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wildprince15


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Hi, my name is Octavia. But most of you know me by my stage name, Vinyl Scratch. But there's one thing you don't know about her. We may call her Vinyl Scratch, but she doesn't call herself that. In fact, that's not her real name either. And there's much more to her than you might think. Want a hint? Here, let me give you a riddle:

Sound awakens me, and silence is my demise.
Sound is my lifeblood, and shows that i'm alive
Sound brings me forth. Silence shuts me down
I may not speak much, but I am always around

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First:

Hi, my name is Octavia. But most of you know me by my stage name, Vinyl Scratch.

Your description kind of gives away your twist here. It doesn't really work when you try to hint at it before a big reveal if you tell us the twist before we even read the story.

Second:
This reads more like the start of a story than a complete one. It's because it ends in an open-ended manner with the events of the flashback. As a result, it doesn't really tie into the first part of the build-up. I would recommend either focusing more on the first meeting and fleshing it out, reducing some of the modern events in the process if not removing them altogether, or adding a little more such as giving us a sense of what "Vinyl" feels about it, which would also allow the story to finish out the day and giving a way to tie it all together better.

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Thanks for your help bud. I see what you mean about the whole cliffhanger

Octavia and Vinyl as a type of Jekyll and Hyde?!?!? :pinkiegasp::rainbowderp:
I didn't see it coming!

But I agree with the commenter above: it looks more the start of a story than a complete one - and it is one is really intriguing to see continued!

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