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Rainbow Dash has never been a great student and to be honest she never was really bothered by it. But when she is threaten she might have to repeat the 4th grade if some changes don't happen. Rainbow starts hitting the books. Can she do it?
Loosely inspired by the image and the Simpsons episode "Bart Gets an F"
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Where I get the photo
Special thank you to NaterRang the artist allowing me to use their work.
Heads up there's some grammar issues
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Ah, I enjoyed this episode. Watched.
It's a good premise, and you seem to have a fine grasp of plot, but your grammar needs lots and lots of work! There's no excuse for not using punctuation, and lots of the words are just... well... the wrong word. It kind of seemed like English might not be your first language.
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thanks for not being rude. I went back and fixed as much grammar as i could i hope its better. btw english is my first language .
950156 I don't watch the Simpsons. I'm a Family Guy. BTW, this story has potental, but it needs a teensy bit of correcting, like the J instead of an I. Or the "Rainbow too-- slam, "Eat breakfast".
I love the idea for your story as well. I hope you continue writing it.
Grammar needs work. Maybe find an editor? Editing is a big step.
I can be your editor, Maggi399. I'm very good at spell check, English is my first subject, so maybe I can be your editor.
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I like I said before I did do some correcting but I may missed some. Please show me what I do to make this better. Thanks
950268 "A cyan filly with a rainbow mane thought to herself as she played her newly brought video game in her poster covered of The Wonder Bolts room the night before that big, important and if you a low grade you’ll be screwed exam on history Equestrian."
“Yes” lied Rainbow" needs a comma after 'Yes' and a period at the end. "Her farther" needs to be fixed. "Beforeyelling" needs a space between them. "Rainbow you too"-- "Eat breakfast" needs to be fixed.
"Rainbow repeats to tell herself", repeat, tell herself, either one works alone. "This is what you Rainbow, deserve" doesn't need a comma. You just need to carefully reread it slowly, put commas where they're needed, get rid of others, etc.
Perhaps when you finish a chapter, send it to me for it to be proofread before publishing them.
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will do thanks
950426 No probs. How exactly will this work though?
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I could email you the chapter thorough your account if your ok with that
I love it :3 being a great fan of Rainbow Dash i don't think I have ever seen one of her in school...oh wait yes i have lol anyways can't wait to see moar
(btw story was 'my roommate is a pony')
950478 You could send it to me into my Inbox on my FimFiction account, if that's what you mean.
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yep I really do need to work on my grammar
950537 So what you're saying is...I GOT THE JOB???
yes and you get a free derpy
I passed! I passed! I passed! I passed! I passed! I passed!
I kissed the teacher? *spits on ground*
When I was younger I had a vhs of the Simpsons. "Bart gets an F" was one of two episodes that was on the tape. The other one was the "Haunted Tree house of Horror". I watched the hell out of that tape.
While I do agree with the previous comments about grammar, spelling, and other mistakes, I won't repeat them. Otherwise, this story has a fairly solid start and I look forward to reading more of it.
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Ok now Im going to use that in my story lol
It's still not fixed. "Yes" . lied Rainbow.' You still need to fix "farther" instead of father. The "Rainbow you too" is still not fixed. This chapter isn't fixed, so you can't call it that. But, um, if that's what you want to call it, that's fine...
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thanks for letting me know., I just went thorough it again and fixed them. I hope its improve thanks a brunch for doing this
956721 Ok, you fixed alot of the errors, but I still see more ones: The "too" in "Rainbow, you need too" has to be corrected. After the characters say their lines, they need commas. You also need to inject periods as well at the end of the sentences. That's all so far.
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I fixed again, once again thanks0!!
959777 The "Rainbow you need too" needs to be a "to" instead. Seriously, is this how they write it where you live?
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It what word said
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fixed done finish
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Is this... yes! It's a fan fiction that, despite its grammar and spelling, is actually pretty good!
961736 Alright, it's perfect now.
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In the words of flutter shy yay
Rainbow Dash (Bart) is OOC. Other than that nice references to the episode.
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Also the test questions are from that hearts warming eve episode.
I was referring to the reference to princess "bluebell" was a reference to the Captain Bluebeard, which was one of the erroneous answers given by the twins in the episode.
This is AMAZING. I've been looking for a filly Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy story for a while. I am a Flutter Dash, or Rainbow Shy, fan afterall.
Trixie would love this too 
-Trollestia Approves
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im glad you like it
I love this story! I'd imagine Rainbow would act like that.
) Its great. 
Other than the grammar (even though I shouldn't be talking, mines not all that great either on my story
When is the next chapter?!?!?!
This seems familar...oh wait, it is! Cuz I edited it!
How good am I?
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your the best jake thanks
1215718 I do what I can, and I simply refuse to fail. I want to see this fanfic eventually completed happily and without regret!
This may be a dumb question but is Mr. Trotter a reference to the old show Welcome Back Kotter?
Cool story, by the way.
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No actually it was just a name I came up on the spot!
Saw this pop up. Thought it was a ... No-no fiction. Good thing I was wrong.
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Good?no no you mean the greatest thing ever!!
I can look over your chapters if needed. I'm not amazing but I'll catch the basics.
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go ahead, I'm wililing to as much as I get. Thanks
This is an atrocity. I cannot believe the grammar.
That's one freaky couch.
Out-of-context sentence FTW! (The good kind.)
404: Semicolon not found.
lolwut? I thought this was in Rainbow's point-of-view. Correction: "If I don't get the notes I'll get an 'F' for sure. Or maybe something worse."
Capitalized prefix FTW! (Also the good kind.)
Correction: '"This is what you deserve, Rainbow, for being an idiot. I'm not gonna get to the bus stop and use Fluttershy's notes now. You're just stupid," Rainbow said to herself.'
Correction: '"Well, great. Now I'n gonna be tardy, and not only that, but I'll have a detention. How wonderful," she said facetiously.'
Seat.
She asked about it, but she didn't talk to her yet? Not okay.
964502 You said it's perfect? This is the first chapter.
That's about it. Good story, bad grammar. kthxbai.
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I fixed them, thanks didn't even realize they more errors, Grammar is not my forte.
Grammer is hard for me because of my disablity.
2100836 All better now, if the grammar is OK! Your story is great!
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Thanks, you were a big help!!
