This story is a sequel to My Little Pony, Friendship is Magic: Tales From The Stallion Six
(This fic takes place in the same universe as My Little Pony, Friendship is Magic: Stallion Edition, and it is highly recommended you read at least the first twelve chapters of that, and also My Little Pony, Friendship is Magic: Tales From The Stallion Six, in order to better understand the universe of this fic. Takes place after chapter 110 of "Stallion Edition".)
For years, the Cutie Mark Crusaders have known Diamond Tiara only as a bully. A rich filly who seems to think that a cutie mark makes her superior to everypony else, and looks down on blank flanks.
But that perception is changed forever when the Crusaders successfully unseat Diamond from her position of student pony president. All of a sudden, they learn that Diamond's home life is far more complicated, and there's more to the filly than they would've assumed.
With this startling revelation, the four blank flanks find themselves aiding their once sworn enemy in the most unexpected of ways. But can they actually inspire Diamond Tiara to change for the better, or are they only making a bad situation worse?
Hello there. Great start on your "Stallion Six" version of "Crusaders of the Lost Mark". Excellent job, of course, on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up.
Just one little detail:
"You're forever in my debt!"
should be:
"I'M forever in YOUR debt!"
Beyond that, very good work and, well, now I'm off to the next chapter.
Once again, you did a very good job combining episode faithfulness with your own touches. Though, to be honest, it might had been better if Fancy WAS around to give Spoiled a good talking to. She is just as deserving of that sort of karma as her daughter, if not even more so.
But still, very good job on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up in all the right places. Well, now I'm off to the next chapter.
Once more, you did a VERY good job on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up in all the right places, as well as the combination of episode faithfulness and your own details. Well, I'll very certainly be looking forward to more of this, but will also be quite willing to be patient.
Again, very good job on this latest chapter. I love the exchanges, characterizations and climax set-up in all the right places, as well as, again, the perfect combination of episode faithfulness and your own touches. I'm very definitely going to be looking forward to more of this, but will also be very willing to be patient.
Once again, you did a great job on the second-to-last chapter. The exchanges, characterizations and epilogue set-up are all well done in all the right places. And, yeah, you definitely make some really good points in the author's notes AND you did a splendid job on combining episode faithfulness with your own touches. I'll definitely be looking forward to the epilogue, but will also be very willing to be patient.
Here's something I just thought of for the finale: at an appropriate point, after the Crusaders finally get their marks, Rumble can comment "But we will still keep trying new stuff, just for the heck of it, right? After all, just because we found our special talent at last doesn't mean we aren't good at other things too."
with somebody of your choice adding "I don't see a problem with that, so long as you are careful to only try these new things under responsible adult supervision."
Of course, if you DON'T like the dialogue idea, I profusely apologize for wasting your time and still look forward to the finale. :-D
8464402 Probably won't do that, but I appreciate the suggestion.
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Fair enough. Thanks for saying something,
Once again, excellent job on this final chapter. The exchanges, characterizations, general story wrap-up and nods to future stories are all well done in all the right places. Plus, you also did a splendid job mixing episode faithfulness with other details to make things make more sense in this universe.
I'll most assuredly be looking forward to more of your work, but will be very willing to be patient.
Could it possible for you to add a bonus chapter that tells us that aftermath with Diamond Tiara and her family, or at least make a sequel story about it?
8465126 Maybe, but what would I show?
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Diamond Tiara tells her father that her mother was the reason she was the bully in the first place. After having a complete understanding of the situation, Filthy Rich calls for a family meeting to discuss rich family should treat the "low life ponies".
8466026 Hm, I could maybe do that tomorrow.
Once again, VERY good job on this bonus chapter. :-D I just loved the exchanges and characterizations. Spoiled's karma was quite well done too. :-D
Thank you so much for including my username in the author's note.
i'll re-read this story later. you stole my idea but didn't! let me explain the part filthy threatens divorce his wife. actually happens in mine but way after the cmc get their marks! my oc dusk shine(yes I used r63 name. he's his own character!) who is pregnant with spike's child, on a date at a fancy restaurant in ponyville with an orchestra playing. after singing an aria from opera on it's stage. spoiled makes a comment about him. he slowly walks towards the rich's table,calls her out about what she did to diamond. also what happen in her marriage(I should mentioned this diamond tiara had a baby with double diamond, they got married so the baby wouldn't consider a bastard & wouldn't be a disappointment to the family. double couldn't stand her mother so one night he wrote a letter saying sorry that things didn't and left. they're aged up in my story.) so the waiter comes over puts a pitcher of milk as dusk says" well the old goes there's no crying over spilled milk!" note:it's a week days old milk. unbeknownst to him and every pony in the place featherweight on a date with pipsqueak is writing down everything that's happening! spoiled is horrified begs filthy to defend her. he turns on her after hearing what dusk has said what's been happening around him saying "we're getting a divorce, you'll not get a cent of it." she's crying as they leave and every pony applauds him. of course the night's event has reached all over equestria. of course twilight's pissed at her son actions...
if you want to pm me about my story I will be happy to tell you it! I mostly never leave this site:)
Rumble could of actually had a good role in this episode if he was in the original one.