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Cocaine


Part of a machine, I am not a human being.

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There is a problem, and it is staring me right in the face. I want to solve it, make a change for the better for once in my life. Do something good.

There happens to be a gun between us.


Contains: Strong language, badass Dash, badass AJ, crazy shit, surprises, and AppleDash fluff.

I love you. Hurricanes are bitches.

Also written for the AppleDash Contest; Second Chances

So this got featured. I don't give a shit if it was for like, half an hour. I'll take it to the bank and cash that shit.

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Comments ( 30 )

It wasn't until they said a name that it all slammed into place.

Nice work.

~Skeeter The Lurker

I've got to say that was probably one of the most confusing action scenes I've ever read.
It might just be my slowness but I only pieced together that Jay was Applejack at the end and I had no idea who was who until you mentioned Gilda and then it took me a while to figure out Gilda was there since the beginning :facehoof:

Okay so, what I got so far is that
Rainbow was out on the streets and Gilda took her in. They became friends and Gilda had Rainbow do dirty jobs (including criminal activies?) and on the way they both got addicted to tranquilizers, stimpacks and andrenaline. Then Rainbow decided to head off, then came back for a fresh start, then something bad must have happened between them, then they split up again, and then Rainbow fell in love with Applejack, and then Rainbow did some bad shit which somehow involves Scootaloo who was hospitalized from a knife attack involving Gilda and now Gilda is trying to kill Rainbow Dash but little does she know that Rainbow is invincible and Gilda dies.
Edit:added spoiler tags

Damn dude... I like it :rainbowdetermined2: That was some shit you see at the end of a movie, :yay:
Nicely done man, nicely done

Oh my GOD. beautiful. Just beautiful.

8425888
Dude! Spoiler tags, please!! That's most likely a dramatic reveal and you just put it on the second comment. Not cool.

This is so FUCKING MAJESTIC!!!!

I don't think I've ever clicked on a story this fast.
Masterfully written, as usual. I really like the action scenes, and holy crap, you weren't kidding when you mentioned badass AJ and Dash.
I like those standalone-stories that still feel like they're part of a bigger story arc, as you can probably tell from my stuff, so I really enjoyed this one.
That ending though. Bloody heartwarming.

Also...

more fucked than a Tuesday

This was frickin' glorious! :rainbowlaugh:

Once again, great work, as usual!

8425888
As our wise and beautiful god-lord Matthew Colville says, as a writer it is not my mission to make sure you understand what I think the story means. I present a product to the reader, and they determine what it means.

Sometimes a reader does not understand something going on in the story, and that just may be intentional.


8425785
You are a beautiful snuggle lord.

Also don't forget to add it to the Appledash folder!


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Thanks guys. <3


8426259
I fucking hate Tuesday man. We should nuke it, but hey! Thanks man. You know I always love your feedback. Love ya! <3

8425888
Thanks for ruining it for me.

8425888
Thanks for adding spoilers. <3 Much love!

This was awesome

8426699
I'd love to hear your reasoning.

Dash kicking Gilda out of a moving car made my day. Thanks for writing this.

8426781
Thank you for commenting! You majestic fucking eagle, you <3

Me, the entire time: JUST DIE. LITERALLY ANYONE DIE. DON'T EVEN CARE IF IT'S GILDA, JUST SOMEONE DIE ALREADY. This fight scene just goes on forever and I HATE HOW IT KEPT ME SUSPENDED THE WHOLE TIME.

Apparently only a shot to the head can kill anyone, confirmed. Absolutely nothing else will suffice.

10/10 for realism for this awesome read.

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The fans that stick around are the ones that I really care about. Basically...one Lumox6 is all I need. The other views, comments, w/e are extra.

Btw, I didn't know there were different types of Cocaine addictions. :p <3

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Haha, man. Adrenaline - natural and the shot - can do some crazy fucking shit to you. But hey! I'm so very happy to hear you enjoyed it. Thanks for the feedback, and I love you. <3

This was pretty good. If anyone sees this comment and is on the fence about reading through it like I was, give it a chance. As far as extended fight sequences with little context until the end goes, this is worth your time.

This was interesting.

Your offering of this story has been found acceptable.

So sayeth the bear.

The last bit just about had me on the ground laughing. Did not expect that after how serious the rest of the story was

8427902
Wow man! That's one of the nicest comments I've ever gotten! Thanks dude. You get a whole hug.


8427969
Thanks man! Tell your cat I said hi.


8428068
lol I'm glad to hear you enjoyed it. <3

8428625
You're welcome. If I had any one real complaint about your story its that your chosen tags may be working against you. I don't think it needs the Sad tag, and while there is implied darkness, it's not a particularly Dark story either. Those two tags were a bit of a hurdle for me in the initial decision whether or not to try out this story. I decided to try it out but other readers like me may not.

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Bam! I updated them, because i totally agree! <3

Thanks man :)

Before I read this, what is the Gore tag for ?
And how bad does it get ?

8429058
Not that crazy, man. Refer to this comment,

This was pretty good. If anyone sees this comment and is on the fence about reading through it like I was, give it a chance. As far as extended fight sequences with little context until the end goes, this is worth your time.

Much love.

That was awesome.

Honestly a little curious about what the wider context might’ve been. Good story.

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thanks man. you a real one.

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