fancy with what I write; it just comes out that way on its own. Mostly I just write in a style that I think is fun to write in.
And I know Fluttershy isn't exactly like she would be. If I could pull out a perfectly in-character Fluttershy while keeping the story on course I would, but I'm more intently focused on making the plot move forward and giving other characters a chance.
Once again, I appreciate it.
I always love the Gilda stories this fandom makes! :3
I'm always saddened when i get finished reading a chapter, I have an urge to read more
Another good chapter, but I noticed a mistype and I have a question regarding RD.
"Ha! You sound like a lighweight, Gildy. Can't take a pint o' beer?"
(about 3/4'th of the way down)
>lighweight
And about Rainbow Dash, why is she always saying "Oy"? I don't remember her saying that in the show, and I can't really imagine her saying it in this fanfiction. If you want to give her some type of custom accent or something like that, at least make it a believable one.
I hope to see more progress on this story, as it isn't being updated too abundantly.
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As I said in response to someone else on EqD, I personally don't understand why everyone is so up in arms about "oy" as a phrase. The person I'm referring to on EqD was more worried about it being a cockney accent, but the way I see it "Oy" is just another way of going about saying "Uhhg" or "Jeez" or another sign of annoyance. I'm considering removing it, but it just feels odd to ME to take it out.
I'll work on updating more.
PS; fixed the typo. Thanks for pointing it out.
Loving this Story. Hell I love most Gilda Stories this Fandom pumps out! They're mostly just plain awesome!
Another amazing chapter. Love your gilda personality. And on a side note, Dont take the "Oy" out. Its your fic write it how you want to, besides i like to see a bit of change every once in a while.
Triscy why you make me so jelly?
Also, who really gives a crap about the Oy thing? It's his story let him write how he wants to.
Nice to see Gilda getting out of the 24/7 despair mode and into something more representative of her canonical appearance (angry Gildy's fun). This was a pretty solid continuation, albeit with a few odd contrivances (I'm down with the "of all the bars in town she walked into mine" bit, but Berry's talking quirk and Fluttershy being down a good ~24 hours seem like ways to just move on/simplify the story).
Neat fic. (I was absolutely hoping for a drunk Gilda/Dash confrontation for a bit there, but I can see the reason not to.)
Oh and as for the "Oy!" think. I don't think you should worry too much about it (though it does make me read Dash with a Jewish accent for some reason, "Oy vey") though the proximity of its uses might be something to look at.
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D'aaw
Aww... tears bring back friends together...
But... is this really the end? It feels a bit abrupt, if you don't mind me saying so... especially with all the build-up from before... will there be another story?
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I might work in an epilogue; otherwise this is the end. This story turned into sort of a stress thing in the end, so I wanted to be done. I enjoyed all the feedback, but this wasn't a serious project in the first place; it was more of a tryout.
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I have to agree with Wanderer D. All the build up, and this is all we get? RD and Gilda meet after a year and all that happens is a hug and everything is over? Talk about unfulfilling.
The ending felt a little... unfulfilling. You had a few spelling and syntax errors in the prose, but nothing too egregious. As for the ending itself, it seems strange that Gilda would change her mind so quickly. It was just so abrupt that I felt a little unsatisfied; the tension wasn't really there.
A solid effort, but it needed a little more punch to it especially with such a strong opening.
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I know, and I'm sorry. I tried my best to at least give it some closure, and make an effort to avoid total failure, but in the end it just felt like the story was chewing at me. The excitement was all there at the beginning, but it sort of tapered off at the end. Prose isn't my home in my creative endeavors; it's just a storage shed out back I hang out in on rare occasions.
I may try and rework the ending at some point, and I'm planning a possible epilogue that would add on to it, but I'm not making any promises and I'm not going to worry myself sick over it. This was a learning experience for me, and I've learned well from it.
Sorry for the disappointment.
It's a simple ending, but in this case a simple ending is the best.
Hate to jump on the less-than-fulfilling ending pile, but yeah... it was a bit abrupt and sudden. I was honestly expecting some sort of refusal setting up Dash chasing Gilda through the streets or something. Dunno why, just happened to be where my brain went last chapter. Think I at least expected Dash and Gilda to have a talk, something you might end up with in the (possible) epilogue. I think the happy of the happy reunion is just oddly brief and there is a desire for some "what happened next."
I think that otherwise, the story's been pretty solid. This chapter was a bit rough on the technical side of things. Might need an editing pass.
Still, nice job.
That ending
Talk about anti-climactic
While yea it is abrupt, I can defiantly understand just wanting a story to be done and finished.
When the feeling goes from "Hell yes, IDEA!" to "Oh hell, kill me now", it's a good bet to finish up quick.
Yeah, the ending seemed pretty abrupt and didn't entirely make much sense. Otherwise, however, it was a good story, and I enjoyed it. So, other than the somewhat sudden and sloppy ending, I'd say good job. Thanks for the story! :3