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doomie-22
Just a guy who likes writing and reading some pony fanfiction.
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Hot as hell. I love it.
You probably ought to change the rating to “M” before any mods see. The descriptions of Starlight’s arousal are a little too much for “T”.
A few slight corrections:
I think you mean “gut”. “Gullet” is a synonym for throat.
Messes up cause and effect—as written here, you’re implying that this meal Trixie’s eating caused Spike to become friends with Donut Joe. Something like “No doubt Spike and his friend Donut Joe had provided these,” would be clearer.
And you typo’d Trixie as “Triixe” four times. You can use control+F to find them.
8409718 Feedback is always appreciated. Thanks! Glad you enjoyed the story, and thanks for the fave!
awesome and sexy story
8416199 Thank you!
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You're welcome, try my stories out the f you want. They aren't as good as yours, but involve fat pone
8419047 Aw, thanks!
This has been an enjoyable read
The flow was steady, the grammar pretty solid and the descriptions were nice, though a little more details about Trixie’s stature wouldn’t hurt. By the way, she was written very well 
8644368 Thank you. Very glad you enjoyed the story. Trixie is a hard character to write, especially since her dialogue is inconsistent. Sometimes she refers to herself in the first-person and other times in the third-person. There doesn't seem to be any rhyme or reason behind how and when she refers to herself.
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You are welcome
I’d say, the use of third person would make sense during her show or while boasting. I’d have to check it in the show though... but as I said, you did well here
8645951 Again, thank you. This story was, obviously, based on the episode "All Bottled Up", which I thoroughly enjoyed due to the fact that Trixie was stuffing her face throughout the whole episode and seemed to be obsessed with food, making me wonder when exactly Trixie became such a pig. (Not that I have ant problem with that, though.) Anyway, if you enjoyed this story, you'd probably really enjoy The Grand and Bountiful Trixie. I really loved it!
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Alright, I will check it out!
8646109 I look forward to hearing your thoughts on it.
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I really liked the build-up to Trixie’s feast, as well as Kibitz’s planning. The of course, the process of Trixie’s change was really nicely written. And then, there was Luna! 
The biggest downside was the grammar and spelling, it was often quite off 
Oh, it has been a rather amusing read
8651355 What's funny is that Trixie calls Kibitz "Kibbles" just as I was thinking of how funny it would be if she called him that. True, there were some spelling/grammar issues, but that didn't bother me enough o ruin the story for me.
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Well, they didn’t really ruin the story for me either, though they still kind of broke me out of the story here and there. I guess that’s the curse of an editor’s job, spotting every mistake there is 
Yeah, “Kibbles” was hilarious
8651420 To be fair, a lot of creative people are that way too.