Bermuda Beginnings

by ScarFox9700

Chapter 12: Aftermath of Stupidity, Grand Tours, Epiphanies, and More Medical Attention

Once Both Tinker and Taylor were able, they both tried to sit up again. They both managed to do so, but unfortunately, there was one small problem. Due to the heavy straining that both of them had done to their arm muscles, all of them locked up completely! They couldn't pull their limbs apart, and it hurt them to try. After trying for a few minutes without success, Taylor slumped back to the floor.

"MEDIC!!!!!" He cried.

"Um, no medics here, but would two nurses be enough?" Redheart asked.

"Sure", Tinker groaned, "Just see if you can get us apart."

"We'll try our best." Starlight tried to be optimistic.

With that, both of the nurses got down, and examined the entangled limbs in question.

"Yeah, your limbs are locked up pretty tight. Starlight and I'll have to work really hard to massage them enough to get your guys apart."

"Just do what must be done, although if you could, please try to hurry, it is rather painful being stuck like this."

"We'll try Mr. Taylor."

And with that, Starlight got to work on Tinker's foreleg, while Redheart got to work on Taylor's arm.

"You really had him dead to rights out there Champ" Redheart laughed. If that crate hadn't broken, I'm sure that you would have won!"

"Thanks Miss Redheart", Taylor sighed, "You're the best."

"I know, and you always know just what to say to make me smile."

While this was happening, Tinker and Starlight were also having a conversation of their own.

"Wow, for a stallion, you sure have some nice muscles!"

"You, you really think so?"

"Yep!" Starlight giggled. "And if that crate hadn't broken, then maybe you really would have beaten Mr. Taylor."

TInker sighed. "Maybe. Or maybe we both would have passed out from exhaustion. I've seen strong in my time, but Taylor is something else. For a human, he really knows how to hold on to the end."

"Yeah, Humans really are amazing. And just think, if you guys hadn't done that hoof-wrestling contest, we wouldn't even be having this conversation right now."

"Yeah, you're right, we wouldn't. Humans really are amazing! They do things that get you introduced to cute mares!"

(Yes, it really is crazy if you think about it. Twilight Sparkle owes her existence to Tinker and Taylor's stupidity. They fought, got hurt, Starlight helped Tinker, things happened, Nightlight was born, he met Velvet, things happened, and Twilight was born. Coincidence? I don't think so......)

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Eventually, after about 15 minutes of massaging, the two nurses finally managed to get the fighter's limbs apart.

"AUGH!!!!!" They both cried.

"OW, OW, OW!!!!!! Pins and Needles!" Taylor yelped as he shook his arm, trying to get the blood flowing again.

"No Kidding!!!!" TInker agreed.

It was another close to 5 minutes before they both finally settled down. Once they had, it was time for Tinker to report back to the barracks.

"Well, tonight was fun, but I've got to get going."

"Aww, do you have to go already?" Starlight was sad.

"Yeah, I'm afraid so. I'm going to have to be back to the barracks for the evening roll call."

"But we will see you tomorrow, right Tinker?" Taylor asked.

"Most likely. I'll see you around Taylor."

"See you around Tinker."

And with that, Tinker and the rest of the guards left to go back to their barracks. After they'd left, Celestia offered to give Taylor, the doctor, and the two nurses a tour of the castle before nightfall.

"Sure", Taylor agreed. "I've been needing a break from all of the strenuous contests that I just took part in!"

Celestia nodded, and then began the tour. It began in the castle's main hall, and worked it's way around the entire castle, as well as the gardens and grounds. From Taylor's perspective, it was mostly just long lectures and stories about the history of the architecture, or a point of interest in particular. Every now and gain though, Celestia would stop at a point of interest that really held Taylor's attention.

"Whoa, what's that?" Taylor asked, pointing to a weird looking statue in one of the castle's gardens. The statue seemed to be some kind of serpent, bit it's arms, legs, and horns were all wonky, and seemed to be from a vast array of creatures forced together into one.

"That's Discord." Celestia looked at the statue with disgust. "He was the god of Chaos, and was a constant pest during my mother's reign. He tried to take the throne from her, but was stopped time and time again. After my mother passed, and her rule was handed over to me, Discord tried once again to steal the throne. Finally, to ensure that he would never interfere with my family's reign again, I fought Discord in one final epic duel, and I defeated him once and for all. I then encased him in stone, and there he still stands today, just waiting to cause more chaos and mischief."

Taylor was surprised. "Wait, you mean to tell me that he's still alive in there, even after all these years?!"

"Yes Dear", Celestia turned away, shaking her head, "He really is still alive in there. Frozen in time."

"Wowsers."

As Taylor turned away to leave, a piece of the statue's pedestal suddenly fell off. "Uh oh, that's not good." Taylor then picked the piece up, and went to see if it could be reattached. He still didn't believe that Discord really was still alive inside.

"I wonder....."

Taylor then reached up his hand, and knocked on one of Discord's legs. However, aside from the sound of his knuckles on stone, there was no response.

"Just as I thought", he remarked, "Just a creepy looking statue, nothing more."

After setting the piece back into place, Taylor then went to rejoin the group, completely unaware of what he had just done. Because he had tapped Discord on the leg, he accidentally caused the leg to start cracking! The crack was hardly noticeable at the time, being only about the size of a human hair, but give it a number of decades, and another generation, Discord would be free to bring chaos to Equestria once more.

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Once Taylor was back with the group, the final stop on the tour was a massive hallway full of stained glass windows.

"Holy Toledo!" Taylor stared in absolute awe. "This is the entire history of Equestia displayed out in windows!"

The tour started at the most recent addition, the Banishment of Nightmare Moon, and worked its way back to the first window. Taylor saw Celestia's coronation, the birth of Princess Luna, the origins of Discord, the banishment of Tirek to Tartarus, and the assimilation of his brother into Equestrian society. He gazed in awe at Celestia's mother, Princess Faust, in all of her splendor, and shuddered at the war with Fate that almost completely destroyed Equestria. Finally, he came to the reign of Princess Stardust. He saw the building of Canterlot Castle, the first inhabitants of Cloudsdale, and the joining of the three Pony tribes on the first Hearth's Warming Eve. He then looked wonderingly at the window where she first arrived in Equestria.

"But how did she get to Equestria?" Taylor thought to himself. Taylor then skipped a few windows to get to the oldest one of all, and what he saw, shocked him so badly, that it remained permanently burned into his memory, and give him chills every time he thought about it.

"Are you alright Mr. Taylor?" She noticed that he suddenly got very pale.

All of a sudden, the memories of his earlier epiphany came flooding back to him. As he looked from one window to the next, wide-eyed, sweating, and getting paler by the minute, both Redheart and Starlight rushed to his side. He saw the Garden of Eden in all of it's glory before the Fall of Man. Adam and Eve were there, with Stardust standing off to the side. Overhead was a bright white cloud that Celestia said represented the Creator.

Taylor then looked at the next window. He saw Adam and Even standing next to a tree that had a snake in it. It appeared that they had eaten of the fruit of the tree, and were fleeing in terror. The snake appeared to be laughing. Stardust was here too, and she was eating the fruit that they had dropped on the ground.

The next window was the Creator dishing out punishments for those who had eaten the fruit, as well as for the snake, who now looked more like an Evil Entity. The next window showed the splitting of Earth and Equestria, and all of the corruption and wickedness that followed. The Creator watched all of this with great sadness. He was sorry that he had ever created the World in the first place.

The final windows depicted a massive flood that wiped out all life on Earth, except for a select few who were on board a massive boat. On the Equestrian side of this flood, the final connections between the two worlds snapped forever, and they became fully separate from one another. As time wore on, both worlds forgot that the other even existed. The very last window of all was the first day of Stardust's reign, and the Creator giving her His blessing.

After witnessing all of this on the level that he had, Taylor suddenly fell unconscious into the forelegs of the two nurses. He was deathly pale, and was sweating and shaking very badly.

"We need to get him back to his quarters, I can take care of him from there!" Red heart said worriedly.

"Very good Miss Redheart!" Celestia then clapped her hooves, and a servant came running.

"Yes, my Princess?"

Please assist this good doctor and these two nurses in getting Mr. Taylor back to his quarters. He's had quite a shock, and needs to be revived."

The servant nodded. "Yes, my Princess."

He got on one side of Taylor, and with the doctor on the other side, they were able to get Taylor onto their backs, and carry him back to his room. Celestia and the two nurses were right behind them.

"I can't believe that this just happened", Starlight whispered.

"Me neither", Redheart agreed. "He saw the windows, and he must have remembered his earlier epiphany. After he put all of the pieces together, it proved to be too much for him, and he blacked out."

"I just hope that he's going to be ok", Celestia said softly.

"I'm pretty sure that he will be", Redheart reassured her. It was shock mostly. He simply got overwhelmed, and fainted. It should be very easy to revive him."

With that, they continued on their journey to get Taylor back to his room, wondering the whole way on whether or not he was going to be ok.

Author's Note:

Well, here it is, Chapter 12. I hope that you all enjoy it, and as a word of warning, Chapter 13 contains some "Questionable" scenes towards the end, hence the reason for the "sex" tags. Don't worry though, after that chapter, that tag no longer applies. Just a warning, and I hope to see you all for chapter 13.

ScarFox out for now!

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[The good hunter]

good story

[Starscribe]

They couldn't pull their limbs apart, and it hurt them to try. After trying for a few minutes without success, Taylor slumped back to the floor.

-I don't think you need me to point out this isn't possible. Unless one of them is a robot... are ponies robots?

TInker sighed. "Maybe. Or maybe we both would have passed out from exhaustion. I've seen strong in my time, but Taylor is something else. For a human, he really knows how to hold on to the end

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-Typo, though I don't really point out all of those. Also, more importantly, the ponies in your world are pretty big. Like, the doctor stood at eye level for Taylor. There's no chance a human could compete with that (doubly so if it was an earth pony, whom we've seen literally drag houses around, but I don't actually remember if Armor was an earth pony or not so I'll give that a pass)

(Yes, it really is crazy if you think about it. Twilight Sparkle owes her existence to Tinker and Taylor's stupidity. They fought, got hurt, Starlight helped Tinker, things happened, Nightlight was born, he met Velvet, things happened, and Twilight was born. Coincidence? I don't think so......)

-This kind of thing, again. These asides don't serve any purpose in the narrative. This kind of comment is wanting to have one's cake and eat it too as a writer.

For a human, he really knows how to hold on to the end."

For a human? You know of exactly one human in the whole world, what the heck does that even mean to you? Imagine if an alien called a jeldorf came to earth and you had a wrestling contest. Would it really make sense at the end of the contest to say "Gee, for a jeldorf, you're really strong!" For all you know the jeldorf you met is actualy a super weakling amoung its kind and any other jeldorf would've wiped the floor with you.

Eventually, after about 15 minutes of massaging, the two nurses finally managed to get the fighter's limbs apart.

-I already pointed out how completely nonsensical this was, right?

After setting the piece back into place, Taylor then went to rejoin the group, completely unaware of what he had just done. Because he had tapped Discord on the leg, he accidentally caused the leg to start cracking! The crack was hardly noticeable at the time, being only about the size of a human hair, but give it a number of decades, and another generation, Discord would be free to bring chaos to Equestria once more. Taylor would have passed on at that point, but he was kind enough to leave the villain to his untried successor, another human, but that's another story!

- Once again, this kind of remark really doesn't belong. Aside from the fact that it's the lack of harmony among ponies that let Discord escape (Taylor is being perfectly harmonious in this scene), breaking into an aside that explains in no uncertan terms what happens in the future is awful for drama. It makes it feel like, as I said before, the real story is in the future and all the events we're reading about now have "already happened." Not a good setup.

With both this and the Starlight thing, you could easily have kept in some elements by being more subtle. For instance, you could cut out the whole awful paragraph I just quoted, and instead say: "After setting the piece back into place, Taylor then went to rejoin the group. What he didn't see was the hairline crack he had made in the stone."

Bam, done. We as the audience are left wondering what the concequences will be, whether he'll escape in this story or whether he actually caused the escape in "modern times." But by telling us explicitly what will happen, the drama is spoiled.

"Once Taylor was back with the group, the final stop on the tour was a massive hallway full of stained glass windows."

-This is the throne room, not a random hallway. He's already been in the throne room before.

He saw the Garden of Eden in all of it's glory before the Fall of Man. Adam and Eve were there, with Stardust standing off to the side. Overhead was a bright white cloud that Celestia said represented the Creator.

Holy crap. So remember everything I said a few chapters ago about how there was nothing wrong with having religious elements in the story so long as they helped the story, but how I felt that the last ones you used made the story worse and didn't add anything?

Well, imagine I repeat all that here times five or so. Having a character literally recieve a vision from God takes them instantly out of the ream of "fantasy hero" and either into the catagory of "religious hero" or "parody" depending on who the reader is. Neither one is good for your story, unless you're telling the story of an explicitly religious hero trying to save the day for god with his religon stuff. Given this story is about ponies, this kind of thing really doesn't belong.

"As time wore on, both worlds forgot that the other even existed. The very last window of all was the first day of Stardust's reign, and the Creator giving her His blessing."

-Very clearly a continuity error. You're looking at stained glass windows depicting scenes from earth right now. Also, multiple characters besides Celestia have expressed knowledge about Earth and humans before.

[ScarFox9700]

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Hello again Starscribe. Well, it looks like we got a long one here, so let's get to it.

First of all, like I said before, they had both been straining for so hard and so long that their arm/foreleg muscles had completely locked up. Maybe this isn't physically possible, except, this is Equestria. As we've seen before, the Laws of Physics don't always apply.

Next, Tinker is a unicorn. This is the only reason that Taylor was able to compete with him at all.

*sigh* Like I said before, Taylor left extremely strict instructions for his biography, which were passed to me by his successor, Roger White. Taylor was almost senile at that point, but orders are orders, so I left things like this in, even though I felt I shouldn't.

Tinker thought that humans were weaker than ponies. Plus, he was a royal guard captain, he should have been the best. He was surprised that Taylor beat him.

Yes, yes you did, but like I said, In Pony Equestria, Physics don't always apply.

Yeah, I see that now. Taylor was senile, and the guy who gave me his instructions had terminal illness. I'll just go ahead and fix that now. Also, I named that nurse Starlight a full year before Season 5 even aired. I kept the name because I liked it. Also, if you're referring to the the other bit with Starlight, yeah, I'll fix that too.

No, I made this a different hallway. It has some of the same windows, but this one was made for castle visitors to see, as the throne room isn't always accessible to the public.

When I said this, I meant it as a generalization. The vast majority forgot, but not everyone, or everypony. Some still remember, but they keep their opinions to themselves, for fear of being seen as loony.