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This story looks interesting, I will be keeping an eye out. I will not rate yet, but it seems promising. I have currently one gripe though, you need an editor. While the grammar isn't as bad as in some other stories, the various typos, misspellings and a few bits of strange sentence structure here and there are what IMHO caused those thumb downs.
Best of luck writing.
actually really like the story, the grammar is a bit iffy but that's alright you might want to get an editor or spell checker other than that I can't wait for the next chapter
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Thank you, I'll try to find an editor yet all I know who can do it for free are way too busy to help
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Thanks, I'll look into getting an editor
using a familiar name that is out of place like Faust breaks the flow of the story, what if you had used Hillary of trump it would be jarring .
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What are you referring to specifically
I think the wolf/pup scene was to rushed.
Everything else was good thou. 👍
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Thank you, I'll add it to the re-write list
I know it's a small one but here's a spelling error,
Nathan forced the emotions down and sat up, looking around his new home. He was free in the woods, and his father could never force him to do anything as long as he stayed there. Nathan looked upon his campfire and the stick before he started trying to force a flame from it once more. He tried and tried but it was no use. He got no closer to getting a fire started and he gave up on the idea. Thankfully it was warm outside and the summer sun shone down on the clearing. He would most likely not freeze to death at night, but he needed some way to cock his food. As a sudden harsh wind wiped across his face Nathan realized he would need to build some kind of shelter, so he got up and went looking in the woods again. If he couldn't start a fire then he would at the very least keep himself safe from the wind and possible predators.