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sejox


A programmer that loves stories with drama and romance... and anything involving Spike


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Spike has endured being alone before. be it a couple of hours or some days, it didn't matter to him while he was an obnoxious child.

But that changed with the pass of time, he learned how precious life really is. how beautiful is to have a place to call home inside the hearts of the ones that you love. And most importantly, how difficult is to live without them.

Now Spike has to bear his feelings and fears, as a mission of friendship takes his friends through a journey. A long journey which seems to have no end.

Note: I'm currently searching for an editor to help me out with chapters two and three (and with any luck, the final one too).

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 9 )

Damn....just....damn, make friends with the colts and fillies in Ponyville, Spike there are a lot of them, talk to your mother or aunt or better yet, join them on their quest!

This is both tragic and heartwarming.....buck you. Damn it man, the feels. A few errors but honestly very impressive. SpikeBloom? Doubt it but I like the thought.

Oh shit....go Celestia! Save your son! Also it's Big Mac. A few errors but it's alright. Just be sure to clean it up a bit when the story is finished, ou have my full attention.

Im willing to edit. Call me

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I gotta say, the whole "I can beat all the timberwolves on my own, I'm badass" followed by him succeeding basically on his own is actually pretty distracting this chapter. It doesn't really fit with what Spike is capable of in the show, nor does it particularly fit with Spike as overworked-despairing Spike. Like, I could see him trying to force himself to try to do this, given the previous chapters, but it has to be an extreme change indeed for him to actually not be afraid of it.

The thing where Spike can't handle them being gone is good, though, although by the time it was four months I think detailing what other people think of his overworking himself and secluding himself would be pretty valuable to explain why they haven't tried to seriously help him yet. Or that they have but failed.

I mean, this is a kid who has been left alone, so I figure either someone would eventually take interest, or more than one person would sorta collectively figure out that something is very wrong.

sejox #6 · 1 week ago · · · Weak ·

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Applebloom seems to be the most close to spike in this fic because she is the cmc most atached to ponyville

If not by the focus of the fic, applespike could be a thing in this story.

(btw i was really drunk while writting this comment)

sejox #7 · 1 week ago · · · Weak ·

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I wanted to make it feel like more "the usual heroes of town arent here, so i'll have to try to stop them" later on spike admits that he could have ended beaten too.

I still need to get better at my writting so i can show this kinds of thoughts better.

(pd still drunk. Curse vodka and its tastyness)

I love the story so far, but I just can't help reading the title and thinking about

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You made my morning with that video, lol.

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