How Could You Want A Pony Like Me

ETempest's Princess
MLP: FiM
Romance
Comedy
Slice of Life
Tempest and Twilight have been dating almost a year what will happen at the Grand Galloping Gala
Twilight
Luna
OC
Cadance
Main 6
Omegawolfben · 2.1k words · 62 7 · 4.1k views

Tempest and Twilight have been dating a few weeks and a group of ponies have made Tempest question her new life and realtionship with Twilight.

(Minor spoilers for MLP Movie and Season 7 Final)

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Dillmccathron

Dillmccathron #1 · Oct 8th, 2017 · · ·

This is a great pairing keep up a good work update more soon

Omegawolfben

Omegawolfben #2 · Oct 8th, 2017 · · ·

I actually just did a second one which involves a food fight at the Gala I'm uploading it now :)

Hopeful_Ink_Hoof

Hopeful_Ink_Hoof #3 · Oct 8th, 2017 · 3 · ·

I'm sorry, but this needs some editing. There is a lack of proper punctuation that is extremely off-putting.

G33kySt3v3

G33kySt3v3 #4 · Oct 8th, 2017 · 2 · ·

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I am in agreement, with just a little editing this short little thing could be a lot better.

Texus

Texus #5 · Oct 9th, 2017 · 1 · ·

Tempest had become quite protective of Twilight since they started dating and anytime a stallion or mare tried to make a move on Twilight she would simply spark her horn making them back away.

while I like the "being protective part", I hoped they would have the talk that would start their dating.

This was good, but I kind of hope for a long story somewhere.

Omegawolfben

Omegawolfben #6 · Oct 9th, 2017 · 2 · ·

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I'm making a more longer story now which has two chapters already so maybe that's more up your alley :)

Texus

Texus #7 · Oct 9th, 2017 · 1 · ·

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Thank you, I think I noticed it the moment you have told me about it.

Kervin619

Kervin619 #8 · Oct 11th, 2017 · 2 · ·

Aww this is sweet!

PrincessStarlightGlimmer

PrincessStarlightGlimmer #9 · Oct 16th, 2017 · 2 · ·

Good story, but it lacked punctuation in many areas where it would be necessary.

kildeez

kildeez #10 · Oct 31st, 2017 · 7 · ·

This story was a massive run-on sentence. Punctuation, my friend, commas!

mycarhasaMoustache

mycarhasaMoustache #11 · Dec 4th, 2017 · 2 · ·

The story its self is great. But the lack of punctuation, Poor grammar and repeated use of the wrong "your" make this hard to read.
Please find someone to proof read this, With a little bit of a clean up it could be an amazing story.

MixMassBasher