• Published 15th Nov 2017
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The Storm and the Scorpion - BronyWriter



Prince Antares and his sister have to navigate an Equestria occupied by the Storm King and his army.

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Finale

I walked through the battlefield, completely blank from everything that had happened. My family was safe and Equestria had been taken back. That was really all that mattered in the end. The Storm King would never hurt anyone ever again.

I circled the castle until I found what I was looking for. I found them underneath the main balcony where we would give speeches to the crowd: three pikes holding the heads of Night Stalker, Burning Blaze and Shining Armor. It seemed that they had been well-preserved, as they didn't even smell and didn't look a little decayed, despite them having been dead for almost a month. I took a deep breath and teleported them into my weapons room. If nothing else, Cadance didn't need to see this. She was emotionally destroyed enough without the sight of her husband like this.

With that settled, I continued circling the castle until I reached the destroyed balcony where Kristen and Tempest had fought. Shattered glass littered the ground and crunched underneath my hooves. I found Tempest in the middle of the shattered glass. She wasn't moving, and a few of her limbs were twisted at odd angles. I imagined that the only reason she wasn't lying in a pool of blood was her armor. I lit my horn and rolled her over so that she was facing me. Her glassy eyes stared ahead at nothing, and a quick spell revealed that she was gone.

She didn't suffer enough, in my opinion. She should have shared the fate of her master. I lifted her up with my magic and stood her up as straight as I could before casting a petrification spell on her, totally encasing her in stone. Even though she was encased in stone, I could see that her expression wasn't as lively as the other statues. Her eyes still stared ahead blankly. If one didn't know the story behind this particular statue, they'd still be able to tell that something was wrong.

Whatever. She wouldn't be able to hurt anypony again. I teleported her statue to the statue garden. I'd move her and the Storm King to a better area of the garden where they'd remain forever; one representing agony, the other the price of betrayal.

Not exactly statues we wanted to put front and center for foals touring the gardens.

With nothing else to do, I turned around and walked away from the castle. Hundreds of bodies from both sides littered the streets, and I briefly thought about taking to the air to avoid stepping on the fallen soldiers. All around me beings of every type were gathering the dead from their sides. I noticed with some distaste that my orders to leave none of them alive had not been followed. A small group of unarmed Storm Creatures were being guarded by a dozen minotaur guards. Great. Just great. Now I'd have to figure out what to do with them. It would be a war crime to just kill them all right then and there.

Granted, we were so far past that point I wasn't even sure it would matter.

I reached the plains outside of the city and saw even more destruction. The Storm Creatures here had been almost totally wiped out, and tens of thousands of them were dead on the ground. I passed by several crashed airships, their undersides splattered with blood from the Storm Creatures they had crushed.

At the end of it all, I saw my victorious army, some of them cleaning up the dead, while many just stood around and talked to each other. I could see weariness on the faces of each and every one of them as the adrenaline of battle had faded away. Some of them had even laid down for naps.

In the sky the fleet of airships just floated there. Mesud would take his back, of course, but that left the question of what to do with the enemy's. We'd probably scrap them for parts. Maybe we could see what technology we could glean from them.

We'd won, but I still had a trillion different things to do. Before we could leave a lot to the minotaurs under our supervision, but now we had the daunting task of rebuilding our own country. It was likely that we'd need a lot of help from our allies, who hadn't suffered under the Storm King. The fact that Cloudsdale had been untouched would be an invaluable advantage. Our weather production wouldn't be affected, which would help a lot.

Maybe now wasn't the time to think about all of that. My duty as a prince of Equestria meant that I should be putting my subjects over myself and my family. They had suffered just as much as we had. For the moment, though? My family needed me. At the moment I just wanted to be a pony taking care of his family, not a prince leading a nation.

I stared out at the destruction of my home and wanted nothing more than to hide from the world.

* * * *

Celestia shifted in my grasp as we laid in our bed. I could hear her light breathing as she slept. Hopefully she wasn't having any nightmares. I had avoided sleep myself for that very reason. Between nearly being killed, being sold by Capper, imprisoned by Verko, the deaths of Blaze and Rapids, seeing my family taken from me, the fighting and death and destruction... I couldn't do it. I'd be having nightmares for weeks, if not months. I wanted to avoid that as long as I could.

I glanced over at a small bed that we'd placed next to ours where Nymeria slept. From what I understood, Luna would be taking care of Nymeria, Maia and Flurry Heart to make sure that they had peaceful dreams. How she'd do it with everything that had happened, I didn't know, but dreams were her realm, so I trusted her.

As for me, I just stared at the wall, the events of the past month replaying in my head over and over again despite my best efforts. There were times like these when I cursed my alicorn memory. Seeing the bodies of Blaze and Rapids, as well as the near catatonic state of my sister would be burned into my mind's eye forever.

Celestia shifted in my grasp again and her breathing shifted, letting me know she'd woken up. She rolled over and nuzzled my chest.

"You are still awake? Have you slept at all?"

"No," I muttered. "I don't really feel like it."

"Antares, you must be exhausted."

"I feel like I'm about to drop dead, but I just... can't right now. There's too much to think about."

"You have been through much. We all have." I glanced down to see her looking up at me. "What happened after the Storm King's invasion? What did you do?"

"No. I don't want to talk about it. Not now. Maybe never." I took a deep breath and hugged my wife closer. "After everything that happened it's not important. We won, and that's all that matters."

"It is important, Antares," Celestia said a little forcefully. "It is clearly affecting you, and it is not healthy to merely bottle that up. You're my husband. I'm here to listen if you need me, and I feel that you do."

I was silent for a few moments as I chewed over her words. She didn't need to hear it right away, but she was also right that I shouldn't bottle it up. I had enough self-awareness to know that if I was keeping things in, it tended to come out sideways until I confronted whatever the problem was. I took a deep, shaky breath and squeezed my eyes shut so that I wouldn't cry. I couldn't cry in front of her.

"I... I did terrible things; things I don't know if I can ever forgive myself for. I lost myself in my rage and helplessness more times than I can count since this all began. I've killed and tortured beings who didn't pose a threat. Some of them could have just gone on with their lives, but after what they had done to me, I had to hurt them. I had to kill them."

"If this is about what you did to the Storm King, I understand," Celestia said running her hoof down my chest. "Given the circumstances, I am not completely sure that I would not have acted in a similar way."

"It was more than just him. After retreating, I ended up in Klugetown. One of the locals took advantage of me in my weakened state and sold me to the local crime lord. I killed them both. I didn't need to... but I did."

I glanced out the window in the direction of the castle gardens, where we'd placed the statues of Tempest and the Storm King in a secluded corner. It sparked a thought in me.

"Celestia, when you were in the statue, were you... aware?"

Celestia was silent for a few moments as she chewed over my words. She took a deep breath and nuzzled closer to me. "Yes. Not as aware as I am now, but I could certainly see and hear what was happening around me. I heard the cries of the foals. I heard the destruction of my home. It was torture unlike anything I had ever experienced. I couldn't even weep in fear."

I tightened my jaw and hugged my wife again. "And I just did that to him."

"I do not think I would endorse it under normal circumstances, but after what he did to Nymeria, Maia and Flurry Heart..." Celestia tone turned dark enough that my legs twitched. "He deserves it. He deserves to endure what he has done to others."

"Yeah. I know. I still have moments where I question it, though."

"Of course. Brutality of that nature is not something we gravitate towards, even in dark times. However, there comes a time when we must show that we are not a weak people just because we strive for peace. If that is what must be done so that no one like him dares attack us again, then that is what we must do."

"Yeah." I was silent for a few more minutes, just feeling my wife's body against mine. It would have relaxed me under normal circumstances. "I can't imagine what Kristen is going through. No one is really prepared to be in war, of course, but after what Tempest did to her, I'm not sure how she's going to cope."

"She is stronger than she appears to be. Whether that is merely how she is, or the result of her new form, she will endure. Of course it will not be simple. We will do whatever we can to help her."

"I put too much on her at once," I muttered. "I completely relied on her in the beginning, then asked her to do things she wasn't comfortable with."

"And she stepped up to the challenge, as you can see," Celestia pointed out. "No one is comfortable in war. I, of course, hope she never has to make those choices again."

"Yeah, me too." I took a deep breath and nuzzled deep into the pillows. "It's going to be okay, right?"

Celestia paused for one moment too many. "Yes. I think it will be."

* * * *

Dawn had just broken as I walked down the halls of Canterlot Castle. I hadn't managed to get any sleep, even after Celestia's insistence. I'm sure I'd sleep for a week at some point, but for now I had too much on my mind.

I turned the corner and stopped in my tracks when I saw Kristen staring out of one of the windows. She didn't move or acknowledge that I was there at all. She just stared into the distance at nothing in particular. I walked up to her and put my hoof on her back. She didn't even flinch.

"Hey. How are you doing?"

"How do you think?" she muttered, rubbing her stomach where Tempest had impaled her.

"Yeah, I get it," I said. "It's going to be tough, I know that, but--"

"TD... I need to go."

I frowned and took my hoof off of her back. "Go? What do you mean?"

"I mean that I need to get out of here for a while." She finally turned and looked at me. "I need some time to think things through. Process what happened."

"Are you saying going back to Baltimare and shutting yourself in your room for a bit?"

Kristen shook her head. "No. I'm leaving Equestria. I mean, nothing's going to happen to me, right? I'm the chaos god. If this can't stop me..." She grabbed at her stomach again.

"I..." My chest tightened up and I took a step back. "Kristen, I won't stop you if you feel it's right, but... come on. We're family. You're my sister. I need--"

"I just have some tings to figure out." She took a deep breath and glanced at the ground. "And... I think you do, too. This whole thing changed us both, and I don't think I like it. I know that it was a war and all, and you were saving your family, but I've seen and done things I don't know how to handle right now."

"Then stay. We'll help you through them," I insisted. "Celestia and Luna have had long lives and--"

"I know. But I'm gonna have a long one too, right? I can't stay under their hooves forever. I don't want to be completely reliant on you guys." She put her hoof on my leg. "I don't think I'll be gone forever, though."

"How long do you think you'll be gone?"

Kristen shrugged. "Months? Years? Decades? I can't really say. I'll come back when I'm ready."

Each word was like a punch to the gut, but... "If you're sure this is what you need."

"It is." Kristen took a few steps back and turned to the window again. "I'll be okay."

With that, she spread her wings and flew through the open window. I looked out and stared at her until she'd completely disappeared over the horizon.

* * * *

The trip was much shorter this time. I knew right where I was going and I didn't have my dying brother to take care of. It all seemed much less... overwhelming. Not quite a simple morning flight, but I wasn't scared that we'd all die.

It was on the third straight day of flying that I reached my destination. I landed right at the edge of the lake and hopped in. The feeling of the water pressure around me was relaxing, and I just floated for a bit under the water. After a few minutes, I began pushing myself through the water with my wings. I remembered where I needed to go. I reached the draped seaweed and pushed through.

I was instantly greeted with the sight of the seaponies going about their day. Despite what the Storm King had done to them, they were very content. Happy, even. For the first time in a long time, I managed a genuine smile. Maybe this could work out.

"Kristen!"

I didn't even have time to react before I was tackled and grabbed in a crushing hug. The force sent both of us flying, but I stopped us with my wings before we hit a wall.

"Hey, Skystar. How are you?"

"I'm so, so, great now!" Skystar squeed. "You're back!"

"Told you I would," I chuckled while trying to wiggle out of her oddly strong grip. "I have a little bit of news for you guys, too."

"Ooh!" Skystar instantly let me go and swam back a few feet. "What happened? What's your news?"

I looked around us and noticed that the various seaponies in the area had stopped their days to look at the commotion the two of us had made. Even Queen Novo had swam out of her throne room and looked at us in interest.

"It's... um, it's about the Storm King." The seaponies all gasped and began muttering among themselves, which gave me a minute to organize my thoughts. "He, uh... well, the other nations on land all got together and fought him. And we won. We defeated him, and he's never going to bother anybody ever again. We're safe."

A deafening cheer instantly went through the crowd, and I didn't react in time to avoid another crushing hug from Skystar. I weakly chuckled and managed to slide my forelegs out of her grip to hug her back. Novo swam up to us, and I actually saw a genuine smile on her face.

"Antares succeeded? Truly?"

I nodded back. "Yeah. He freed Equestria and the rest of the rulers. It wasn't easy, but... he's not going to hurt anyone else."

"There is no chance?"

I shook my head. "We have him trapped in stone. Even if he did somehow manage to escape that, we completely broke his body. He's not going to recover. He wouldn't even have an army to lead."

Novo took in a deep breath and lowered her shoulders as she exhaled. I could tell that I'd just lifted a huge weight off of her back. She took another moment, then smiled at me again. "Then we have much to do. We can return to the surface safely now. We can rebuild."

"Are you gonna stay, Kristen?" Skystar squeed. "Are you?"

"Yeah, if you'll have me."

"Of course, Princess. Stay as long as you'd like," Novo said.

"Good, then I'll be around for a little while, then. I'll help you rebuild."

"We welcome your help," Novo said, putting a flipper on my shoulder.

I smiled back at her as Skystar let out happy sobs. I hugged her back and closed my eyes, feeling for the first time in a while that things might just be okay.

Comments ( 25 )

Some people find solace in rebuilding. to see something positive come out of all the bad that has happened. I guess that's her solution.

I'm kind of disappointed with this story. I'm not saying it was bad I just personally didn't care for it. Nothing all that interesting happened, it feels like we've done this with Antares before and there were a lot of character deaths but they didn't really have any weight to them.

The worst part is that the villains had no depth they just existed to do bad things to Antares so Antares could get revenge on them, basically, they were just serviceable but not very interesting. Admittedly that's fine for the Storm King but it feels like a crime to reduce Tempest to a 2-dimensional bad guy.

Overall the story was fine but definitely not my favourite TD story only barely beating Wanderings for second last if I made a ranking list.

Damn... This war will leave scars on Equestria far deeper than their last one did.

Kristen at least found a place she can stay and has a friend that will help her heal. She seems more at home under the sea anyway. Hopefully with his family's help. Antares will also be able to able to rise above his pain as well.

Anyway, while this was certainly a dark take on the movie. It was another awesome entry in this amazing world you've created. I can't wait to see what you have planned next for Antares and Celestia.

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Well, I've got a Kristen story in this timeline planned. Not nearly as dark.

9128837
I'd be lying if I said it was the best, but I hope it at least fixed a few problems with the movie, which I did enjoy.

Odd that you dislike Wanderings. It's the favorite of a lot of people.

This fic was like watching a car crash in slow motion, but kind of in a good way. The feeling of helplessness as events snowball away from expectations.

you know i said it with the movie and i'll say it here, theoretically novo should be coming back to a completely hostile world, at least politically. she violated a treaty, generally that means even if your still buddy's with people, your countries aren't allies anymore until renegotiation happen, and usually that leads to high prices.

This story really just feels like "bad shit happens just because". There's no real growth, it's not even like this is new territory because really it's been done before, so all it does is kill off a bunch of characters. Some in a particularly brutal way, and off page. Lovehorse's husband seems like he deserves more than "oh yeah his head got put on a spike at some point, Cadance can have fun dealing with his brutal murder".

For me, it's hard to take any real satisfaction in reading this. It's just an excuse to have Antares angst about a bunch of bad shit, beat some people up to show how badass he is (something which to me feels like it's becoming too common, him displacing canon characters), and kill characters off. No depth to the characters, no intrigue, no growth. The story could not exist and nothing much would change other than a few characters being alive and probably a little less PTSD.

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Like I said above: I'd be lying if I thought this was my best one. It's not. Hopefully you like the next one better because it's an adventure story that's way less dark, as much better world building, and really explores Kristen as a character in a way that I hope improves her standing, because I know she can be kind of a hit-and-miss character for a lot of people.

9129222
That's life for you, or in this case war sometimes it's just shit.
Sometimes bad people come and do bad things just cause.
Not everything has to be explained and not everyone has to be fleshed out or have thier backstory told.
Do you think that TD would care why Tempest betrayed Equestria? Or would show sympathy after all she has done?


Overall I enjoyed this story.

Glad I waited for the ending to read this fully.

9128902
It's not that I dislike Wanderings just that if I made a list for TD stories something would have to be last.

9129797
Right, but it's a favorite for a lot of people.

9129303
Never in the history of humanity has there been a case where somebody has done something 'Just Because'. It's the most unrealistic thing you can use in a story

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If course, and I'm sure that Tempest and the Storm King had their reasons. Antares wouldn't care about that, and this version of Tempest wouldn't care about monologueing about it. In the end, it doesn't matter as much because it's from Antares's perspective. It would be a far different story is we'd stuck with Tempest more.

And yes, she was far and away the best thing about the movie.

Well, in the end there is even more blood that what the movie let others think. Could be the butterfly effect of Antares?

Finally found time to finish this.

I will say, as a long time reader (Wanderings was just getting started, if I remember correctly) I didn't enjoy it as much as the others. There are quite a few reasons, but the biggest one I can say is that it just... doesn't feel like a Non-Bronyverse story. Even the darker parts of Breaking or The Prince had at least some levity to them. I don't know. Maybe I'm still expecting Antares to act like TD even though at this point they're pretty much two distinct characters.

But I still liked it. regardless. Well written with the quality I've come to expect from ya. Will make sure to start the sequel soon!

0/10 you killed my cat husband

I had no new chapter notifications in my inbox when I started this story.

Now have over 30.

That's how good this story was.

Yeah, may not be the best in the series, but I still enjoyed it.
Strange that we didn't hear anything about Element bearers in the epilogue.

Would this one be considered an AU to the Resurgence timeline, or where it will eventually lead to?

Thank you for this ending :yay:

Certainly a darker take on the movie. I noticed that the fics with him being Antares seem to be much more violent than when he was just TD. Human TD killed a couple guys total, alicorn Antares kills people often and for less. I dunno if this is the Equestria I want to go to when I kick the bucket, but it's a good one to read about.

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the problem is your reasoning doesn't make her actions justified or acceptable, she's still making the story worse for how she acts.

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I dunno. At the end of the day she does step up. She repeatedly fights Tempest and even defeats her. She does take the airships down. She fights of Verko's guards. She disables soldiers in the battles. She doesn't like seeing her brother murder people and mind rape them. Who would? She even points out that her brother is seeing the other troops as disposable fodder if it means getting his country back, which is what he's doing. At the end of the day, she takes the airship down. She kills Tempest. She saves her nieces. She's not sitting there and nagging all of the time.

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