It should have been so simple, just make some friends, find the elements and beat the villain that tries to make the night last forever, then find out she's Celestia's actual sister and absolve her as they hug… Well, perhaps not simple per say, but expected.
So then why when they defeated Nightmare Moon did Luna ignore her sister Celestia? And why did she instead hugged Twilight as if she was happier to see her then her sister? Why was it Celestia who soon after groveled and begged Luna for forgiveness, rather then the other way around? And what's with this godmother thing?
For that matter, what else changed?
Chapters (11)
interesting shall be watching
Awesome story so far. Though Celestia still needs to repent a lot more, both to Luna as well as Twilight. Also miscommunication is a bitch. So much heartache. Hope Chryssie will forgive Luna after everything is out in the open and they share a tearfull hug.
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I've got plenty planned for future chapters, Celestia's actions will have repercussions, though it may not seem like it at first, so I hope you'll like it.
should be diner
twilight ate meat!!!! hehehe. often wondered whether changlings eat meat or they are herbavores like the rest of the ponies. but with their sharp teeth im guessing meat along with making them look scarier
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Ah, thanks, must have missed that when I typed it, I'll alter it to the proper wording.
Heh, and as I see it, they likely can eat more then that, but you'll see that in one of my future stories.
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im glad to help
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As they were wondering what had happened, a laughter was heard and Celestia recognized the voice, she called out to Discord and demanded to know where the elements were, he just quipped that she was no fun, before showing himself in the pained windows.
Content. Contempt is disdain and disrespect. Content is peaceful happiness.
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Thanks for that, can't believe I used the wrong word there, that's a major blunder on my part, it should be fixed now.
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No worries. I find people make that particular mistake a lot.
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Heh, I wonder why, it's not like I don't know the difference or anything, I just used it without thinking it seems.
Sister.
This is getting good. I eagerly await the next part.
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... How do I keep making mistakes like that? I swear I don't normally make mistakes like that.
I like this story, it's been awhile since I've seen a new Twilight changeling story. I feel the story works best when you are creating your own scenes and not just going off the retread of episodes of the show. For large pieces of this story you copy pasted the scripts of the show with small twists in wording here or there, that lost my interest fast. I hope you continue with less formulaic scenes in the future, because when doing its own thing, this story is enjoyable.
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Well, like I said in the author notes, this was the last one I had planned that was directly connected to any of the real episodes, I don't know if I'll connect any future chapters to actual episodes, but the ones I'm working on right now are at least ones I'm making from scratch.
These chapters were just important to do as similarly as what happened in the actual show, with a few things altered of course, mostly because Twilight has yet to find out the whole truth and it does at least set a nice scene since she meets Chrysalis in here, which was important to happen.
needs a quick correction
needs another quick correction
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Thanks for that.
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glad to help
Just like one does not simply walk into Mordor, eh?
Also, a minor thing I noticed, your use of "allot". Here, let me find the definition, so you can see my issue.
verb (used with object), allotted, allotting.
1. To divide or distribute by share or portion; distribute or parcel out;apportion:
To allot the available farmland among the settlers.
2. To appropriate for a special purpose:
To allot money for a park.
3. To assign as a portion; set apart; dedicate.
In the three places it was used, you clearly want to use "a lot" instead.
Nothing else caught my eye this time, which generally means that nothing else got in the way of my reading experience.
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Hmm, really? I was under the impression 'allot' was also used for things like meaning a whole bunch of stuff, are you sure of that? If so I wonder why my friend who's a teacher never told me whenever I made that mistake then... Ah, but that has nothing to do with you, sorry for mentioning it... In fact, I don't know why I'm leaving this awkward part in my message even though I'm just typing it right now and can easily remove it.
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Well, I looked up the definition before I posted, so I am pretty sure. I am no expert, though, and if I am wrong I will accept that.
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Hmm, alright then, I'll ask my friend next time I talk to him, if he tells me the same thing then I'll change the spelling and let you know.
Well, that or if more people tell me of course, I want to make it as enjoyable to read for people as possible afterall.
Thanks for telling me this by the way.
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No problem. And I am looking forward to more, of course.
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Heh, good to hear, I hope you'll like the next chapter that I've got planned for next week then.
Salivating for more
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I haven't spoken to my friend yet, but from what I checked out online, I can only say you were right, so I looked through all my chapters and altered it so it now says "a lot" rather then "allot".
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Heh, I hope to satiate that hunger for more soon in that case.
Okay, monster in french is 'monstre', not 'montre'.
A 'Montre' is a watch, so I was very confused until I read the author note ^^'.
Except this, it was a good chapter.
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I know that it's not the true translation, but I did it in the same way that sheep became mutton, since the actual translation was mouton, same with chicken which became pullet even when the actual one was poulet and with cow which was boeuf and became beef, they got altered slightly when they were Anglicized, I simply did the same with monster as it would normally be monstre and became montre.
Looking forward to seeing what will happen!
Either the exile changelings are wrong, Chrysalis got a lot stronger in those 1,000 years, or I never want to see a strong queen in my life because Equestria will be fucked
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Well, Chrysalis would have been able to defeat Celestia just like she had in the show if the wedding hadn't turned out differently in my story, so she's definitely more powerful then she used to be, but no, the whole she was weak thing is basically just the other queens making her look bad to make themselves look good for their own hives aswell as other hives, in order to boost the morale and such, they can't have their subjects thinking their weak, now can they?
That said, there may be a few strong ones that meant it and there are likely a few that got stronger over time aswell.
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Heh, I'm glad you like it.
i find that good stories hare hard to find and this is a good concept of a Twilight as a Changling. Good stories of this kind that haven't stalled in the middle is rather rare these days. love to see a good story that is new/updates lately.
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Thanks, I don't know if I got to the middle point just yet though, I actually have plenty of ideas for this story, though at this point I'm not yet sure how to connect them, I'm even considering making different follow up stories for some if they can't connect properly or if I feel like they'd be better on their own.
Also, I originally made several chapters in advance to have a slight buffer, but I may have posted the first few too close too each other, since I'm actually having a bit of trouble writing the next chapter, so I may have to lengthen the time a bit for when I upload future chapters, but that's about it.
That doesn't sound ominous.
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Wow, did you really already read the whole chapter? That's impressive, I only just put it up.
I think spike should find out Twilight's past and accept it for Twilight is an older sister and best friend and in cannon spike is the most accepting of changelings like Thorax
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Don't worry, I've got plans for all of them eventually, also while family bonds are among the strongest, they can also be among the cruelest at times, so wether it's a good or bad reaction you'll just have to see at the time itself.
chattered
Shattered
Good story by the way
Like where this is going. Keep up the good work!
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Thanks for that, I'm surprised no one else caught it till now.
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Thanks, I'll certainly try, that's for sure.
MOAR
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Thanks to a sudden burst of inspiration, I should have another one up this Friday.
Also, let me return that MOAR towards you for 'Little Star', I do quite enjoy it afterall.
Not thrilled with Flutters getting wounded like that.
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That's understandable, I'm sure there will be many that think that way about some part of this story, but in the end this story is supposed to have a dark element to it, at least he's doing what he can for her in the end.
I find this hyper competent and OP changeling attack to be very hard to swallow. Didn't find it believable in the show and don't here.