Twilight Sparkle and her friend's lives are put in danger when one of Zecora's potions is accidentally spilled into a batch of cupcakes. The disease spreads around Ponyville and ponies are eliminated, one by one. The last ten survivors (Twilight Sparkle, Big Macintosh, Applejack, Apple Bloom, Fluttershy, Lyra Heartstrings, Derpy Hooves, Trixie, Rarity, and Rainbow Dash) are all crammed in Applejack's barn with no escape.
Now, they have to live with each other in the barn and fight off hoards of deadly zombie ponies. If any of them make one little mistake, they could all end up dying slow and painful deaths.
WARNING: Descriptive violence.
Chapters (4)
You know...all these Zombie in Equestria stories are depressing...anypony ever write a Shaun of the Dead style one?
I love the idea, but your work could use a bit of editing. Grammatically, everything looks fine, you just need to work on pacing. It moves too quickly through the first chapter for proper tension to build up, which is one of the things that defines horror. Definitely describe things in gory detail, too. Not just gore for gore's sake, but to emphasize the horror and the pain each character is experiencing and drive the point home that something is happening that is beyond their control and unstoppable. Both of those elements ensure your readers are as freaked out as the ponies.
1151140 (MilleniumFalsehood)
For your first point, I agree with you completely. It did move fast, but after I while I got unmotivated and just rushed to finish. I am now thinking horror isn't my specialty, and I'm trying something else for my second story.
Your second point however, I'm not so sure about. I actually found it pretty descriptive (unless that's what you said, and I just interpreted it wrong or something). But I find " The blood vessels in Apple Bloom's mouth were torn apart, causing the dark red blood being propelled through the vessels to spew out onto the floor. Her teeth were crushed in Scootaloo's mouth with a horrifying crunch." to be a lot more descriptive than the usual "she bit her mouth."
guns? really?
RD!!!! FLUTTERS!!!!! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
you do not know how happy i was to find out that it was all a dream. also it was kind of like a big middle finger, but i loved it
Yay happy ending
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Do you have something against guns?
*cracks knuckles*
Oh this.
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