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The Bricklayer


Slow down, you're doing fine, you can't be everything you want to be, before your time... -Vienna, The Stranger: Billy Joel. (Any Pronouns)

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So, trip to the Burned Tower in Johto region just to catch a glimpse of the famous Pokémon Entei? (Maybe even capture it?) Seems simple enough right? Well, that's Rainbow Dash's dream. Just to see that Pokémon once more. However, when the winds of October 31st blow, ghosts of the past haunt this tower and she may be the one finding herself getting burned. So, as ever, it's up to her best friend to bail her out.

Rated T for Pokémon on Pokémon violence, minor language and certain jokes.

Proofread by Magic Step and Mouth of Mush. Thanks, guys!

Written for the Fourth Flutterdash contest. Prompt is:

Nightmare Night, what a fright, give me something sweet to bite!

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Comments ( 12 )

I had heard that story of Jack before and his herbus.

Poor Rainbow she let her ego cost her but still it sounds like she has an impressive team at her disposal. Would love to see a longer story set in this universe as Rainbow try to be the very best, like no one ever was.

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Rainbow try to be the very best, like no one ever was.

You had to do that didn't you? (Funnily enough, I did think of inserting one of the Johto theme songs during the final faceoff with the Litwick and the resident Ghost Pokémon, but I eventually decided against it.)

Poor Rainbow she let her ego cost her

You know, I'm not sure if Rainbow's ego cost her anything here. Probably character shilling here, but you know how the Legendary Beasts are in-game. They never stay in one place for too long, and you'd have to be lucky to catch up to them. Besides, Rainbow did get something out of this in the end, (and I'm not just talking about her new Litwick) didn't she?

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Well the joke about the original opening song was to good to pass up. Plus it does sort of fit Rainbow Dash's personality and attitude.

At least in Wild Access we all are dodging how in the first season of Power Rangers they made horrible morphing jokes.

You're a month early for Nightmare Night, but oh well.

Anyway for a first try in a Pokemon crossover you did very well. Pokemon crossovers are some of my favourite stories here.

Also, do continue adding some real lore fact. I really like those.

Ariados allowed himself a smirk as he asked “Who you gonna call?”

:rainbowlaugh: You had to put that line. Alright I'll answer it.

Mistakes found:

Header:

minor langauge and certain jokes.

language

Chapter:

with light blue highlighting in it’s ears and back legs and paws.

its ears, back legs and paws.

Slung around round Fluttershy’s neck

a cat-like Pokemon with a gem in its forehead

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and find Entei off a rumor,

*full stop*

I must admit, I'm more interested in the Pokémon lore in this fic than the romance, even though there is little of romance. I got excited for some things that appeared here, like the fact that it's set in Johto, that Pokémon call their trainers Meema (oh gosh, that really warmed my heart), and how Pokémon can talk to their trainers, even though I don't know how they can communicate each other. I'm a little surprised you're using the Pokémon Adventures manga canon, since I don't read that manga and not a fan of it. It's not a bad thing, and as far as I know, the Adventures manga is fan favorite. Some Pokémon are quite unexpected. I mean, I do see Rainbow with a Luxray, but with a Espeon? Not the most popular option for someone like Rainbow. That and Fluttershy owning a Crobat and a Ariados, though I liked nonetheless those options.

That was a good read that lighted up my day. :twilightsmile:

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that Pokémon call their trainers Meema (oh gosh, that really warmed my heart), and how Pokémon can talk to their trainers, even though I don't know how they can communicate each other.

To be fair, I'm not sure how the Pokémon can communicate with their trainers in any of the material either, I've always just assumed that Trainers have this sort of bond with their Pokémon that allows them to understand them. (For the record, Raijin was referring to his birth mother, not Rainbow as Meema)

I'm a little surprised you're using the Pokémon Adventures manga canon, since I don't read that manga and not a fan of it. It's not a bad thing, and as far as I know, the Adventures manga is fan favorite.

Wasn't entirely from the Manga, that Team Galactic fiasco mentioned was supposed to be explained more and based more off the videogame incident from Pokémon Platinum in the Distortion World, but on the suggestion of Mush that little bit got cut. (Then again, I never read the manga, so it could have happened similarly with Platinum's adventures there as well. I dunno.)

Some Pokémon are quite unexpected. I mean, I do see Rainbow with a Luxray, but with a Espeon? Not the most popular option for someone like Rainbow. That and Fluttershy owning a Crobat and a Ariados, though I liked nonetheless those options.

Yeah, I purposely chose Espeon for unexpected points and to give Rainbow the type disadvantage. As for Fluttershy, considering she takes care of bears and walruses in-show among other things, I really didn't think a Crobat or Ariados would be that farfetched. Anyways, glad you enjoyed the fic.

This shit is good!!

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Eh, if it helps you can always look up anything you need here. God knows I needed a refresher course. (Also, sorry for the late response, been incredibly busy as of late cramming for a test, which I thankfully passed.)

https://bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Main_Page

8453072 If you've read Aura of Empathy, Rufflet calls Sunset Meema. I honestly think it's cool being able to have a strong enough affinity to communicate with your team from any of the games, especially with non-Psychic types who already have some form of telepathy like Lucario or Lapras.

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Probably should have directed that comment towards 8452983, not me. Least now he'll hopefully get it.

I was wondering if thereare going to be more entries in this AU, this was an interesting read.

Beautiful story. You should write some more of this. Or even go work for some place like that https://xn--lck0a4d411qemf.jp/%E3%82%AA%E3%83%B3%E3%83%A9%E3%82%A4%E3%83%B3%E3%83%9D%E3%83%BC%E3%82%AB%E3%83%BC/%E3%82%B0%E3%83%A9%E3%83%96%E3%83%AB-%E3%83%9D%E3%83%BC%E3%82%AB%E3%83%BC%E3%82%B3%E3%83%84/ it would be a good place to start your carreer. Of course, you need to speak the language, but it's pretty simple.

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