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WakelessAltair


Um I'm a guy who's read a bit of MLP fanfic. I decided to make an account. I might write something someday I guess

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All of Equestria will be changed when one stallion takes the law into his own hands, Is he a menace? Is he our saviour?

What starts out as petty revenge will turn into legend when Fancy Pants dons the cape and the cowl to combat crime and villainy.

He is vengeance. He is the night. He. Is. Batmane

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 44 )

All right. You have my attention. :moustache: Now amuse me.

Interesting start I will be keeping an eye on this.

Like'd, Fav'd, Watch'd

I didn't even read it but I gave you a thumbs up for the picture and title alone.

I found this hilarious! I joked about this happening in my story. It earns a favorite. :pinkiehappy:

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I will try my best Lord Focusphobia

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You should read it too, its pretty much the part of this that I came up with myself. I heard the title Batmane Begins somewhere else, and decided to use it.

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Good to know its being enjoyed :D

On that note, Im thinking about finding some prereaders, you or anyone else interested?

Batman? You have my attention :rainbowkiss:

This is going to be awesome:pinkiehappy: this is pretty good for a first fic looking forward to more.:yay:

OMG I love batman too :pinkiehappy:

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I cant tell you guys how glad I am that you enjoy this :D

Although its only after seeing some of the positive responses that I started to think, "Oh crap, I should've added this or that to the chapter"

Ill try have chapter 2 up in a few days, after I do a bit of story planning...

And homework or something, but who needs school when you write fanfic?

924964Who needs anything when there's Ponies:scootangel:

Pure. F***ing. Genius.

We. Want. More. NAO! :flutterrage:

Oh yeah, 5/5. :ajsmug:

Fancypants, as Batmane? Him!?

Still, this is a thousand times better than some of the other "stories" I see on a daily basis.

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I wanted to use a character who already existed. Mainly because If I made a new character (e.g. Bruce Mane), I'd probably end up just making Batman again except he's a pony. I used Fancy Pants because it gives me more restrictions, which means I have to be slightly more creative.

It just seems like it would be more interesting for people to read this rather than a straight rip off of the Batman plot.

You might want to space it better, using a new paragraph when a different character speaks or something new is happening; other than that this is looking really good.

I agree with Border, start a new paragraph when someone different speaks its easier to read and makes voice acting it easier. Poor Fancy :fluttercry: but soon he will become such a BADASS:pinkiehappy:

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Ill go through and edit that out now.

And thats the plan, I've never really wrote action before though so it should be interesting

Holy sh** just looked at my published second paragraph. WHERE DID ALL MY EDITING GO?

Just read this and let me tell you. Don't worry about procrastinating too much. It's fine if it takes a week or so. Last time I fought procrastination for a story I wrote nearly 10,000 words in a week. Not good for sleep.

Story's fine so far.

Great set up. I'm looking forward to the rest, and I especially can't wait to see if you'll implement villains like Scarecrow or Joker. That would be awesome. :pinkiehappy:

Well, overall very well written, but a little fast. Let's hope the pace slows so that the awesomeness may shine through. Best of luck to ya!

Very good. Short, but good. ROCK ON DUDE!

A very nice introduction, I would like to see his transformation into the Batmane

:pinkiehappy: Excited to see Fancypants train.

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THE AWESOMENESS.... I shall follow


*clap**clap**clap**clap**clap**clap**clap*

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Not quite, I decided to keep the Ra's part, but for legal purposes I will be changing his last name.

You dont get paid very much when you're a fanfic writer. (that is to say I dont get paid at all) :applecry:

1028580 Meh, I knew you would probably change the name, but I guess it's supposed to be the same character, therefore...Lazarus Pits!

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Lazarus Pits? What Lazarus Pits? I uh, dont know what you're talking about (shifty eyes)

Keep 'em coming mr. altair, keep 'em coming.:pinkiehappy:

Ra's al Ghul:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp: by the way what did you think of the new batman movie. I personally didnt like it They Ruined Bane:twilightangry2:

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I've never been called Mr. Altair before :pinkiesad2:

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I actually really enjoyed it. Sure in terms of themes and symbolism it wasnt as good as The Dark Knight or Batman Begins, but as a closing to Nolans trilogy it was great.

Tom Hardy did a great job as Bane, he made the film just so enjoyable to watch, and every scene that he was in he just had such presence. He always felt like the biggest guy in the room.

As for Banes character, all I can say is that it was a different interpretation. He was still incredibly smart and was more than a match for Batman physically. The lack of Venom was a little disappointing but I liked the idea of him taking drugs to suppress a great pain. Its sort of like how Nolans films gave Joker a carved on smile rather than just a permanent grin.

Joseph Gordon Levitt was great as Blake, I was wondering about his character being a good fit for the series but he did a great job.

On the whole it was just a great experience for me, there were a few bad points sure, but no movies perfect. I especially applaud the people behind the film for deciding to cut it off at three films, its hard usually to let go of big money makers.

Wow, look at me go, If I spent as much time writing as I did analyzing films we might be up to my Joker secti- :pinkiegasp: whoops, spooooillers

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Im trying to improve on the length of my chapters, I'm still pretty new to this "writing for fun" thing.

Ive got a lot to improve on, so any tips or advice, things you did or didnt like would be incredibly helpful

1115174 Oh, the making Fancy depressed on the night he asks Fleur to marry him part.... I didn't like, but life isn't perfect. Everything else about the story, I like.

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