I'm an artist who happens to dabble in writing when art block hits
This story is a sequel to Stolen
Blizzard's home sits in the northernmost territory of Equestria where few ponies live. The ones that do are hardened survivalists.
When a sudden disaster takes her village and family from her she sets her sights south for survival. Her life will change when she meets 'Trouble' on her desperate search for safety, and changes her life forever.
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This is an excellent start. It grabs the readers attention. It is well written and flows well. It is a good base to start the protagonist's journey.
The only major problem is grammar and some sentence structure. But other than that, this is very, very good, and I'm looking forward to more.
Thanks for the constructive criticism. Glad to hear you're enjoying the story so far. There will be more chapters coming in a bit, keep a look out!
Oh my... this is a little different and most notably about four times longer than I remember from my editing rounds. What happened?
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I wrote more while you were awash and got impatient xD
My back up editor was free and whipped it into shape. I’ll be starting the next chapter soon and want to go over the editing with ya. :)
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Well, rather let me know whenever you do something like that
I spotted various mistakes scattered in this chapter just on the first glance...