Everyone knows that Sunset Shimmer and Rainbow Dash are the bravest girls at CHS. But when the duo travels into Sunset’s mind to fight her literal inner demon—a shapeshifter that will take the form of their worst fears—they'll have to face a threat they never expected: each other.
Originally written for the Writeoff Association's September contest, "True Colors," where it won 4th place.
Thanks to Light Striker, Quill Scratch, Maskedferret, Not_A_Hat, and Chudo for pre-reading, as well as the whole Writeoff Association for their critique on the first draft.
Chapters (4)
Is this a SunDash fic?
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Shipping? No.
*licks computer monitor*
Tastes like Sunnybunny.
Nice interweaving setup. You captured Fluttershy very well too.
Layers built upon layers. I like how you build depth with minimal word usuage and leaving enough space for the reader to imagine.
Interesting. This is pretty good, I look forward to seeing where it goes from here.
you've got an interesting concept here Dubs. I'll have a look later on.
Is this a Sci-Twi x Sunset fimfic?
Back in the Writeoffs this was 4th place on my finals slate, and I'm sure it's only gotten more polished since then. Glad to see it come to FIMFic!
i cant see sunset acting that way to roseluck her first instinct is to show empathy to others it feels kinda forced to create this drama for sunsets ive changed thing
also i ant see sunset putting a demon in her head ever feels like a way to put the blame for her past actions on it rather than her self cheapining her development
uh after the first movie sunset was not angry she was to bsuey hating her self notice in rainbow rocks she spends most of her time sitting off to the side and keeping her opinions to her self she wouldnt snap at them for trying to help her she would more likely just run off to cry alone
all anger she had at that point was directed at her self
...Fluttershy, is there something you need to say?
Oh hell yeah! Another great Dubs story with a side of sunlight?! I'm so fucking down for this!
Okay, it's definitely interesting. Although I think I sprained my brain a little reading it.
For some reason I got a vibe of Evil Within except Fluttershy trying new Sunset's stuff.
I am loving this!
How soon until the next chapter???
Ooh, psychological. I get the feeling we're going to need a lot of Fluttershy interludes if this goes where I think it will. Eagerly looking forward to more.
Is this a Sunset x Twilight fic? If not why did you add it to the Sunset Shimmer x Twilight Sparkle (SunLight) group
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You should read it and see why.
8494333 Its kind of nice to know what Im getting into before I read it.
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The third chapter is mostly done, so it should be out relatively soon. Thanks for reading!
To be fair, I really can't blame Rainbow Dash for being horrified by the thought of being swarmed by insects like that (if that's what was being implied there); I've been attacked by both ants and hornets before, albeit not at once, for which I am very thankful. Even with as much as I genuinely love bugs- I've had a pet tarantula before and let her rest on my neck and shoulders without fear- those situations will make you freak out, and I can't even imagine just how sheerly paralyzing that kind of terror must be if one's greatest fear is arthropodous in nature.
I suddenly want to see Fluttershy's goth stage.
Good stuff yo. I always love when EQG Rainbow Dash is a little shit. I especially love her constant mis-remembering of the monsters name.
Looking forward to seeing the rest.
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I wrote her as one! She was adorable.
So, Rainbow, what were you saying about being fearless?
Great fic, I love the concept and the writing! I'll definitely be sticking around.
I also love your characterisation. Dash still didn't hesitate in potentially sacrificing herself for Sunset, even after that awful fight. That's the Element of Loyalty alright.
And your little tidbits about Fluttershy's goth/punk-phase are hilarious. I can't wait to see what she'll look like once Dash and Sunset wake up.
I feel like a Rainbow should have noticed this sooner. But, then again, Rainbow is a deeply stupid horse.
Plot hole: they cannot all fit in the house at he same time. Fluttershy, too, is a plot hole for making them share the house.
In between doodles of Starlight Glimmer being dunked in boiling grape cough syrup.
Anyway, you should probably finish this, or you, too, will be deemed a plot hole.
When is chapter 3 going to be posted? I need to get my read on!
Wwould bribes help finish this? It's a hell of a tease right now.
I look forward to the next chapter with great interest.
Posh helped
[Inception Noises]
This was a well set up punchline.
Not many stories return after a year long gap.
huh.
I'm curious as to what else can be done.
Is there any chance this might update?
Thank you for updating and wrapping up another story, Dubs. It's nice to see the girls move towards wrapping up another struggle.
But did Rainbow ever save the babies
Solid work. I'm glad to see this story reach its conclusion.
Sunset:"Rainbow . . no offence or anything but . . i actually wanna pass my classes . ."
I've been waiting an update for years... thank you.
And Sunset herself did go into 'bully mode' infront of Roseluck too. Sooooo, they're both tied.
Now there's something Eleven from Stranger Things would agree with.
Talk about a serious problem alright.
I find that hard to believe.
This is why you shouldn't play with hammers, or else that will happen.
Damn!
Agreed.
Well, this is just great.
I'm pretty sure it might be hours over days Dash.
Yeah, I think I know where this might be going.
herself how awful*
Damn!
Oh shit!
Not good!!!
I can relate regarding the mention of not going on saying response, it's kinda due to my disability I have...
So long!